tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post7896044414731314574..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: The Stairs, Part 5 (suspense/horror)Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37431269488443998422007-11-01T13:02:00.000-04:002007-11-01T13:02:00.000-04:00wow... sounds so lame- but this was incredible!i a...wow... sounds so lame- but this was incredible!<BR/>i am a little late but i'm going to read the rest right now!AngelConradiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09423318903817661244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45739835375361476632007-10-30T09:27:00.000-04:002007-10-30T09:27:00.000-04:00Mermaid, it was an interesting challenge for mysel...Mermaid, it was an interesting challenge for myself. A static scene with only the character's thoughts to move the story.<BR/><BR/>Jaye, boo!<BR/><BR/>Electric Orchid Hunter, duct tape, yes. The greatest invention ever turned to evil purposes. ;)<BR/><BR/>Szelsofa, the tree branches are key. That's there for a reason.<BR/><BR/>Vesper, yeah, I can feel that too. Ooh boy, do I have to go? I don't think I wanna.<BR/><BR/>Ello, we're in the rush to the end now! I've never posted a series end so quickly. You must be having an effect on me. :)<BR/><BR/>Anti-Wife, thanks! The pressure is really on for me to deliver.<BR/><BR/>Church Lady, just changing it up to keep it fresh. I went right into the thoughts this time.<BR/><BR/>Shesawriter, I liked that line too. I thought of it when I imagined how lakes "turn" in the fall. The cold air chills the surface of the water, which suddenly falls and switches places with the water down deep. The whole thing churns up and becomes dark and muddy.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57592507945038424742007-10-29T21:49:00.000-04:002007-10-29T21:49:00.000-04:00This is my favorite line:"...it felt like the grou...This is my favorite line:<BR/><BR/>"...it felt like the ground wanted to trade places with the sky."<BR/><BR/>I know exactly what you mean! That's one of those AHA phrases. Great job, Jason!Shesawriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14904247751806210823noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42661091793196803822007-10-29T16:58:00.000-04:002007-10-29T16:58:00.000-04:00I've been waiting for this all weekend, and you on...I've been waiting for this all weekend, and you only posted half. Where's the other half, dammit!<BR/><BR/>:-)<BR/><BR/>favorite phrase: ground trading places with the skyChris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72420571681023363002007-10-29T15:24:00.000-04:002007-10-29T15:24:00.000-04:00This is extremely well written and very creepy.This is extremely well written and very creepy.The Anti-Wifehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02027321787352577548noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11187933359671040512007-10-29T15:08:00.000-04:002007-10-29T15:08:00.000-04:00Oh I am so there! I can't wait to know what happen...Oh I am so there! I can't wait to know what happens and yet I think I know and it will be bad and yet I must know... <BR/><BR/>You are an evil genius dragging this out so long.Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33908076358282142832007-10-29T11:49:00.000-04:002007-10-29T11:49:00.000-04:00Shadow branches groped for Paulie's neck.Very very...<I>Shadow branches groped for Paulie's neck.</I><BR/>Very very good, Jason! I'm descending with Paulie and I'm not so sure that I want to do it...<BR/>;-)Vesperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12417602625059442986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3452793893918471332007-10-29T06:33:00.000-04:002007-10-29T06:33:00.000-04:00You made tree-branches feel frightening to me, at ...You made tree-branches feel frightening to me, at least while I was reading. Very creepy indeed. Very nicely described.<BR/><BR/>(I think Ello was right.)<BR/><BR/>On a completely side note: if you happen to have time, please check the results of the #8.<BR/>Surprise coming on your way!SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57378719780171836922007-10-29T01:20:00.000-04:002007-10-29T01:20:00.000-04:00Cool. We're so close to the end I can taste it. I ...Cool. We're so close to the end I can taste it. I liked the image (sensation?) of the ground trading places with the sky.<BR/><BR/>You know it's going to get even worse when there's mention of duct tape!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16532403180123519635noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-62987749725859753342007-10-29T00:23:00.000-04:002007-10-29T00:23:00.000-04:00The closer we get to the bottom, the more I'm expe...The closer we get to the bottom, the more I'm expecting something to jump out at me from the dark.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83496356998379586112007-10-28T22:54:00.000-04:002007-10-28T22:54:00.000-04:00This is so vivid. With each descent down and into...This is so vivid. With each descent down and into the past, Paulie's mind is revealing so much more.mermaidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15895749686844178804noreply@blogger.com