tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post7131126798022595941..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #114Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59836349953690057472009-01-20T22:47:00.000-05:002009-01-20T22:47:00.000-05:00Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest!Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47482071297189808432009-01-19T07:31:00.000-05:002009-01-19T07:31:00.000-05:00Sort of ironic, her actions to be prompted by a me...Sort of ironic, her actions to be prompted by a message coming to her... the old way.<BR/>I think this is a well written story and I enjoyed reading it.<BR/><BR/>What I imagined, when I put together Stella's scream and the waiting train, is that there was a departure date in that letter, a deadline that she was perilously close to miss because of the slowness of regular mail.<BR/>I'm curious now about the mysterious... the ominous...Vesperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12417602625059442986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19148922509028527722009-01-18T14:49:00.000-05:002009-01-18T14:49:00.000-05:00I thought, L'uragano, from the intensity of her sc...I thought, L'uragano, from the intensity of her scream (not a squeal) that her meeting was ominous. I liked that the animals raised their ears--it made her terror seem more primitive to me. <BR/><BR/>I don't mind a little bit of mystery, actually. And this was very cleverly set up, with the normal teenage stuff deadending into danger. <BR/><BR/>Enjoyed it very much. Strong writing.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21385566052949882272009-01-17T07:34:00.000-05:002009-01-17T07:34:00.000-05:00If this was someone she met online and is now goin...If this was someone she met online and is now going to meet, then I feel very badly for Rina who is about to quite possibly lose her daughter. It IS ominous. But I extrapolated that from your comment rather than the piece itself. I would love to see the rewrite. I LOVED the scream.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33603713790268839292009-01-16T11:00:00.000-05:002009-01-16T11:00:00.000-05:00Whatever happened to playing hard to get?!Whatever happened to playing hard to get?!Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14795711064547566562009-01-16T08:25:00.000-05:002009-01-16T08:25:00.000-05:00I'll take a good story over someone internally pon...I'll take a good story over someone internally pondering life's ultimate meaning (boring)anytime. You made it interesting and closed the deal at the end. Good job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70313505658091985052009-01-16T00:12:00.000-05:002009-01-16T00:12:00.000-05:00I enjoyed reading this slice of life. Your writin...I enjoyed reading this slice of life. Your writing is so insightful. I especially liked your paragraph relating mail to history and old people.Terryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17075596786647102438noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87270479034356455832009-01-15T22:27:00.000-05:002009-01-15T22:27:00.000-05:00wow. reread this. you guys were totally right---an...wow. reread this. you guys were totally right---and I wrote the damned thing! <BR/><BR/>the star, the messy cursive...it all points to a boy...man, this was a better excercise then i anticipated!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52606420588404565922009-01-15T22:24:00.000-05:002009-01-15T22:24:00.000-05:00wow. your comments are all so appreciated. what's ...wow. your comments are all so appreciated. <BR/><BR/>what's funny is that your comments made me see that I should have written it differently! I wanted who she travels to...to be more mysterious....almost ominous. <BR/><BR/>But somehow something didn't come across. That's why it's so great to get feedback. But i really appreciate the compliments!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90895163965999604252009-01-15T17:09:00.000-05:002009-01-15T17:09:00.000-05:00Nice story. Gotta love compulsive teenagers-- the...Nice story. Gotta love compulsive teenagers-- they know how to live in the moment! I hope he's worth it!<BR/><BR/>:)Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8441661394313202262009-01-15T07:51:00.000-05:002009-01-15T07:51:00.000-05:00liked the way this unfolded...you told the story w...liked the way this unfolded...you told the story well.K.Lawson Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11204234196229710524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45488631281171052722009-01-15T04:20:00.000-05:002009-01-15T04:20:00.000-05:00Great imagery!Love can be so compelling.Sigh!Great imagery!Love can be so compelling.Sigh!Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48469855163060091912009-01-15T02:43:00.000-05:002009-01-15T02:43:00.000-05:00Awesome! Just one letter but so much happenings. W...Awesome! Just one letter but so much happenings. Well done! I so hoped the letter was good and yes, it was :)Lenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787400183444796423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48256857741612704842009-01-15T01:19:00.000-05:002009-01-15T01:19:00.000-05:00Very nice. I like it. The power of a "real" letter...Very nice. I like it. The power of a "real" letter. Powerful - enough to make her lock the door before reading. And powerful to make her scream - "so raw, so piercing that every animal within several blocks raised their ears in alert" - love that line. Good job.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-887287450519449912009-01-14T22:26:00.000-05:002009-01-14T22:26:00.000-05:00I am always struck by the power of the letter. I l...I am always struck by the power of the letter. I liked the sense of immediacy here both in thought and in action. Passion, desire, and need are such a powerful trio. Quite a sense of exhilaration at the end. Good to see you here.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68032046757331625332009-01-14T21:23:00.000-05:002009-01-14T21:23:00.000-05:00ain't love grand? ;)ain't love grand? ;)laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.com