tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post7956553757300523035..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #34Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19633729703878218532011-07-29T10:28:27.286-04:002011-07-29T10:28:27.286-04:00That's a really unique vision of hell. I also...That's a really unique vision of hell. I also thought you portrayed the boredom very well. Solid writing.<br /><br />Congrats on Forties Club!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36870556535756117882011-07-23T16:21:18.467-04:002011-07-23T16:21:18.467-04:00All of the above and more so. I found I wanted to...All of the above and more so. I found I wanted to know more--both before and after. Love a deadpan narrator. This story is hella fun.ssKatherine Tomlinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696623795926663895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72869510876375868932011-07-23T12:27:10.830-04:002011-07-23T12:27:10.830-04:00Wavemancali - I really enjoyed this piece. I thou...Wavemancali - I really enjoyed this piece. I thought the internal dialogue at he crashed was entertaining and spot-on. I especially loved that it ended with "Oh man, I'm dead."<br /><br />My theory about hell is that it's personal to everyone. In this case we have an adrenaline junkie who is doomed to eternal boredom. I bet that through the Eye of Sauran is just another dull red room.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-62601078690984157942011-07-23T10:23:28.735-04:002011-07-23T10:23:28.735-04:00Thank you everyone for the comments.
As always in...Thank you everyone for the comments.<br /><br />As always in Jason's contests one of the things you look forward to is the comments your stories generate.Wavemannsnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48148204122068369362011-07-21T03:42:43.583-04:002011-07-21T03:42:43.583-04:00Good story. Great pacing. Like the character devel...Good story. Great pacing. Like the character development created in so few words.C. Sonberg Larsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09925003570881003478noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33434863292117405842011-07-20T08:07:58.239-04:002011-07-20T08:07:58.239-04:00Don't know if you've been in an accident, ...Don't know if you've been in an accident, but the slow motion of events really does happen just as you described.<br /><br />I haven't been a fire and brimstone guy for a long time. You described hell perfectly!Richard Levangiehttp://richardlevangie.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5802533600461394512011-07-19T16:27:40.593-04:002011-07-19T16:27:40.593-04:00I strike out towards the eye. this last line real...<i>I strike out towards the eye. </i> this last line really makes it for me, and this one is superb: "<i>Is hell a choice between eternal nothingness and foolish decisions?</i>"Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1661790671600040312011-07-19T16:22:33.152-04:002011-07-19T16:22:33.152-04:00I saw a wreck like this yesterday with all the sam...I saw a wreck like this yesterday with all the same actors and wondered if anyone survived - now I know their fate! Great read! ~Jana A.bluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80987868343857353352011-07-19T13:09:17.602-04:002011-07-19T13:09:17.602-04:00He could be a character in "Drive Angry"...He could be a character in "Drive Angry". Don't look at me like that. I loved the movie for all the wrong reasons.<br /><br />This was spooky, chilling, yet witty all the same. Thanks for the good read.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17728691494351643442011-07-19T11:23:15.971-04:002011-07-19T11:23:15.971-04:00Loved the waiting game...maybe that's truly wh...Loved the waiting game...maybe that's truly what Hell is...a waiting game until near insanity and boredom makes us strike out in the direction of our nightmares.<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54301667626443835142011-07-19T07:01:17.261-04:002011-07-19T07:01:17.261-04:00Loved this!! Hilarious!! Funny, witty, more please...Loved this!! Hilarious!! Funny, witty, more please!! Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5258616993276491082011-07-19T02:20:22.373-04:002011-07-19T02:20:22.373-04:00As Chris said, it is indeed chilling! I'm wond...As Chris said, it is indeed chilling! I'm wondering why he's in hell when he(or she) ended up dead trying to avoid killing a child. It's enough to make you shiver!fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3047194615360041332011-07-18T08:44:46.046-04:002011-07-18T08:44:46.046-04:00Really enjoyed the voice in this.
Your vision of ...Really enjoyed the voice in this. <br />Your vision of hell as a choice between eternal boredom or something infitely horrible is chilling.Chris Alliniottehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04094925215735680849noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-91814225786836133212011-07-18T00:54:50.593-04:002011-07-18T00:54:50.593-04:00...and I'm lying at the bottom of a pit in the......and I'm lying at the bottom of a pit in the blazing sun, torn and twisted at the foot of a burning bike...<br /><br />Maybe that evil red eye thing is your heart, still beating, breaking out of your body and flying away...<br /><br />Anyway, great description of the monolog in your head as you head over the side of the cliff.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10503008291461062662011-07-17T09:00:56.692-04:002011-07-17T09:00:56.692-04:00Great pacing. I certainly hope hell isn't bori...Great pacing. I certainly hope hell isn't boring...I expect to see meet some of my favorite people there. ;)Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-71038824635646202602011-07-16T21:33:25.067-04:002011-07-16T21:33:25.067-04:00... I try to rationalize avoiding the boredomGotta...<i>... I try to rationalize avoiding the boredom</i>Gotta love trying to rationalize boredom. It's just not possible! :)Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87719767320398684832011-07-16T16:46:57.576-04:002011-07-16T16:46:57.576-04:00plus, it may also qualify as the first entry about...plus, it may also qualify as the first entry about someone dead, or zombie.<br />an interesting take!SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3933074768729955512011-07-16T15:06:11.962-04:002011-07-16T15:06:11.962-04:00Wonderful job conveying character and voice. In 25...Wonderful job conveying character and voice. In 250 words, you've created a character so strong, he seems ready to leap from the page and drag us toward that damn eye. I wonder what he'll find there?<br /><br />Thanks for sharing!Michele Zugnonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12394802719932859470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88370593234453426822011-07-16T13:55:06.685-04:002011-07-16T13:55:06.685-04:00I quite like the voice in your story.I quite like the voice in your story.Krunalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08309143186145830120noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45844112301383819492011-07-16T12:00:29.531-04:002011-07-16T12:00:29.531-04:00YAY! First official Sauron reference!!YAY! First official Sauron reference!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com