tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post8658399990768938518..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #147Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2505538896630331392009-07-28T10:51:39.681-04:002009-07-28T10:51:39.681-04:00Congrats on the honorable mention. I enjoyed the i...Congrats on the honorable mention. I enjoyed the irony and the poignancy of this one.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40632568167115407862009-07-27T10:02:03.828-04:002009-07-27T10:02:03.828-04:00That was really powerful. Needing a drink to hand...That was really powerful. Needing a drink to handle the AA meeting. Sounds very real.<br /><br />Perfect score.<br /><br />Congratulations on Honorable Mention!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47818902110174020082009-07-20T19:30:09.427-04:002009-07-20T19:30:09.427-04:00Strong writing and a lovely piece. I like the hope...Strong writing and a lovely piece. I like the hope this one offers.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83635390429390242882009-07-20T17:24:24.487-04:002009-07-20T17:24:24.487-04:00Well done.Well done.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61237172001331740202009-07-19T14:10:33.356-04:002009-07-19T14:10:33.356-04:00We've had almost the same ending line in two s...We've had almost the same ending line in two stories here, yet they couldn't be more different and amazing.<br /><br />Liked this one a lot. The character build up and the visualization was just perfect.<br /><br />Loved it.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13443093143431931832009-07-18T08:44:31.989-04:002009-07-18T08:44:31.989-04:00This was great. I loved the scene you painted as s...This was great. I loved the scene you painted as she entered and the ending scene was perfect. I was wondering where she was going...<br />Very good job in writing this.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90062724884859649862009-07-18T02:16:48.146-04:002009-07-18T02:16:48.146-04:00The bloke at the bar seems nice but a little too f...The bloke at the bar seems nice but a little too forward. He'll end up thinking about her for a bit, then forgetting he ever met her. Which is OK.<br /><br />I like the opening paragraph best, with the heels, the curious stares, her dismissal of them.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81801226400408311702009-07-17T18:49:15.893-04:002009-07-17T18:49:15.893-04:00Close call.Close call.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64243000181402793372009-07-17T12:05:00.191-04:002009-07-17T12:05:00.191-04:00I totally saw this as an intro to a Law and Order ...I totally saw this as an intro to a Law and Order episode - I know,that makes me weird, but it's also a testament to the visual power of your writingAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13107651196741698182009-07-17T09:31:10.859-04:002009-07-17T09:31:10.859-04:00The strength of your story is in its simplicity......The strength of your story is in its simplicity... its everyone's story... and to grab someones attention through something that isn't hyperbolic requires serious skill... often unnoticed skill... hats off... I loved this one...As the Mind Meandershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05289502626334651157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45568832843009088782009-07-17T08:14:28.090-04:002009-07-17T08:14:28.090-04:00Saved by a would be suitor and a tiny strand of he...Saved by a would be suitor and a tiny strand of her own conscience. Recovery is hard work. Very well written.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73836404232171850762009-07-16T16:24:31.639-04:002009-07-16T16:24:31.639-04:00Nicely done...Nicely done...rebeccahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18248554235709475320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25329363580295919982009-07-16T04:15:49.122-04:002009-07-16T04:15:49.122-04:00I like the hope in your story. Very nicely written...I like the hope in your story. Very nicely written. You've captured her tension and struggle perfectly.Ranee Kaur Banerjeehttp://www.raneespoems.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59319345255741363252009-07-15T20:08:33.633-04:002009-07-15T20:08:33.633-04:00Go, Lucy! Great ending. Refreshingly uplifting.Go, Lucy! Great ending. Refreshingly uplifting.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12458341071954418562009-07-15T19:54:35.114-04:002009-07-15T19:54:35.114-04:00Redemption. I like it.Redemption. I like it.Cloveshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00864382831898822793noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9122868645913186062009-07-15T17:19:32.945-04:002009-07-15T17:19:32.945-04:00Excellent! And really well portrayed!Excellent! And really well portrayed!Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22921003034859336572009-07-15T16:30:07.905-04:002009-07-15T16:30:07.905-04:00No casualities here, even though her date was temp...No casualities here, even though her date was temptation.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.com