tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post6613725868161786933..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #61Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73263993392619601502008-07-24T17:13:00.000-04:002008-07-24T17:13:00.000-04:00What a unique take! There's a novel in this one t...What a unique take! There's a novel in this one too, perhaps. Great piece! Well written. High marks overall.<BR/><BR/>Congratulations of Fifth Place!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36582132164214481042008-07-21T04:37:00.000-04:002008-07-21T04:37:00.000-04:00Creepy indeed. I too, think that it is not an anim...Creepy indeed. I too, think that it is <B>not</B> an animal, but that does not make the story less interesting at all. I'd definitely like to see (read) it when developed into a larger piece. Go for it!SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46476357609122248182008-07-20T15:35:00.000-04:002008-07-20T15:35:00.000-04:00Beautiful piece!Was it a chimp?Whatever he was,hop...Beautiful piece!<BR/><BR/>Was it a chimp?Whatever he was,hope he found his way to freedom :)Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1221437381897821602008-07-18T09:52:00.000-04:002008-07-18T09:52:00.000-04:00So. I think Dottie may be a wee bit biased, but I...So. I think Dottie may be a <I>wee</I> bit biased, but I am not. And I find myself coming back to this again and again - a real story, a real plot, good characterization. Probably my favorite, too.<BR/><BR/>DAMN. And I thought adolescent corn was <I>so</I> clever.....Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6220544684397295352008-07-17T22:32:00.000-04:002008-07-17T22:32:00.000-04:00If this is a bear, it understands English awfully ...If this is a bear, it understands English awfully well and is a heck of a problem solver. My money's on it being a kidnapped teenager or something.<BR/><BR/>Nice encapsulation. Very tight.Posol'stvo the Medvedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00573435137467134333noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79688756145343771712008-07-17T17:07:00.000-04:002008-07-17T17:07:00.000-04:00I had to come back and leave another comment. Aft...I had to come back and leave another comment. After reading all of the entries in the contest, I realized this one is absolutely my favorite. An amazing achievement in flash fiction composition and story telling. Bravo, sir, or perhaps madam or perhaps bear.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14171966645793856712008-07-17T12:24:00.000-04:002008-07-17T12:24:00.000-04:00I love strange and dark and "out of the box" liter...I love strange and dark and "out of the box" literary pieces...thanks for the great read.<BR/>I, too, would like to see this developed into a short story.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14483719262890673912008-07-17T11:24:00.000-04:002008-07-17T11:24:00.000-04:00There is, indeed, something communicated by the fa...There is, indeed, something communicated by the fact you don't use quotation marks for the things Frank said. I took it to mean the being in the cage was different than he - race, gender, species - which really set up a nice contrast.<BR/><BR/>I wasn't sure I'd like the piece at first - unicycle riding? - but it was very well told, very well written, and I love it!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82248330827976022032008-07-17T11:19:00.000-04:002008-07-17T11:19:00.000-04:00Such a completely original and excellent piece. Y...Such a completely original and excellent piece. You are truly the El Jefe of the Clarity contest. This one gets my vote.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63392122598540837822008-07-17T09:32:00.000-04:002008-07-17T09:32:00.000-04:00Jefe, Unique take on the prompt. It makes one step...Jefe, <BR/>Unique take on the prompt. It makes one step back and walk in again. <BR/>Seems like a beginning to a bigger story. Give it that shot. <BR/>JoanitaBeingtheBeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11403785145128396266noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52915703975726858972008-07-17T08:19:00.000-04:002008-07-17T08:19:00.000-04:00I read this twice to see if I was reading it right...I read this twice to see if I was reading it right. Turns out I was. How absolutely baffling--what a situation. There are questions, but to say this is intriguing is, well, an understatement. I'm with Janeyv above, is this a bear? No matter, this is very cool.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9185421873907582582008-07-17T07:38:00.000-04:002008-07-17T07:38:00.000-04:00Excellent piece. You built on the tension so well...Excellent piece. You built on the tension so well. I hope Frank gets a cannonball over the head for his cruelty. I have so many questions about the captive - Is it an animal? Bear maybe? Or some poor soul who wondered into the wrong yard?<BR/><BR/>Well done!JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85739527006858816482008-07-17T00:46:00.000-04:002008-07-17T00:46:00.000-04:00The motorcycle doesn't always represent freedom, e...The motorcycle doesn't always represent freedom, especially if you're trained to ride it in a dangerous circle. I can see why your character would want to escape.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-91874286750015131372008-07-16T22:38:00.000-04:002008-07-16T22:38:00.000-04:00Highly provocative and creepy tale. I hope he make...Highly provocative and creepy tale. I hope he makes his escape.<BR/><BR/>I really like how the story built in intensity throughout, adding more tricks to the pile, fuel to the fire. I wasn't sure where it was going, but it had me hooked. <BR/><BR/>Very well written, imaginative take.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-71816607187149465972008-07-16T22:01:00.000-04:002008-07-16T22:01:00.000-04:00dang, so many questions....dang, so many questions....laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6747143267797474832008-07-16T21:47:00.000-04:002008-07-16T21:47:00.000-04:00Ouch, good story.Ouch, good story.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.com