tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post6370134320633963286..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: FeedJason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28876635345667432922009-05-19T18:31:52.493-04:002009-05-19T18:31:52.493-04:00The tone during the second read changed completely...The tone during the second read changed completely. "Beautiful naughty <I>fucking</I> things" sounds so sinister now. Didn't even notice the first time. Amazing!Gughanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10369044715853545060noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90456687835110337202009-05-16T11:50:00.000-04:002009-05-16T11:50:00.000-04:00Eeeeeeeuuuw!!!!Eeeeeeeuuuw!!!!Terrihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03158421102740382411noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1015987588698329152009-05-14T07:31:00.000-04:002009-05-14T07:31:00.000-04:00Chumplet, ack! Wash those buggers off quick!
Dee...Chumplet, ack! Wash those buggers off quick!<br /><br />Deepazartz, with this one I wanted the horror of the situation to unveil slowly and curiously. Thanks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86072987486381871472009-05-12T23:08:00.000-04:002009-05-12T23:08:00.000-04:00Wonderful piece of fiction. I did make the mistake...Wonderful piece of fiction. I did make the mistake of thinking it was 'you'...but gradually madeout that it was this character. Beautiful and creepy portrayal...very different tale.Deepa Gopalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11120735937767070980noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2649066532203174152009-05-12T18:59:00.000-04:002009-05-12T18:59:00.000-04:00When I was a wee little Chumplet, we lived in Trin...When I was a wee little Chumplet, we lived in Trinidad for a while. I was playing in the yard when my feet started stinging like crazy.<br /><br />I ran screaming into the house and the housekeeper scooped me up and stuck my feet in the kitchen sink, turning on the water full force.<br /><br />I watched dozens of little red ants swirl past my brown sandals and down the drain.Sandra Cormierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00231342310371529022noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59557611675593697962009-05-10T23:31:00.000-04:002009-05-10T23:31:00.000-04:00Aniket, actually, we do have an ant farm! But it'...Aniket, actually, we do have an ant farm! But it's my daughter's. The picture was taken of that. After I was deprived of an ant farm as a child, I couldn't deny her. :)<br /><br />Melissa, thank you! I hear you about your fear. Whatever you do, don't look up human bot flies. Really, don't. (I warned you.)<br /><br />Szelsofa, I'm glad you like these! I do like writing them and exploring dark places. Yeah, not quite my voice. ;) You caught on.<br /><br />Karen, thank yor for the words of encouragement! I did enjoy the evolution of this dialogue. It began very normal and a little nerdy with its science facts. Then progressively it went down hill.<br /><br />Walking Man, I enjoyed the humor element too. And I love playing with "dialogue" in order to portray the condition of "you," the listener.<br /><br />Catvibe, thanks! It was nice to switch gears and take things in a different direction. I want to branch out more. I've gotten a little narrow lately.<br /><br />Little Girl Lost, Silence of the Lambs is a perfect intro! I like to keep folks on their toes and jump into different genres. Maybe the next time will be <I>really</I> weird.<br /><br />Brown Phantom, that's great that you would pick up my novel! Thanks for the vote of confidence, and digging in to my vignette here.<br /><br />Sarah, no, we're not the first victim. ;) And I have a feeling, we won't be the last. This is one guy whose attention you don't want to attract!! And thanks about the photo! I was chasing those ants around for a while trying to get good shots. That blue gel stuff is super cool.<br /><br />Aniket, I love Donnie Darko! The director's cut, that is. I'm not sure the theater release would be comprehensible without the added scenes in the director's cut. The mood of it is mesmerizing, and I can't help but be intrigued by the time travel/paradox element.<br /><br />Aggie, the dark humor is there, definitely. It can be taken as pure horror, but I can't deny I approached it with a wry sense of satire.<br /><br />McKoala, thanks, fellow Roaster!<br /><br />Catvibe, yes, that's one of my photos! Isn't that a cool ant farm? It's our daughter's. She loves it. Except when one of the carpenter ants got out and stung her.<br /><br />JR, oh man. I can see the evolution. I went way too easy on this one! This could have been WAY weirder!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59892642649190714352009-05-09T23:55:00.000-04:002009-05-09T23:55:00.000-04:00Did you know those pesky ants are aphid farmers, c...Did you know those pesky ants are aphid farmers, collecting their sweet anal secretions? I'll bet you could really tweak your story with this.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80364583791396954192009-05-09T07:23:00.000-04:002009-05-09T07:23:00.000-04:00Actually, like Sarah, I also forgot to comment on ...Actually, like Sarah, I also forgot to comment on the totally bitchen photo. Did you take that? Do you guys have an (in tact) ant farm?Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64521070381846237032009-05-08T23:04:00.000-04:002009-05-08T23:04:00.000-04:00Excellent, really excellent.Excellent, really excellent.