tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post7930390585212919912..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #112Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61363290501571546042009-01-20T22:45:00.000-05:002009-01-20T22:45:00.000-05:00Congratulations on the honorable mention!Great job...Congratulations on the honorable mention!<BR/><BR/>Great job with pacing, entertainment value, technical skill, storytelling, and voice! And welcome to the Forties Club!!<BR/><BR/>Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15517775463739646352009-01-18T11:32:00.000-05:002009-01-18T11:32:00.000-05:00I think my favorite part was naming the second bas...I think my favorite part was naming the second bastard after an album, because he took longer to kill. It's details like that that really set a story apart. <BR/><BR/>Excellent work, John. The story unfolded with just the right amount of grittiness and surprise. And yes, the musical references were inspired.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18349229329651982822009-01-17T17:57:00.000-05:002009-01-17T17:57:00.000-05:00Fantastic. This is one of the most "complete" pi...Fantastic. This is one of the most "complete" pieces I've read. Action, reaction, the twist that it's in reverse. Good work.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16717776275829988662009-01-17T07:51:00.000-05:002009-01-17T07:51:00.000-05:00Very great. I enjoyed the names of the murders an...Very great. I enjoyed the names of the murders and that they are Dylan songs. I liked the fact that the tone was light even if the subject matter was heavy. I smiled throughout the read, but I am sorry that he is going to go to jail for his revenge! JR's reference to Gran Torino is right, although Clint's revenge had a different twist altogether. I won't spoil it, great movie though. I enjoyed your piece very much.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88782154120343743882009-01-16T18:28:00.000-05:002009-01-16T18:28:00.000-05:00Nicely contained, complete story that shows the mo...Nicely contained, complete story that shows the motive, the action, and the backstory all in one small nugget. Nicely done.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15224159415139667492009-01-16T10:33:00.000-05:002009-01-16T10:33:00.000-05:00I'm a sucker for musical references. Enjoyable re...I'm a sucker for musical references. Enjoyable read and well written.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78686333566717771332009-01-16T08:15:00.000-05:002009-01-16T08:15:00.000-05:00I like the underlying theme that this is built aro...I like the underlying theme that this is built around. Seems like your narrator is "Tangled Up In Blue" lights at the end.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-91703279773862014632009-01-15T22:59:00.000-05:002009-01-15T22:59:00.000-05:00very nice twist, very fresh using the songs...love...very nice twist, very fresh using the songs...love to read more.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63106831154374965562009-01-15T17:23:00.000-05:002009-01-15T17:23:00.000-05:00Great storytelling! I loved this!I like Bob Dylan...Great storytelling! I loved this!<BR/><BR/><I>I like Bob Dylan. Some of his songs are about justice.</I><BR/><BR/>Perfect lead in. Your use of songs is so clever (and not corny which is an achievement!). And, your characterization of the cop is very real. A very satisfying read-- great job!Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4251026152704941692009-01-15T16:53:00.000-05:002009-01-15T16:53:00.000-05:00Thanks all! I thought about linking Dylan's 'Knock...Thanks all! I thought about linking Dylan's 'Knockin' On Heavens Door' Youtube video [not the one were he sings it live] because of the lyrics regarding the badge and gun but decided not too. I tried to be subtle re; the main character being a cop--hopefully I wasn't too subtle. <BR/>John McAuleyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37211714974884852802009-01-15T14:41:00.000-05:002009-01-15T14:41:00.000-05:00I love how you always turn a story upside down. I...I love how you always turn a story upside down. I was so sure he was a hit man. Great story, John!sandra seamanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09786095189231150008noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41328332881847366742009-01-15T14:15:00.000-05:002009-01-15T14:15:00.000-05:00There are consequences for taking a man's daughter...There are consequences for taking a man's daughter. Oh yeah!BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45591379339975270222009-01-15T08:00:00.000-05:002009-01-15T08:00:00.000-05:00A gritty tale of vengence - very skillfully writte...A gritty tale of vengence - very skillfully written! Love the musical references -K.Lawson Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11204234196229710524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57329399920675459342009-01-15T04:29:00.000-05:002009-01-15T04:29:00.000-05:00Liked the way you have painted the protagonist,fro...Liked the way you have painted the protagonist,from a cold blooded murderer to a father seeking vengeance.Not to mention the clever use of apt songs!<BR/><BR/>Good one :)Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46934550446880405202009-01-15T02:53:00.000-05:002009-01-15T02:53:00.000-05:00Good work.. adding music to it made it really diff...Good work.. adding music to it made it really different.Lenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787400183444796423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4522297975784641302009-01-15T01:25:00.000-05:002009-01-15T01:25:00.000-05:00vengeance - I'd do it too if someone hurt my daugh...vengeance - I'd do it too if someone hurt my daughter. <BR/>Vengeance and songs - good work.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55827867820063298752009-01-15T00:36:00.000-05:002009-01-15T00:36:00.000-05:00Great use of the music and a powerful little story...Great use of the music and a powerful little story in itself.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15358083090760064972009-01-14T22:29:00.000-05:002009-01-14T22:29:00.000-05:00This one really packed a punch. I also liked the m...This one really packed a punch. I also liked the musical references. I wouldn't mind hearing more!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61382267669264706262009-01-14T21:31:00.000-05:002009-01-14T21:31:00.000-05:00The storyline reminds me of Gran Torino. Revenge ...The storyline reminds me of Gran Torino. Revenge can be deadly.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79306227877779695062009-01-14T21:17:00.000-05:002009-01-14T21:17:00.000-05:00nicely done, i'm a dylan fan also :Dnicely done, i'm a dylan fan also :Dlaughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13373175754674175072009-01-14T20:18:00.000-05:002009-01-14T20:18:00.000-05:00I love the way you marry the music to the story!I love the way you marry the music to the story!Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.com