tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post838618636894986060..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #54Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32130469676145555872008-03-06T09:06:00.000-05:002008-03-06T09:06:00.000-05:00"As if dreams were a reason for leaving."Great lin..."As if dreams were a reason for leaving."<BR/><BR/>Great line. You touch on some very complex situations and emotions. Clearly (within these 250 words) these two are quite a mismatch. But I wonder about what brought them together.<BR/><BR/>Excellent characterization and storytelling! Congrats!Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83227944221970890842008-03-04T22:30:00.000-05:002008-03-04T22:30:00.000-05:00Thanks to everyone for the positive comments, and ...Thanks to everyone for the positive comments, and to Jason et. al. for thinking my story worthy of second place out of a universe of highly creative stories.Michaelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16251526301675878669noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84412034218016240182008-03-04T16:41:00.000-05:002008-03-04T16:41:00.000-05:00Very inventive! I was lulled into the moment perf...Very inventive! I was lulled into the moment perfectly. I loved the uniqueness and the quirkiness. Great! Highest marks.<BR/><BR/>Congratulations on 2nd Place!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70727387661542522182008-03-01T22:27:00.000-05:002008-03-01T22:27:00.000-05:00That last line screams "Country Song." Love it! I'...That last line screams "Country Song." Love it! I'm with absolute vanilla (& atyllah) - nicely ironic.bluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12892695558250667952008-02-29T17:02:00.000-05:002008-02-29T17:02:00.000-05:00What a great last line!What a great last line!Linda Petershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06773494842656021840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46214577538931927382008-02-29T02:36:00.000-05:002008-02-29T02:36:00.000-05:00A nicely ironic piece of writing and the ending is...A nicely ironic piece of writing and the ending is brilliant! Well done!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87694899314448110162008-02-28T20:34:00.000-05:002008-02-28T20:34:00.000-05:00i liked the aspect of functionality that you intro...i liked the aspect of functionality that you introduced... very fresh...paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10511862028034728952008-02-28T18:29:00.000-05:002008-02-28T18:29:00.000-05:00Cool and very originalCool and very originalwrath999https://www.blogger.com/profile/10964105112015979524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82653165254964318342008-02-28T08:42:00.000-05:002008-02-28T08:42:00.000-05:00LOVED that last line!LOVED that last line!JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51235213828672761282008-02-28T06:54:00.000-05:002008-02-28T06:54:00.000-05:00An interesting take with true characters.An interesting take with true characters.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66177793272122675792008-02-28T01:28:00.000-05:002008-02-28T01:28:00.000-05:00last line is truly a gem. And the whole story is r...last line is truly a gem. And the whole story is really a nice interpretation and is wonderfully done :)Lenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787400183444796423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13664102391536632422008-02-27T16:46:00.000-05:002008-02-27T16:46:00.000-05:00It took me three readings to really get this piece...It took me three readings to really get this piece, but not for bad reasons - it's that it's so full, of great imagery, tight characterization, perfect little details. So, so well done!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5677548138626685792008-02-27T11:40:00.000-05:002008-02-27T11:40:00.000-05:00A good read and a perfect last line.John McAuleyA good read and a perfect last line.<BR/><BR/>John McAuleyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26769192121591665872008-02-27T09:50:00.000-05:002008-02-27T09:50:00.000-05:00I really like this composition - it has a cadence ...I really like this composition - it has a cadence like poetry, and the voice is honest.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60240275782683869152008-02-27T09:35:00.000-05:002008-02-27T09:35:00.000-05:00I loved that last line - it was such a perfect end...I loved that last line - it was such a perfect ending. Nicely done all round, Michael.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87023054573013469152008-02-27T07:46:00.000-05:002008-02-27T07:46:00.000-05:00You gave her terrific lines.Nice voice.Wonderful c...You gave her terrific lines.<BR/>Nice voice.Wonderful close.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52607551078207980842008-02-26T22:05:00.000-05:002008-02-26T22:05:00.000-05:00Very nicely done!Very nicely done!Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76566192727322429152008-02-26T20:24:00.000-05:002008-02-26T20:24:00.000-05:00She remembered the words, shame she didn't underst...She remembered the words, shame she didn't understand them. The tree that grew up to be a door was a cool ending.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67438360486242996672008-02-26T20:03:00.000-05:002008-02-26T20:03:00.000-05:00Very original interpretation here. I love that the...Very original interpretation here. I love that the tree is the door that contains his desperately sought isolation. <BR/><BR/>Very natural, effective writing here. Great work.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25531861422926446952008-02-26T17:37:00.000-05:002008-02-26T17:37:00.000-05:00Michael,Some people just don't understand.Maybe as...Michael,<BR/>Some people just don't understand.<BR/>Maybe as she matures she'll find the magic in the tree. Until then; You've described the end of the beginning very well!<BR/>relrelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09030572981830789370noreply@blogger.com