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25014334998222096712009-05-08T16:22:00.000-04:002009-05-08T16:22:00.000-04:00I absolutely love the photo and it just made the p...I absolutely love the photo and it just made the post more intriguing. I actually thought it a very humerous post, rather than creepy ... a sort of dark humour that makes perfect sense to the killer and to the reader. I like a satirical piece well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5252135734299678112009-05-08T15:26:00.000-04:002009-05-08T15:26:00.000-04:00And I just watched 'Donnie Darko'... amazing movie...And I just watched 'Donnie Darko'... amazing movie! And I kept thinking of this post the whole time thinking<br />how bizarre reasons can make a man do wild things. :D<br /><br />Also I've been watching Criminal Minds lately. I am always fascinated about the mysteries of what goes on in the head of a serial killer.<br /><br />This one surely is one of my all time favorites. :PAniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38575993721485677542009-05-08T14:22:00.000-04:002009-05-08T14:22:00.000-04:00Oops..I meant to comment on how cool the photo is,...Oops..I meant to comment on how cool the photo is, too! That blue light is something else, and the ants look like they're preserved in...something. ;)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74846173520385552612009-05-08T14:21:00.000-04:002009-05-08T14:21:00.000-04:00I think the most macabre part to me was his I don'...I think the most macabre part to me was his <I>I don't even like the taste, but I have to swallow it all.</I> "We" are not his first victim. And likely won't be the last. <br /><br />Very effectively written and conceived! The voice was spot-on, with just enough logic to the madness to make the revelation burrow deeper. Truly horrifying stuff, Jason, but also brutally good. <br /><br />I'm still shivering...Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81272987784140728062009-05-08T13:22:00.000-04:002009-05-08T13:22:00.000-04:00Super-post Jason. Thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
R...Super-post Jason. Thoroughly enjoyed reading it.<br />Read the excerpt from ur novel too; very promising. I would want to read that book :).BrownPhantomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17727840657080964378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8497100074824365362009-05-08T08:35:00.000-04:002009-05-08T08:35:00.000-04:00GAAAAH! that was so creepy!
no, i didn't make the ...GAAAAH! that was so creepy!<br />no, i didn't make the mistake of thinking you were writing about yourself in the beginning, but thought it would be like the tell-tale heart, about a mental patient in a hospital ( poe's reference comes naturally. this dude too can hear stuff others can't)<br />but i didnt guess he was talikng to his victim... <br /><br />'I don't even like the taste, but I have to swallow it all. '<br /><br />and just after i re-watched the silence of the lambs last night...<br /><br />delicious, jason...Amritorupa Kanjilal https://www.blogger.com/profile/05297857308903060458noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18336704092474817002009-05-08T07:17:00.000-04:002009-05-08T07:17:00.000-04:00That was brilliant Jason. I love the voice in thi...That was brilliant Jason. I love the voice in this, and the idea is really well written out. It works fantastically.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-150527301673696732009-05-08T06:17:00.000-04:002009-05-08T06:17:00.000-04:00In the end I suppose this is where the saying; "be...In the end I suppose this is where the saying; "be careful what you wish for" applies...<br /><br />I really liked it when you switched to a two way dialog here "...I know. I'm sorry. If I could, I would whack you on the head really hard to take care of..."<br /><br />Another piece done with skill and humor.the walking manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10058913927297370740noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58709689621247669232009-05-08T05:15:00.000-04:002009-05-08T05:15:00.000-04:00Jason - First, you had me. The beginning was so be...Jason - First, you had me. The beginning was so believable that I, too, was pulled in to the fantasy. The "science" of ants lends such credence to that part. Then with the insertion of the expletives, I began to wonder if you weren't creating a narrator. The bites did it, I knew we were in the realm of fiction, but I had no suspicions about how deluded this guy is! Now, for the ending -- another surprise! <br /><br />I think you're the one with hooks! <br /><br />Your technique seems to me to get better and better, and your variety of thought is amazing.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83332552789459507352009-05-08T04:12:00.000-04:002009-05-08T04:12:00.000-04:00Like Aniket I thought the words were some sort of ...Like Aniket I thought the words were some sort of a description of an event you took part. Only, it was not really your voice. I became suspicious. And as the writing went on I began to understand it's one of your interesting writing about a phsychopath. I love these.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17766457096682244302009-05-08T02:47:00.000-04:002009-05-08T02:47:00.000-04:00My skin is crawling. Beautifully written.
I have t...My skin is crawling. Beautifully written.<br />I have this fear of spiders working their way into my ears, living in my brain, laying eggs and then having them all hatch in my head. Finally pouring out through my nose and eyes.<br />It creeps me out to no end, yet I still leave my window open.Melissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09197366415444682374noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15584826031200951352009-05-08T02:39:00.000-04:002009-05-08T02:39:00.000-04:00Creeeeeepy!!!
Almost all the way to the end I hon...Creeeeeepy!!!<br /><br />Almost all the way to the end I honestly believed that you had an ant farm in your house.<br /><br />Though I have my doubts that Aine would alow you to keep them on the bed-side. :D<br /><br />Superb description and I loved the ending!Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.com