tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post7500202430069393974..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #47Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64618253793204032532009-07-26T19:47:34.910-04:002009-07-26T19:47:34.910-04:00Wow. The ball didn't go very well. He really...Wow. The ball didn't go very well. He really did something brazen. Maybe if he laid off the wine....<br /><br />High marks for pacing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10341322917850794662009-07-20T17:43:49.642-04:002009-07-20T17:43:49.642-04:00This is a great scene - it reads perfectly as a st...This is a great scene - it reads perfectly as a standalone chapter plucked from a larger story.Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68624326179120463012009-07-20T12:22:32.577-04:002009-07-20T12:22:32.577-04:00So much for his glass of wine not killing him... I...So much for his glass of wine not killing him... I'm guessing that's why he was having rapier problems.<br />Nicely finished off ('scuse the pun)Terrihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03158421102740382411noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70445369913945223482009-07-18T08:14:33.195-04:002009-07-18T08:14:33.195-04:00I got a big "Highlander" vibe here. I l...I got a big "Highlander" vibe here. I love your world building and I genuinely feel that this is a much bigger story waiting to be told.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7455386023125699522009-07-16T09:02:09.287-04:002009-07-16T09:02:09.287-04:00Rich and dramatic - I'd very much like to see ...Rich and dramatic - I'd very much like to see this as something longer.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14399461871201852552009-07-14T12:41:49.820-04:002009-07-14T12:41:49.820-04:00What happened at the ball, and why was Renildo in ...What happened at the ball, and why was Renildo in a self-destructive mood? And yeah, Aniket, I got the light saber star wars thing from them, too...PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78636532691416902712009-07-14T12:34:34.298-04:002009-07-14T12:34:34.298-04:00If you must drink... don't speak. :) Imaginat...If you must drink... don't speak. :) Imaginative tale.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66547452451018979962009-07-13T19:54:19.665-04:002009-07-13T19:54:19.665-04:00Thanks for all the positive comments everyone. It ...Thanks for all the positive comments everyone. It really is interesting to see different people get different things out of a story.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53111728973429655652009-07-12T20:35:10.620-04:002009-07-12T20:35:10.620-04:00This does seem the start of Peldro's story. Lo...This does seem the start of Peldro's story. Loved it.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19638810234824839112009-07-12T09:17:52.854-04:002009-07-12T09:17:52.854-04:00You gotta wonder what happened! Nice action. Sad...You gotta wonder what happened! Nice action. Sad to see him die.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55997055480726711322009-07-12T09:11:29.444-04:002009-07-12T09:11:29.444-04:00Can't beat a bit of wizardry. Well written mat...Can't beat a bit of wizardry. Well written mate. Liked it a lot.<br /><br />Four DinnersThe Preachermanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10224135811862587701noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59432844561713719692009-07-12T03:50:35.076-04:002009-07-12T03:50:35.076-04:00Tragic end. You have laid a solid foundation here ...Tragic end. You have laid a solid foundation here about a mystic world.<br /><br />You should extend it to Peldro seeking revenge for his master.<br /><br />Peldro gives me that Obi-Wan Kenobi feeling. :)Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48283815037161320492009-07-11T21:32:25.721-04:002009-07-11T21:32:25.721-04:00Alcohol and bravery undoubtedly have tragic result...Alcohol and bravery undoubtedly have tragic results. Nice action piece.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8548315064416651872009-07-11T17:08:11.284-04:002009-07-11T17:08:11.284-04:00Leaves me wanting more! What happened between them...Leaves me wanting more! What happened between them?<br />Nicely done!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24026742137722860532009-07-11T16:44:22.988-04:002009-07-11T16:44:22.988-04:00Woah... nice world building there. A very vivid p...Woah... nice world building there. A very vivid picture in a small space of words.Merry Monteleonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09435956005780500310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54256247931592966692009-07-11T15:01:41.415-04:002009-07-11T15:01:41.415-04:00ooo a bit nasty, that :(ooo a bit nasty, that :(laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.com