tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post693851872972088408..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #37Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49512104218560485342011-07-29T10:32:00.884-04:002011-07-29T10:32:00.884-04:00What a delicious story idea! I love the family di...What a delicious story idea! I love the family dinner conversation. Solid writing.<br /><br />Congrats on Forties Club!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54722603223036388072011-07-25T20:12:28.426-04:002011-07-25T20:12:28.426-04:00I just wanted to say thanks everyone for commentin...I just wanted to say thanks everyone for commenting. I really appreciate the feedback. @Jade: it's funny, I never thought of the curse as applying to the whole family - just the one generation. Maybe the phone call is about a cousin or a sib. Yikes!Charlenenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35399807419653986152011-07-25T18:12:47.713-04:002011-07-25T18:12:47.713-04:00"Do you remember the man in Alberta who was d..."Do you remember the man in Alberta who was decapitated by a flying manhole cover?" this is when i knew it would be one of my favorites. so many great words in it--a perfect image yet still enough holes for us to be imaginative. and how you placed it as a question gave it infinite power. the twisted conversation was great.rocky winghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01488820392849180671noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52615647915760718372011-07-24T22:06:24.660-04:002011-07-24T22:06:24.660-04:00This is one of the first I read, must have forgott...This is one of the first I read, must have forgotten to leave a comment, glad I came back, i really liked the way the family deals with this, so true!Michael Morsehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07451637745981389920noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17970211263675578442011-07-23T13:01:06.526-04:002011-07-23T13:01:06.526-04:00Charlene - it's like a typical 2-drinks-in con...Charlene - it's like a typical 2-drinks-in conversation in my family. I think the dialogue is perfect. I love the humour of this piece. Well done.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29721976310792082942011-07-23T12:57:51.513-04:002011-07-23T12:57:51.513-04:00I'm just so glad I didn't miss reading thi...I'm just so glad I didn't miss reading this. I'd lost track of what all i've read and what are remaining. I'm trying to catch up now. <br /><br />I absolutely loved the dialogue here and I'm a sucker for dialog driven fiction. Of the one's I've read so far, this surely makes to my top 5.<br /><br />Thanks for such a fun read.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59074317586898175862011-07-21T04:00:03.227-04:002011-07-21T04:00:03.227-04:00I like this story! The last lines leave you with t...I like this story! The last lines leave you with that "Oh no!" feeling.C. Sonberg Larsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09925003570881003478noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16435541791946434692011-07-20T08:17:45.793-04:002011-07-20T08:17:45.793-04:00It sounds like you've been eavesdropping on my...It sounds like you've been eavesdropping on my colorful family. Terrific dialogue!Richard Levangiehttp://richardlevangie.com/blog/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25793902214397800652011-07-19T18:11:09.151-04:002011-07-19T18:11:09.151-04:00It's brilliant that I'm worried whose turn...It's brilliant that I'm worried whose turn it is this time round! I hope it's not June - I like her!<br /><br />Thank you for such a wonderful story - I;m hooked! Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1258744927370079412011-07-19T16:33:38.044-04:002011-07-19T16:33:38.044-04:00Flying manhole cover - I love trying to imagine ju...Flying manhole cover - I love trying to imagine just how that transpired! I love your take on the prompt. :) Jana A.bluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67687082214131745842011-07-19T16:31:58.255-04:002011-07-19T16:31:58.255-04:00hee hee! Such a great story!
My only, tiny sugges...hee hee! Such a great story!<br /><br />My only, tiny suggestion is a single word choice in here:<br /><br /><i>It's almost midnight. Looks like <b>they</b> made it through another year.</i><br /><br />For the narrator to say "they" instead of "we" makes me think that s/he is in on the gag and is exempt from the curse, or is somehow a dead/undead observer. Just a thought...<br /><br />excellent story, this one made me laugh.Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31646481792910467802011-07-19T11:35:03.094-04:002011-07-19T11:35:03.094-04:00Some traditions are never meant to be broken. Deat...Some traditions are never meant to be broken. Death Day appears to be one of them. Made me laugh.<br /><br />Dottie :)<br /><br />(loved the last line!)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48709903379793480652011-07-19T02:28:56.757-04:002011-07-19T02:28:56.757-04:00I loved the dialogue in this; it's just how pe...I loved the dialogue in this; it's just how people really talk (but funnier). And the ending - we're not totally sure it's happened again, it could be anything, even a wrong number. But it probably isn't.<br /><br />This was fun to read.fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90191948066099221172011-07-18T01:22:40.233-04:002011-07-18T01:22:40.233-04:00I've nothing to add beyond what the other comm...I've nothing to add beyond what the other comments say. Great dialog, strange situation, killer ending.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45312198196363242152011-07-16T21:41:29.480-04:002011-07-16T21:41:29.480-04:00Wait – I hear the phone.
Whoops. ;) Traditions jus...<i>Wait – I hear the phone.</i><br />Whoops. ;) Traditions just can't be broken. :)Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86017910016836840402011-07-16T15:24:25.548-04:002011-07-16T15:24:25.548-04:00Oh, the humor of death. I agree with the other rev...Oh, the humor of death. I agree with the other reviewers; the sibling banter was priceless. Great use of dialogue to emphasize an interesting twist.<br /><br />Thanks for sharing!Michele Zugnonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12394802719932859470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15547077912964826882011-07-16T14:41:05.468-04:002011-07-16T14:41:05.468-04:00Priceless!!Priceless!!Clarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00062728322162370588noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17461816384365850322011-07-16T13:26:10.307-04:002011-07-16T13:26:10.307-04:00This seems so real to me. So sad about the end......This seems so real to me. So sad about the end...I keep hoping the pattern will break.Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70642815848692653072011-07-16T12:40:00.181-04:002011-07-16T12:40:00.181-04:00Macabre humor. The dialogue makes the piece. I r...Macabre humor. The dialogue makes the piece. I really like this one.Jonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18109855683749612076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46037856111926012452011-07-16T12:24:54.153-04:002011-07-16T12:24:54.153-04:00Great sense of humor in this. I love their banter....Great sense of humor in this. I love their banter. And that ending--I'd hoped they'd made it through!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80691194715087582692011-07-16T12:13:24.028-04:002011-07-16T12:13:24.028-04:00aw, this is creepy and funny at the same time... ;...aw, this is creepy and funny at the same time... ;)SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83370011917268836992011-07-16T12:03:45.768-04:002011-07-16T12:03:45.768-04:00OMG, I can SO hear my siblings and I having that c...OMG, I can SO hear my siblings and I having that conversation. <br /><br />That's my new personal motto: "Would commit murder just to keep a statistical anomaly going."Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com