tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post8462873612129934037..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #77Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55565253303972583422010-01-19T18:48:55.578-05:002010-01-19T18:48:55.578-05:00A little down on the less fortunate, but it put yo...A little down on the less fortunate, but it put you into the moment and I like that. Good writing.<br />Carla.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68481249875165832832010-01-19T16:29:42.201-05:002010-01-19T16:29:42.201-05:00Dear Entrants #1-105,
I have read your pieces so ...Dear Entrants #1-105,<br /><br />I have read your pieces so that I can fairly participate in the Readers' Choice vote. (I read all of them through last week, before I started commenting.) I <i>will</i> be coming back around to offer <a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my keep/tweak comment</a>, but I didn't want anyone to snark. <br /><br />Cheers,<br />Aerin (#236)<br /><br />BTW, it's perfectly fine if you still want to snark, but this way you can choose a more appropriate subject, like Sarah Palin's hair or the enigmatic career of Justin Timberlake.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86914905379808672002010-01-17T07:45:35.472-05:002010-01-17T07:45:35.472-05:00This has made my short-list. After reading approxi...This has made my short-list. After reading approximately two-hundred entries, your stories was memorable. --JRjames r. tomlinsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3071547531591413322010-01-16T23:58:37.106-05:002010-01-16T23:58:37.106-05:00Very thoughtful. Love Grandma!Very thoughtful. Love Grandma!McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28735021002892527872010-01-15T13:05:38.263-05:002010-01-15T13:05:38.263-05:00I love what you've done with the sky here. Gra...I love what you've done with the sky here. Grandma's eyes are cold and blue like the sky but the sky is where he wants to be. It's the only place that will let him stretch his wings.It's the only place that can validate him and give him the freedom he needs.He's looking for his sky in his grandma's eyes.<br /><br />RaneeDr. Ranee Kaur Banerjeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09915043555307038876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90183065388125389002010-01-15T05:57:42.499-05:002010-01-15T05:57:42.499-05:00Ditto what Laurel said. Must feel suffocating to b...Ditto what Laurel said. Must feel suffocating to be told how to feel, that you should judge others. Your characterizations are very well done.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24344290314029343242010-01-14T10:19:29.667-05:002010-01-14T10:19:29.667-05:00Got here late, so I can only echo and agree: you&...Got here late, so I can only echo and agree: you've created some great characters in this short space.Kurt Hendrickshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16183333362118745153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60917259523008408242010-01-13T18:22:35.328-05:002010-01-13T18:22:35.328-05:00Very good characterization. Loved the grandmother....Very good characterization. Loved the grandmother.<br /><br />J. RandickAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53269847530733754482010-01-13T10:30:42.470-05:002010-01-13T10:30:42.470-05:00Gotta love Granny.Gotta love Granny.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90819307617588996912010-01-12T14:29:38.640-05:002010-01-12T14:29:38.640-05:00hahahahhaaha!!!! I absolutely adored this!!!!
My ...hahahahhaaha!!!! I absolutely adored this!!!!<br /><br />My Gran is alive and well!!!!<br /><br />Brilliant!!!!!DILLIGAFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16520650650468676361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57857672728990298922010-01-11T22:53:54.873-05:002010-01-11T22:53:54.873-05:00I've no idea how much time the MC spends with ...I've no idea how much time the MC spends with his grandma, but it reads like a lot. Perhaps he craves freedom from her judgment, her inability to see another person or be sympathetic.<br /><br />There is a lot going on here. It reads like an early scene in a movie, and very visual for me. Nice.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1083807143802913642010-01-11T19:42:47.794-05:002010-01-11T19:42:47.794-05:00I love the quote from Hamlet. It reminds us that i...I love the quote from Hamlet. It reminds us that it's unfair to judge people who are going through difficult times. We don't know their stories. Very thoughtful.Meghanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03375626649089998707noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69100252778798020812010-01-11T19:15:04.114-05:002010-01-11T19:15:04.114-05:00go go, granny!go go, granny!laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59337080645799879892010-01-10T11:02:39.027-05:002010-01-10T11:02:39.027-05:00Funny, that's my father's favorite oral re...Funny, that's my father's favorite oral recitation. Not a fun grandmother, but I think I've known her. Fun to read!catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16202494002885317372010-01-10T08:49:19.927-05:002010-01-10T08:49:19.927-05:00I guess i love Grandma, though I guess I would lov...I guess i love Grandma, though I guess I would love her distanced. Great characters created!Lenahttp://www.thecolorsmagazine.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83124606658434130532010-01-10T06:26:12.020-05:002010-01-10T06:26:12.020-05:00I don't really get how cloistered the MC feels...I don't really get how cloistered the MC feels, but the Grandma and bum characters are portrayed really well!Kartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-482609206134644512010-01-10T04:17:20.961-05:002010-01-10T04:17:20.961-05:00You don’t have to be cruel lady.
This is a great ...<i>You don’t have to be cruel lady.</i><br /><br />This is a great line. The Bum immediately realises Grandma is cold and cruel and that this makes her feel superior. It's also her <i>choice</i> to be so. I think he's telling her that she <i>has</i> a choice not necessarily admonishing her for her cruelty. <br /><br />I could feel the cold, strong grasp of grandma on the child the whole way through this. I can see why he longs to untether himself.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81652042630824738662010-01-10T01:13:02.279-05:002010-01-10T01:13:02.279-05:00I'm reminded of a certain Flannery O'Conno...I'm reminded of a certain Flannery O'Connor story where Mr. Head takes his grandson to the big city. I like your narrator's self-discovery, his realization that his grandmother's description of bums isn't necessarily correct. Very well told. --JRAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28606859263934369862010-01-10T00:26:50.306-05:002010-01-10T00:26:50.306-05:00Bum = out of work Shakespearean actor? :-)
Intere...Bum = out of work Shakespearean actor? :-)<br /><br />Interesting story and characters.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26739003195584460532010-01-10T00:10:40.483-05:002010-01-10T00:10:40.483-05:00I love how subtly you put the feeling of trapped a...I love how subtly you put the feeling of trapped across. It really makes your entry stand out.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45876918348876700962010-01-09T22:40:20.356-05:002010-01-09T22:40:20.356-05:00Hey pjd, there are lines that give clues into the ...Hey pjd, there are lines that give clues into the MC. First sentence, Grandma loved taking him downtown, didn't say the MC loved it. Also Grandma's eyes were cold and blue like the sky. Cold, not friendly, etc. He wants to escape. You'd be amazed at what bums can do, recite poetry, beautiful singers, etc.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39569395282342419112010-01-09T18:34:48.998-05:002010-01-09T18:34:48.998-05:00A bum that quotes Hamlet. How odd. The situation...A bum that quotes Hamlet. How odd. The situation seems unique, and it's a creative depiction. But I don't really understand why the MC feels the need for that kind of freedom.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-30832971437997143452010-01-09T17:52:41.201-05:002010-01-09T17:52:41.201-05:00Gotta love Grandma's with attitude. ;)Gotta love Grandma's with attitude. ;)Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70140453813075785822010-01-09T13:47:15.146-05:002010-01-09T13:47:15.146-05:00Always mysterious them, grandmas. :)
But am sure ...Always mysterious them, grandmas. :)<br /><br />But am sure she means the best...Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42305531007475564442010-01-09T13:20:06.841-05:002010-01-09T13:20:06.841-05:00HA, she knew that line right off! Nice story.HA, she knew that line right off! Nice story.Anthony Rapinohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11581208296144295224noreply@blogger.com