tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post7489360736103555387..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Forties Club Finalist #31Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89223500048446091072010-07-30T22:45:17.089-04:002010-07-30T22:45:17.089-04:00As one who is unfamiliar with geocaching, it took ...As one who is unfamiliar with geocaching, it took a second read for me to figure out what was going on. <br /><br />Now that I know, this seems to me a charming study of a typical relationship between young people who don't know what they want in a partner.<br /><br />That is, until they make a wish and get what they want without trying.<br /><br />Sweet story!Sandra Cormierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00231342310371529022noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-92004802918881732042010-07-29T15:15:39.858-04:002010-07-29T15:15:39.858-04:00Victor and Carmella are a (romanticized) version o...Victor and Carmella are a (romanticized) version of my parents. Dad loves geocacheing, Mom puts up with it. So to me, the characters and their actions/reactions were very realistic. <br /><br />But doesn't Victor know that you always wish for more wishes?! <br /><br />Well done!Vincent Kalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04625863843215035035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49079154785461528132010-07-29T09:05:26.760-04:002010-07-29T09:05:26.760-04:00SzelsoFa, thanks! I like to hate (dislike) my chra...SzelsoFa, thanks! I like to hate (dislike) my chracters, so I'm glad you did too.Aaron Wilsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07685361642254300953noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50376891142892415892010-07-29T08:41:27.680-04:002010-07-29T08:41:27.680-04:00an interesting relationship and a sort of nasty Vi...an interesting relationship and a sort of nasty Victor.<br />although none of the characters were likeable, i enjoyed this writing a lot.<br />:)SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79642534796908067522010-07-29T08:35:59.867-04:002010-07-29T08:35:59.867-04:00Thanks JaneyV!Thanks JaneyV!Aaron Wilsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07685361642254300953noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86499604329825685882010-07-29T05:38:59.936-04:002010-07-29T05:38:59.936-04:00Well why not? At least he wished for something th...Well why not? At least he wished for something they could enjoy together!<br /><br />I like the premise of this Aaron. You spin a good tale.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17564700118603321552010-07-29T01:54:01.584-04:002010-07-29T01:54:01.584-04:00I was distracted by wondering how he knew to make ...I was distracted by wondering how he knew to make a wish or which stone would provide it, but I loved the ending!Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49190630913477437602010-07-28T13:33:51.299-04:002010-07-28T13:33:51.299-04:00For me, the fact that he wished as he did provided...For me, the fact that he wished as he did provided insight into his personality and made him a little more 3-D.Deb Smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10990130480508998598noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82561060320941109162010-07-28T10:48:18.858-04:002010-07-28T10:48:18.858-04:00Thank you for the comments. I can see how the red ...Thank you for the comments. I can see how the red crystal magic seemed to come out of nowhere and how it seems like the magic would only last for a day. <br /><br />Thanks for the help.Aaron Wilsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07685361642254300953noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36391930799406337952010-07-28T00:11:55.703-04:002010-07-28T00:11:55.703-04:00Hi Aaron!
I guess his wish came true, but I would...Hi Aaron!<br /><br />I guess his wish came true, but I would have wished she'd come to enjoy playing in the mud with him. Why just wish for the day, when the effects could be long lasting, lol!<br /><br />Nice!<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39039487642698988522010-07-26T19:49:25.089-04:002010-07-26T19:49:25.089-04:00There's a cache hidden outside my store and it...There's a cache hidden outside my store and it's not uncommon for me to arrive early for work and find some random couple patroling my parking lot.<br /><br />This story makes me want to see what they're hiding out there. Good job.!Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14751567478811396094noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57210290941533428382010-07-26T06:35:25.122-04:002010-07-26T06:35:25.122-04:00Geocache-ing - nice scenario. Not quite sure about...Geocache-ing - nice scenario. Not quite sure about the red crystal magic with no apparent reason, but liked the turn around that resulted!Shona Snowdenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02588447219623308333noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70568175432286434932010-07-24T15:55:19.594-04:002010-07-24T15:55:19.594-04:00JR said all I wanted to say. I enjoyed reading thi...JR said all I wanted to say. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38875485692426768642010-07-24T14:33:53.527-04:002010-07-24T14:33:53.527-04:00September and JR - Thank you for reading seeing so...September and JR - Thank you for reading seeing soething that you like in my story.Aaron Wilsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07685361642254300953noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-92149793063129097852010-07-24T14:31:06.276-04:002010-07-24T14:31:06.276-04:00Wow! This a wonderful community of readers. Thank...Wow! This a wonderful community of readers. Thank you for the comments.Aaron Wilsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07685361642254300953noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46885943960244504612010-07-24T11:57:30.032-04:002010-07-24T11:57:30.032-04:00Sweet and selfish! Very cleerly done. You put so m...Sweet and selfish! Very cleerly done. You put so much into such few words - popular tweeting, the opposites-attract theory, and that ending - haha. What a selfish guy.<br />I think you did great with this little story.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17663894912884040532010-07-24T05:56:17.582-04:002010-07-24T05:56:17.582-04:00I like stories that incorporate current trends. As...I like stories that incorporate current trends. As for knowing to "wish" after finding the red egg, perhaps a hint toward the significance of its color would've tied it in. Still, a nice portrayal of the give and take relationship of couples.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79680737364531782012010-07-24T02:21:59.799-04:002010-07-24T02:21:59.799-04:00I like the possibilities of this story. I imagine ...I like the possibilities of this story. I imagine an alternate longer-version discussing where/how he discovered those particular coordinates, and what Victor and Carmella find at the next site they visit...Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22314815700470932692010-07-23T20:24:15.493-04:002010-07-23T20:24:15.493-04:00This great! I'm glad to be part of the 40'...This great! I'm glad to be part of the 40's club. <br /><br />I agree - it would have been less selfish if he had wished to like ballet. Nice. Perhaps in a revision.Aaron Wilsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07685361642254300953noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35872910491554023792010-07-23T19:33:23.203-04:002010-07-23T19:33:23.203-04:00Haha, talk about luck.Haha, talk about luck.Oddyoddyo13https://www.blogger.com/profile/05557994037779209704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64928567494803378962010-07-23T18:51:02.616-04:002010-07-23T18:51:02.616-04:00Interesting. How did he know the red one would gr...Interesting. How did he know the red one would grant a wish?<br /><br />If he were less selfish and <i>truly</i> loved her, he would have wished that he actually liked ballet.<br /><br />There are many wishes that men make that would result in a woman saying, "I think we have time for one more." I suspect that Geocaching is not at the top of the list.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.com