tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post6996263906893856948..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #56Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger31125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53457812612908319902010-01-22T14:50:50.304-05:002010-01-22T14:50:50.304-05:00My goodness. Again, thank you to everyone. This co...My goodness. Again, thank you to everyone. This contest was quite exhausting and I really appreciate your stopping in to comment.<br /><br />Aerin, do you remember when Justin Timberlake had that bright blond tumble of curls? I miss that, and I don't think it has a things to do with my flipy-floppy Myers-Briggs.<br /><br />kashers, wow. I'm blushing. Srsly.B. Nagelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07620736939701035617noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65757655907851606922010-01-22T13:39:44.227-05:002010-01-22T13:39:44.227-05:00Just wanted you to know this was my favourite stor...Just wanted you to know this was my favourite story of all. It has brilliant pacing where you, as the author, didn't go at 100 mph to ram the story down the reader's throat. The 'feel' was gentle, tranquil at times even, but so much happened. I was so 'there' with your old priest. Indeed, in reading it over and over, each time I did it was as if I became him. <br /><br />If this was the only worthwhile story - which it wasn't, there were many others... but if it was - I would have considered the competition time well spent.<br /><br />Really, hats off to you.kashersnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81112172072144342662010-01-19T16:43:54.394-05:002010-01-19T16:43:54.394-05:00Dear Entrants #1-105,
I have read your pieces so ...Dear Entrants #1-105,<br /><br />I have read your pieces so that I can fairly participate in the Readers' Choice vote. (I read all of them through last week, before I started commenting.) I <i>will</i> be coming back around to offer <a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my keep/tweak comment</a>, but I didn't want anyone to snark. <br /><br />Cheers,<br />Aerin (#236)<br /><br />BTW, it's perfectly fine if you still want to snark, but this way you can choose a more appropriate subject, like NKJV storybooks or how your Myers-Briggs type can change.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46747756164253929112010-01-17T11:09:36.269-05:002010-01-17T11:09:36.269-05:00Nicely done, without being overly sentimental. And...Nicely done, without being overly sentimental. And you identified the bird correctly. Another flash to put on my short list. Good job.james r tomlinsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40280603479610233562010-01-17T00:24:53.802-05:002010-01-17T00:24:53.802-05:00Proof that good writing doesn't always have to...Proof that good writing doesn't always have to be smash, bang in your face. A gentle and touching piece.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57709489215569699022010-01-15T10:30:21.712-05:002010-01-15T10:30:21.712-05:00Touching, indeed. And a nice job with the priest. ...Touching, indeed. And a nice job with the priest. Well drawn and depicted.Deb Smythenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61106011355534823092010-01-14T09:47:13.567-05:002010-01-14T09:47:13.567-05:00lovely and lovingly told.lovely and lovingly told.Michael Solenderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01120045114297450520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61762745356291514052010-01-14T06:42:07.761-05:002010-01-14T06:42:07.761-05:00This is lovely. Real. Touching.This is lovely. Real. Touching.Terrihttp://misterri.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45562469050341247332010-01-12T20:35:48.838-05:002010-01-12T20:35:48.838-05:00definately calming and beautiful. Different from m...definately calming and beautiful. Different from most of the others.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29922180237944687372010-01-12T20:25:57.612-05:002010-01-12T20:25:57.612-05:00Thanks everybody for reading and taking the time t...Thanks everybody for reading and taking the time to comment. <br /><br />Jack, the retired priest, is one of my favorite characters. I'm glad you like him.B. Nagelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07620736939701035617noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-155049476312597472010-01-12T15:54:42.927-05:002010-01-12T15:54:42.927-05:00poignant and different.poignant and different.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10331682483113240942010-01-12T13:37:55.288-05:002010-01-12T13:37:55.288-05:00Great piece - I could hear the priest's voice ...Great piece - I could hear the priest's voice in my head and see the cemetery laid out before me. Nicely written, B.!Phoenixhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07477498671080132176noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69055246644829340272010-01-11T23:11:13.455-05:002010-01-11T23:11:13.455-05:00I like the way this evokes the old priest. I also...I like the way this evokes the old priest. I also liked the depth of the piece, as I scratched at it more, I found more underneath the surface.AidanFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09876041003278004627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43202823508035415252010-01-11T19:18:25.604-05:002010-01-11T19:18:25.604-05:00There is a quiet, simple quality to this prose tha...There is a quiet, simple quality to this prose that "feels" like the narrator is lonely. The last image of him looking over his shoulder at someone else enjoying their bench just tugged at my heart.<br /><br />This is dignified and beautiful.<br /><br />PS: Hey, y'all! My wvs is "critic". Hmmm.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82950013129825925812010-01-11T16:00:46.665-05:002010-01-11T16:00:46.665-05:00The most pleasing part about your story is that yo...The most pleasing part about your story is that you took your time in the telling. I can hardly believe it's only 250 words for it conveys so much.kashersnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74529869854589502212010-01-11T15:00:37.934-05:002010-01-11T15:00:37.934-05:00A touching and sentimental tribute to deep friends...A touching and sentimental tribute to deep friendship. I loved this one.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12356706753677731862010-01-11T07:08:00.894-05:002010-01-11T07:08:00.894-05:00Even priests are allowed to truly love their femal...Even priests are allowed to truly love their female friends. Very lovely and poignant. I could see silhouette of the bench and him sitting on it in my mind. Lovely.catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80409896749362366262010-01-11T02:48:39.981-05:002010-01-11T02:48:39.981-05:00Beautiful, lovely and very very well written piece...Beautiful, lovely and very very well written piece. <br /><br />One of my favourites for its clarity and simplicity.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63206017439813232322010-01-10T17:10:52.886-05:002010-01-10T17:10:52.886-05:00lovely...lovely...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-62585128751921476972010-01-10T15:59:24.419-05:002010-01-10T15:59:24.419-05:00nice characterization with the description of the ...nice characterization with the description of the surroundings. I enjoyed the poetic visuals.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89989738163018120802010-01-10T09:26:33.372-05:002010-01-10T09:26:33.372-05:00Sweet, touching and poignant. What else can you wi...Sweet, touching and poignant. What else can you wish in a story for!Lenahttp://www.thecolorsmagazine.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60681032885248028182010-01-09T17:16:33.697-05:002010-01-09T17:16:33.697-05:00I love the way you portray the priest, there is a ...I love the way you portray the priest, there is a real sense of age about him. Not just physically but in the calm and mature way he looks at the world.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87396617916347270112010-01-09T11:59:13.605-05:002010-01-09T11:59:13.605-05:00B. I actually welled up with this one. Such poig...B. I actually welled up with this one. Such poignancy. An honest study of true friendship, of how everyone needs it and how it transcends the grave. Gorgeous.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11767844609312331902010-01-08T19:02:48.199-05:002010-01-08T19:02:48.199-05:00Very nicely done, with a sublime ending. I love t...Very nicely done, with a sublime ending. I love the voice of the priest, especially the interjection of such banal ideas as cowbirds and searching for garbage. It's a beautiful combination of the spiritual and the secular, a study in how they coexist both in concert and in contrast. I find this masterful.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81356838100756549352010-01-08T18:53:35.825-05:002010-01-08T18:53:35.825-05:00Very touching. The pain in his heart seemed to mat...Very touching. The pain in his heart seemed to match the pain in his body.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00823616282284779390noreply@blogger.com