tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post6347847740271618912..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #10Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger33125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-71355311690566664572008-08-04T14:35:00.000-04:002008-08-04T14:35:00.000-04:00Wonderful writing!Wonderful writing!Paulettehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11864567096626996460noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53986959222208711882008-07-23T23:32:00.000-04:002008-07-23T23:32:00.000-04:00The worse they smell, the closer they get...oh, ho...The worse they smell, the closer they get...oh, how true. The connection at the end which exists above the horrible people was very well done. Good marks.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3672342135367373542008-07-23T13:52:00.000-04:002008-07-23T13:52:00.000-04:00"peach Crayola crayon-colored cold skin"-- so true..."peach Crayola crayon-colored cold skin"-- so true! Great description!<BR/><BR/>Funerals really are strange things, aren't they? Thanks for sharing your personal observations.Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76636255540432007502008-07-19T21:08:00.000-04:002008-07-19T21:08:00.000-04:00"He knows he's the last brother left." I'm from a ..."He knows he's the last brother left." <BR/><BR/>I'm from a big family, and this really struck my heart, imagining my own brothers some day.<BR/><BR/>The aunt - well, I know what you mean, but before I knew this was a personal journal, I would have thought you put her in there more as comic relief.<BR/><BR/>Thank you for sharing something so personal to you. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44242812399542226792008-07-18T09:41:00.000-04:002008-07-18T09:41:00.000-04:00Very raw and honest. I particularly liked the por...Very raw and honest. I particularly liked the portrayal of the aunt. I can almost smell the putrid smell of her. Nicely written, Beth.Mr. Thttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16881870850519509380noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10082411900788667572008-07-16T23:24:00.000-04:002008-07-16T23:24:00.000-04:00nicely wrought, bethnicely wrought, bethlaughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52734294910856842912008-07-15T18:33:00.000-04:002008-07-15T18:33:00.000-04:00Thanks, everyone. The best part about these conte...Thanks, everyone. The best part about these contests are the give and take. I love reading the comments and giving them. You get such a good sense of community here.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39236922842243522982008-07-15T14:13:00.000-04:002008-07-15T14:13:00.000-04:00This is one of those ones that make you want to do...This is one of those ones that make you want to douse your face with a glass of cold water right afterward.<BR/><BR/>Regarding Fat Aunt Mary: maybe he is better off now.<BR/><BR/>Nice job, Beth. You never spare the good stuff.mr. schprockhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16216294034597931274noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49476889499861703632008-07-15T13:45:00.000-04:002008-07-15T13:45:00.000-04:00The paragraph that began with "Fat Aunt Mary who d...The paragraph that began with "Fat Aunt Mary who doesn’t bathe." was awesome. Just awesome.<BR/><BR/>PaulAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-71750952473449609092008-07-15T13:37:00.000-04:002008-07-15T13:37:00.000-04:00Beth, I know you said this picture was not good fo...Beth, I know you said this picture was not good for you creatively but I have to say you nailed your descriptions and characters here. I felt like the character in sensory overload. To do that in 250 words is fantastic. Really.Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6850930699726405792008-07-15T13:25:00.000-04:002008-07-15T13:25:00.000-04:00I found this even harder to read, Beth, knowing it...I found this even harder to read, Beth, knowing it came from your journal and figuring out early on it was your father's funeral. <BR/><BR/>It was definitely chilling.<BR/><BR/>My relatives may drive me crazy, but I am thankful that none of them smell.Kathleenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04399098868122212536noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16739654913774526332008-07-15T13:17:00.000-04:002008-07-15T13:17:00.000-04:00Thanks, everyone. Comments are always appreciated...Thanks, everyone. Comments are always appreciated and I'll admit it, somewhat treasured. =)<BR/><BR/>JR, thanks for quoting that line.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49136657611438121482008-07-15T00:31:00.000-04:002008-07-15T00:31:00.000-04:00"This is what China smells like." Good descriptio..."This is what China smells like." Good description. Not only does it appeal to the sense of smell; it also appeals to the visual--a crowded funeral.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-91931682667494538162008-07-14T20:38:00.000-04:002008-07-14T20:38:00.000-04:00Hair standing straight up off his head like he jus...Hair standing straight up off his head like he just got a good whiff of his wife. - Beth, so incredibly vivid and good. You always deliver, but this is really spectacular. I like knowing the inspiration from your own life.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27952660643121325982008-07-14T14:25:00.000-04:002008-07-14T14:25:00.000-04:00really a strong piece of writing. Very descriptive...really a strong piece of writing. Very descriptive and makes you feel the atmosphere, as if one is there ..Lenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787400183444796423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18999235727538199282008-07-14T12:58:00.000-04:002008-07-14T12:58:00.000-04:00I'm particularly enamored with your sentence struc...I'm particularly enamored with your sentence structuring!Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33991336178333926142008-07-14T12:52:00.000-04:002008-07-14T12:52:00.000-04:00Thanks, everyone. I just caught up on all my read...Thanks, everyone. I just caught up on all my reading for this contest and now I'm back to that point where I have too many to vote for and no way to decide. LOLBethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1610418202930887242008-07-14T11:00:00.000-04:002008-07-14T11:00:00.000-04:00The finality here is palatable through your excell...The finality here is palatable through your excellent use of the senses. I read a great deal of 'I should have ...' between the lines in this tale of loss.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67273559389435822952008-07-14T08:08:00.000-04:002008-07-14T08:08:00.000-04:00Good portrayal of what goes on in ones mind at a f...Good portrayal of what goes on in ones mind at a funeral. I could see it all as if I was there. -RitaMy crazy lifehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05631522969768435267noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11618685809938089392008-07-13T19:41:00.000-04:002008-07-13T19:41:00.000-04:00Parabolist, I think that's the best comment I've e...Parabolist, I think that's the best comment I've ever received. I thank you very much for it.<BR/><BR/>Sameera, you can't get colder than dead, right? =)Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2522480445406242042008-07-13T17:17:00.000-04:002008-07-13T17:17:00.000-04:00Well narrated!Though it leaves you cold,it's the u...Well narrated!<BR/><BR/>Though it leaves you cold,it's the ultimate truth of life.Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75475914475109907512008-07-13T13:34:00.000-04:002008-07-13T13:34:00.000-04:00Your truth is overwhelming in this piece. The des...Your truth is overwhelming in this piece. The description was flawless.Parabolisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15626544847023612125noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69257962305885266562008-07-13T11:42:00.000-04:002008-07-13T11:42:00.000-04:00Well, it was me in my 30's, but still everyone wan...Well, it was me in my 30's, but still everyone wanted to hug me. Blech is right.<BR/><BR/>MYPinTA, that really is my Aunt Mary and her husband. Boy, are they ever special to me.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22575294840868302892008-07-13T00:53:00.000-04:002008-07-13T00:53:00.000-04:00My eyes are tearing from the imaginary smell of Au...My eyes are tearing from the imaginary smell of Aunt Mary. Hoooleeee. That was a vivid description.NYPinTAhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03098252725082332177noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60169999418202581522008-07-12T17:25:00.000-04:002008-07-12T17:25:00.000-04:00Interesting. I could see, smell, and feel this one...Interesting. I could see, smell, and feel this one. Good visuals. <BR/>I don't know if the mc is a child, and yet that is what I saw. Everyone wanting to "hug" you.<BR/>Ewww.<BR/>Interesting ending too....<BR/>The Gray Ghost being the motorcycle and the man.<BR/><BR/>Good job, Beth.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.com