tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post7677372745644283250..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #25Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80726553434521293572009-07-24T18:15:02.623-04:002009-07-24T18:15:02.623-04:00He's coming with friends, isn't he? Sound...He's coming with friends, isn't he? Sounds like the king failed to finish him off. High marks for storytelling.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87967276878312367622009-07-20T16:04:52.530-04:002009-07-20T16:04:52.530-04:00Great story! I like to think that the messenger i...Great story! I like to think that the messenger is the very person of whom they speak, who has indeed already arrived. I'd love to hear more from this world.Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49131094860863169732009-07-20T13:10:52.869-04:002009-07-20T13:10:52.869-04:00Very well written scene and I would totally read t...Very well written scene and I would totally read the book (and probably watch the movie too).Terrihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03158421102740382411noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43678689543271855002009-07-19T21:02:54.197-04:002009-07-19T21:02:54.197-04:00Ha!! JaneyV, Thank you! You noted a delibrate piec...Ha!! JaneyV, Thank you! You noted a delibrate piece of information. I wondered if anyone would think it an error, when in fact it was so much a part of the elements. :) Thank you for the comment! :)Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17984221139877973242009-07-19T19:32:34.902-04:002009-07-19T19:32:34.902-04:00“For fifteen years and we knew not?”
I ventured ...<i>“For fifteen years and we knew not?” <br /><br />I ventured to stand, my hands at my sides, head bowed. “Yes, your majesty, you were not aware.”</i><br /><br />This was the most important piece of their interaction as it shows that the mesanger knew a lot more than he was letting on. I think you handled the gradual unfolding of the information with great skill. Well done.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36517652261287599562009-07-18T14:59:44.646-04:002009-07-18T14:59:44.646-04:00Terrific underpainting! I want more.
TaraTerrific underpainting! I want more.<br /><br />TaraAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45318996638008687042009-07-16T12:54:39.458-04:002009-07-16T12:54:39.458-04:00BrilliantBrilliantAs the Mind Meandershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05289502626334651157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-479064608653271762009-07-14T15:44:49.831-04:002009-07-14T15:44:49.831-04:00Hello there,
Oh I so agree with Aniket, this was ...Hello there,<br /><br />Oh I so agree with Aniket, this was more viewing in my mind's eye than reading. Excellent choice of words... especially at the climax. I would be repeating but yes, it does leave you wanting more.aditihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09464870785851270367noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78196785463957015642009-07-14T14:00:35.985-04:002009-07-14T14:00:35.985-04:00The last line colors the whole piece.
Splendid jo...The last line colors the whole piece.<br /><br />Splendid job.Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42381229296821381782009-07-14T00:09:41.569-04:002009-07-14T00:09:41.569-04:00I like the way you've slowly revealed bits alo...I like the way you've slowly revealed bits along the way until we get a (nearly) complete picture by the end. I like this Cenhelm guy in this story and now wonder what tie this story has to the 9th century saint of similar name...PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22669729082199271612009-07-13T13:05:24.205-04:002009-07-13T13:05:24.205-04:00Left me wanting more. Very good.Left me wanting more. Very good.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36840674696228595422009-07-12T10:12:23.923-04:002009-07-12T10:12:23.923-04:00Great sense of time and place...well done!Great sense of time and place...well done!Tessahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05233122532137654099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40074950262527763612009-07-11T12:40:45.572-04:002009-07-11T12:40:45.572-04:00Thank you all for the kind words! :)
This little...Thank you all for the kind words! :) <br /><br />This little blurb is but a tiny piece in a completely different story. That wine glass simply brought it to life. :)Aimee Lainehttp://www.aimeelaine.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48191080128984091232009-07-11T03:50:04.596-04:002009-07-11T03:50:04.596-04:00Wow, now I want to read the whole story - great fe...Wow, now I want to read the whole story - great feel and voice.Merry Monteleonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09435956005780500310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44723399184242387352009-07-10T23:31:08.864-04:002009-07-10T23:31:08.864-04:00Oh My
I stepped into that one quite innocently an...Oh My <br />I stepped into that one quite innocently and almost had to stay the required fairy years (100?)<br />Love it....Well done Jason.Linda S. Sochahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03281672541959206302noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9108336325537356542009-07-10T21:34:11.870-04:002009-07-10T21:34:11.870-04:00As they say, "Don't kill the messenger.&q...As they say, "Don't kill the messenger." What is said and what is known are to separate entities. Very clever depiction.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9125342059739818282009-07-10T18:20:08.790-04:002009-07-10T18:20:08.790-04:00Nice feel of historical fiction and perfect ending...Nice feel of historical fiction and perfect ending.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72240241322833742532009-07-10T15:53:33.784-04:002009-07-10T15:53:33.784-04:00Yay! Good scene, good drama, and I totally want to...Yay! Good scene, good drama, and I totally want to know more about the messenger.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29436367421931550932009-07-10T13:39:42.438-04:002009-07-10T13:39:42.438-04:00You painted the whole scene with great ease. It fe...You painted the whole scene with great ease. It felt more like watching than reading. Nice work!Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72353196017771756022009-07-10T12:22:30.298-04:002009-07-10T12:22:30.298-04:00Nice ending, leaves me wanting more!Nice ending, leaves me wanting more!Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4388287612800773432009-07-10T11:57:57.243-04:002009-07-10T11:57:57.243-04:00Great twist at the end. Good visual details and di...Great twist at the end. Good visual details and dialogue. Well done.JRVogthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501549592361240370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57927349273498526882009-07-10T11:40:39.784-04:002009-07-10T11:40:39.784-04:00You did an excellent job of completing this visual...You did an excellent job of completing this visual and the thought in such a tight parameter. Great piece.Katherine Napiernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83803351594120433512009-07-10T11:35:44.392-04:002009-07-10T11:35:44.392-04:00oh that was quite good. very nice!oh that was quite good. very nice!Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54402633836678137492009-07-10T09:54:19.889-04:002009-07-10T09:54:19.889-04:00oh yes, often a lot more :)oh yes, often a lot more :)laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.com