tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post7978819184842503632..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Safe PlacesJason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-294219887461211452007-12-12T03:37:00.000-05:002007-12-12T03:37:00.000-05:00Generally, I'm all into discussingexploring feelin...Generally, I'm all into discussingexploring feelings/emotions one feels. Writing a (slightly) disturbing piece may be part of the process, too. I am totally against 'hiding' or 'masking'.<BR/>(I've re-read my comment only to find horrible grammar errors. I must have been emotionally unstable while writing.)SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50449388685517057202007-12-12T00:19:00.000-05:002007-12-12T00:19:00.000-05:00Szelsofa, I greatly appreciate the additional thou...Szelsofa, I greatly appreciate the additional thoughts. I respect your desire for more uplifting art at this point in your life. Thank you for reading something exploring a darker struggle and commenting despite your feelings. At least you can take some solace in the fact that it was something good for me to get out. I don't want to turn away from those thoughts and emotions when they arise.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26595176303764391062007-12-11T05:19:00.000-05:002007-12-11T05:19:00.000-05:00I'm sorry for the typos and bad grammar here and t...I'm sorry for the typos and bad grammar here and there in my last comment up here; I was typing fast.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38317403127874728742007-12-11T05:18:00.000-05:002007-12-11T05:18:00.000-05:00uhm...was it the selection of verbs?dissect/stab/s...uhm...<BR/>was it the selection of verbs?<BR/><BR/>dissect/stab/scratch/toast<BR/>and nouns?<BR/><BR/>knive/disappointment/cartoon/disease/reflex/tornado<BR/>and other expresssions?<BR/><BR/>not allowed to be/unnecessarily/surrendered<BR/><BR/>See, if I set the poem apart, there are not really any word that conveys calmness, comfort, peace and so on.<BR/>It's not that a poem should always do so, it's perhaps that I am less open to disbalance and danger...<BR/><BR/>Perhaps it is due to my present feelings about the near future of Hungary, or the uncertainity re: the completion of our house, or the unfavourable situation DH is in due to his beliefs and political stance.<BR/><BR/>Perhaps I'm seeking quiet and rest to calm myself and you poem, however great it might be, kick me in the ass and this feeling, right now is not comfortable.<BR/><BR/>It's not that a poem should be comfortable, ther's not such a rule, perhaps it's just me who does need comfort and not a slap in the face.<BR/><BR/>I hope I was able to make myself clear.<BR/>I thank you for asking for my opinion.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56872861681330172562007-12-10T20:29:00.000-05:002007-12-10T20:29:00.000-05:00Julie, blog writing can't stand against polished, ...Julie, blog writing can't stand against polished, published writing in a technical sense, but traditional publishing can't begin to compete with this format for wide-ranging, pure creativity. There's a role for both. Where else would you find so many gems that no one would take the risk to put onto paper?<BR/><BR/>Electric Orchid Hunter, a reggae beat, I like that! Crack out the steel drums!<BR/><BR/>Canterbury Soul, yes, that's my beloved foot, LOL. Photoshopped a bit.<BR/><BR/>Aine, that was a great catch to see the link with the last post. It must have be subconscious on my part. Shelter (and the lack thereof) has been on my mind.<BR/><BR/>Vesper, glad you enjoyed it, regardless of the author. ;)<BR/><BR/>Szelsofa, I'm curious about the disturbing element. What were the thoughts/emotions provoked that were uncomfortable?<BR/><BR/>Aine, roles which you excel at. :)<BR/><BR/>Sarah, I'm embarrassed to admit that for years upon years I've been using utterly Mickey Mouse photo editing software. Because of the project we talked about, I "splurged" and got Photoshop. This was one of the artistic effects. I wanted something close to reality, but still very far from reality. As for the poem, it's about being laid bare, willingly, and struggling with the exposure and sensitivity that results.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60008117891305689932007-12-10T14:22:00.000-05:002007-12-10T14:22:00.000-05:00This photo reminds me of the film, "Waking Life," ...This photo reminds me of the film, "Waking Life," which I really enjoyed. How did you do it, Jason?<BR/><BR/>The poem has rolled around in my head all day. I've come back to it several times, wanting to "dissect what you believe" with my own little knife, I guess. ;) Not sure if I've gotten beneath the surface, though.<BR/><BR/>Ultimately, I love the sharpness of the first two stanzas surrendering to the softness of the last two lines, which are exceptionally lovely. The whole poem has a really great flow. Will be interested to read your comments on it.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39279254184201101172007-12-10T12:48:00.000-05:002007-12-10T12:48:00.000-05:00Vesper and Szelsofa, As much as I wish I were a p...Vesper and Szelsofa, As much as I wish I were a poet, I'm not this good with words! This is Jason's, not mine. I'm happy with my roles as "muse", "greatest fan" and "loving wife"!Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33014747719046250912007-12-10T12:30:00.000-05:002007-12-10T12:30:00.000-05:00It was a strange and slightly disturbing read, but...It was a strange and slightly disturbing read, but I liked the experiment. I'm glad Aine's started publishing her poetic thoughts, too :)SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-675846823522193112007-12-10T12:22:00.000-05:002007-12-10T12:22:00.000-05:00Aine, so this is yours! Beautiful! "Tornados taste...Aine, so this is yours! Beautiful! "Tornados taste safe places/Surrendered all to you" - superb.Vesperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12417602625059442986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27103425206437529102007-12-10T11:39:00.000-05:002007-12-10T11:39:00.000-05:00Electric Orchid Hunter, yeah, I'm feeling the regg...Electric Orchid Hunter, yeah, I'm feeling the reggae beat :)<BR/><BR/>canterbury soul, Jason is a slave to his art-- yes, he put his foot in the snow yesterday. <BR/> **shaking head and murmuring through my smile as I walk away...**<BR/><BR/>Shelter is a basic need. We all need safe places. Once we leave the womb, we must create our own safe place. Building a strong shelter is difficult (just ask the three pigs :) ) Failure to do so places stress on our system which lessens survival. Humans have the advantage of working together to build a stronger shelter. But ultimately it is an individual's basic need.Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68425689862006011942007-12-10T11:04:00.000-05:002007-12-10T11:04:00.000-05:00powerful tone contained in such a small frame. ve...powerful tone contained in such a small frame. very good!<BR/><BR/>is that your foot?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22725737625585560802007-12-10T10:38:00.000-05:002007-12-10T10:38:00.000-05:00Somewhere out there, drifting, is a reggae melody ...Somewhere out there, drifting, is a reggae melody in minor key. These are its lyrics. I loved the rhythm in it. And the knives.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16532403180123519635noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26095096115650399032007-12-10T06:37:00.000-05:002007-12-10T06:37:00.000-05:00Jason - just thinking about this poem, and picking...Jason - just thinking about this poem, and picking up what you said re writing for blogs on the previous post. <BR/><BR/>A lot of food for thought in what you've said about encouraging raw creativity v polished output in this demand constrained context.<BR/><BR/>...Jane H made the comment that ALL poems are ultimately drafts; Seamus (S'Words)is battling the concept that blog writing isn't seen as professional...it's all in the mix.<BR/><BR/>A fringe approach gradually becomes mainstream - & guess more people have problems with an over critical editor than they do with being lax.<BR/><BR/>I found what you've said clarifies what I'm sifting mentally. Thanks.<BR/><BR/>btw - Tim Hallinan is suggesting a Dickens Challenge over at Blog Cabin - write a novel online in installments....virtual nexushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11955335598875413324noreply@blogger.com