tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post8442725789155424526..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #44Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34170634490233006142007-11-21T16:37:00.000-05:002007-11-21T16:37:00.000-05:00Yes, a mystical take. Like a shaman. Her job to ...Yes, a mystical take. Like a shaman. Her job to do alone.<BR/><BR/>I really like your use of the sky. Very striking.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42871245016739109972007-11-19T00:33:00.000-05:002007-11-19T00:33:00.000-05:00This is extremely well done - but makes me want mo...This is extremely well done - but makes me want more! It feels like a fable - an old tale passed from generation to generation. I'd love to know more.Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39578650065583280502007-11-17T02:20:00.000-05:002007-11-17T02:20:00.000-05:00Your style has an absolutely lovely flow. I can s...Your style has an absolutely lovely flow. I can see this story as one of the legends of a tribe of people. Impressive!rainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04258822737734173873noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45389067797633906042007-11-15T22:09:00.000-05:002007-11-15T22:09:00.000-05:00You craft strong mood. I think this is the streng...You craft strong mood. I think this is the strength of your piece. Caution on your opening line with a phrase like "almost imperceptible fade." Find a strong Anglo Saxon word, instead, and lay it in there like a brick.Victor Bravo Monchego, Jrhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05251479110131293284noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53332914471986818862007-11-14T20:08:00.000-05:002007-11-14T20:08:00.000-05:00It is very mystical. I like that it is somewhat a...It is very mystical. I like that it is somewhat ambigious as to why the sunrise color is salvation for her village.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38610443782500702002007-11-14T16:41:00.000-05:002007-11-14T16:41:00.000-05:00Very nicely written, but I don't understand it.Very nicely written, but I don't understand it.The Anti-Wifehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02027321787352577548noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5597762195137281442007-11-14T16:34:00.000-05:002007-11-14T16:34:00.000-05:00The writing is flawless. I will read this over and...The writing is flawless. I will read this over and over and hope to learn how to write vivid description.<BR/>Beautiful!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83656131042353791462007-11-14T14:18:00.000-05:002007-11-14T14:18:00.000-05:00Magnicent, Hoodie. I literally got chills while r...Magnicent, Hoodie. I literally got chills while reading your piece. LOVE IT! :)<BR/><BR/>AngeliqueThe Quoiblerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13632853309100258560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38967574280611659942007-11-14T13:38:00.000-05:002007-11-14T13:38:00.000-05:00wow, that was impressive.wow, that was impressive.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6239137154304329172007-11-14T13:05:00.000-05:002007-11-14T13:05:00.000-05:00I like the mystical twist. A new direction for you...I like the mystical twist. A new direction for you, but a good one.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88238081411655505722007-11-14T12:49:00.000-05:002007-11-14T12:49:00.000-05:00What an imagination, Hoodie. I'm the one who's ter...What an imagination, Hoodie. <B>I'm</B> the one who's terribly impressed.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35629269390342196712007-11-14T10:59:00.000-05:002007-11-14T10:59:00.000-05:00I liked this mystical interpretation. The girl's p...I liked this mystical interpretation. The girl's patience and fortitude really came through, as did her relief with her treasure. Very richly written, too.<BR/><BR/>Good job!Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.com