tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post6423944997082699268..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: The Stairs, Part 2 (suspense/horror)Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73154185683793369822007-10-22T09:17:00.000-04:002007-10-22T09:17:00.000-04:00Ybonesy, size is such an important element in blog...Ybonesy, size is such an important element in blogging. Long fiction can be a tough sell.<BR/><BR/>Angel, thanks. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5009221628454928522007-10-21T14:47:00.000-04:002007-10-21T14:47:00.000-04:00i am loving this!!!i am loving this!!!AngelConradiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09423318903817661244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20268803135243975582007-10-19T16:39:00.000-04:002007-10-19T16:39:00.000-04:00The size of each one of these, wordwise, is comple...The size of each one of these, wordwise, is completely readable. Now on to part 3. (See, I waited until I could do two at once before reading the second one. Tricky me.)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27377867382402556472007-10-17T23:34:00.000-04:002007-10-17T23:34:00.000-04:00Vesper, thanks for the kind words. :) Look for t...Vesper, thanks for the kind words. :) Look for the next installment Friday.<BR/><BR/>Anti-Wife, soon, very soon.<BR/><BR/>Electric Orchid, no use spoiling the suspense this early. ;) The next piece will start painting a picture, I promise!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-91654433780392486982007-10-17T15:25:00.000-04:002007-10-17T15:25:00.000-04:00The bark on hickory trees scares me. Such a suitab...The bark on hickory trees scares me. Such a suitable tree for this story. Still can't figure out what the hell is going on, but I'll be patient...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16532403180123519635noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3237414233499655522007-10-17T13:53:00.000-04:002007-10-17T13:53:00.000-04:00Looking forward to the third step!Looking forward to the third step!The Anti-Wifehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02027321787352577548noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36904208682156087212007-10-17T11:48:00.000-04:002007-10-17T11:48:00.000-04:00How very interesting, Jason. I like it and can't w...How very interesting, Jason. I like it and can't wait to see what follows. You have some very beautiful images in there - powerful writing. And the thoughts - yes, you captured the normal incoherence of them. Very good!Vesperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12417602625059442986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9232006657889410202007-10-15T23:46:00.000-04:002007-10-15T23:46:00.000-04:00Szelsofa, darkness shedding light...a great way to...Szelsofa, darkness shedding light...a great way to put it! I think you're precisely correct.<BR/><BR/>Anne, <I>...slightly less scary thoughts.</I> I'll try to remedy that. ;)<BR/><BR/>Bernita, thanks for peeling them! It makes it fun to put them there.<BR/><BR/>Angela, the thoughts are definitely the key. I hope you enjoy the little journey.<BR/><BR/>Jaye, this is one my usual mad scientist experiments. A relatively static scene and time with only a stream of consciousness to move the story. So far it's working, I think, but the pressure is on!<BR/><BR/>Ello, one thing I'm learning from this piece is how strange <I>not</I> going straight down a flight of stairs is. Because it's such an unusual action, I'm fighting against confusion. Sorry about that. I'm trying to add more for clarity.<BR/><BR/>Verilion, step by step, in both ways. Physically and mentally. Also, you get to go down with him in the photos.<BR/><BR/>Mermaid, <I>who has he become.</I> Ah yes, that is the question. Perhaps he'll tell us. =)<BR/><BR/>Church Lady, I just had an image of a SNL skit. Shove. Thump thump thump. Groan. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49663951232206469642007-10-15T21:57:00.000-04:002007-10-15T21:57:00.000-04:00Oh, this is good! I just want to push him down fas...Oh, this is good! <BR/>I just want to push him down faster...hehehee!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7122932278198709362007-10-15T18:52:00.000-04:002007-10-15T18:52:00.000-04:00A boy in love/lust with his teacher. Then he was ...A boy in love/lust with his teacher. Then he was punished. Jesus says NO WAY. Who has he become?<BR/><BR/>"and autumn's moods were blowing. Back and forth. Unsettled."<BR/><BR/>Again, I love the way man and nature reflect each other.mermaidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15895749686844178804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58952431806737834792007-10-15T14:09:00.000-04:002007-10-15T14:09:00.000-04:00I guess you are going to take us down step by step...I guess you are going to take us down step by step. This thought is chilling, what will he find down there? And the italics, what story are they trying to tell us. Great stuff Jason.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08533913253403252799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-30434156767734829432007-10-15T11:49:00.000-04:002007-10-15T11:49:00.000-04:00I think, like Jaye, I have some interesting ideas ...I think, like Jaye, I have some interesting ideas about where you are going to take this, although one might be a huge red herring. But I got confused - He reaches for the storm doors, then I know he is walking down two stairs and stops and it sounds like he goes back up two steps when the storm door (which I am visualizing behind him) bangs closed and he starts getting wet. I realize now that he must have stepped past the storm door and is back outside but you don't say that and it is implied. OK - I understand now. Never mind.Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26057423437008170032007-10-15T09:00:00.000-04:002007-10-15T09:00:00.000-04:00I'm starting to form theories about what's going o...I'm starting to form theories about what's going on. You give us just enough for suspense and intrigue, but not enough to be able to have any idea of what's going on. Can't wait to see what's coming.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44055320770040110552007-10-15T08:24:00.000-04:002007-10-15T08:24:00.000-04:00"Autumns moods were blowing" - love that. And "be..."Autumns moods were blowing" - love that. And "because the day was older than yesterday."<BR/><BR/>I also like trying to figure out the mystery contained within the thoughts.Angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12153878171712341666noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88209102474778412232007-10-15T07:42:00.000-04:002007-10-15T07:42:00.000-04:00"Because the day was older than yesterday" - yum.L..."Because the day was older than yesterday" - yum.<BR/>Like those layers.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63260032056546953412007-10-15T06:50:00.000-04:002007-10-15T06:50:00.000-04:00The second step seems to elicit slightly less scar...The second step seems to elicit slightly less scary thoughts than the first...<BR/>I'm intrigued.annehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08734374991569484126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2822135322626260662007-10-15T05:31:00.000-04:002007-10-15T05:31:00.000-04:00It's getting creepier by every step. I hope when t...It's getting creepier by every step. I hope when total darkness attacks it will shed some light on the story, too.<BR/><BR/>:-PSzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.com