tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post8757641223093501386..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #171Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger31125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37930667433153909152010-01-22T10:13:57.355-05:002010-01-22T10:13:57.355-05:00Beautifully written and great voice!
Congrats on ...Beautifully written and great voice!<br /><br />Congrats on placing!<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51567602963667082612010-01-19T15:30:59.894-05:002010-01-19T15:30:59.894-05:00Wow - easily one of my favorites so far.
Great vo...Wow - easily one of my favorites so far.<br /><br />Great voice, great descriptions. . . and a hell of a question to ponder! :)<br /><br />JimJim Bronyaurhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09580674307591916148noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59494449443790892902010-01-19T13:51:18.258-05:002010-01-19T13:51:18.258-05:00Aaah... simple yet profound! Just the way, Pops to...Aaah... simple yet profound! Just the way, Pops told it to the kids. An enchanting story for the kids and an answer to the one who seeks, in the very same words. :)Harishhttp://www.oxygenflow.netnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42103148548024507062010-01-19T07:34:13.388-05:002010-01-19T07:34:13.388-05:00This caught, and held my attention. Lovely! I th...This caught, and held my attention. Lovely! I think what I like most is how vivid the characters seem, with very little actual description. That is good writing.Terrihttp://misterri.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31645591591443469592010-01-18T19:33:14.972-05:002010-01-18T19:33:14.972-05:00This is so, so, so good!!! I could read it again a...This is so, so, so good!!! I could read it again and again. Very well done, on so many levels. On my shortlist, for sure.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88907424014997794252010-01-18T14:03:10.584-05:002010-01-18T14:03:10.584-05:00I can live with that. It's my favorite cliche ...I can live with that. It's my favorite cliche and it was shorter than the original wording (I had to cut 130 words to keep it in regulations)<br />thanx!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51920883603226888352010-01-17T18:14:23.404-05:002010-01-17T18:14:23.404-05:00my caveat
Something I Would Keep
"straw hat o...<br><br><a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my caveat</a><br><br /><b>Something I Would Keep</b><br><br />"straw hat on the ground waiting for donations that didn't always come" - a fantastic way to set a scene - <br /><br /><b>Something I Might Tweak</b><br><br />so much freshness in the writing that "time out of mind" seems clichedAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10221894080903150772010-01-17T14:18:28.683-05:002010-01-17T14:18:28.683-05:00What a great story! I think all the pilots in the ...What a great story! I think all the pilots in the world (or would be pilots) would agree with the end! :)Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15846262383600908272010-01-16T19:19:14.700-05:002010-01-16T19:19:14.700-05:00Perhaps we did lose both. Excellent piece of writi...Perhaps we did lose both. Excellent piece of writing here.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13022922430222866712010-01-16T14:49:42.784-05:002010-01-16T14:49:42.784-05:00wings or a soul...
what a great place to go w...wings or a soul... <br /><br /><br /><br />what a great place to go with that age old question of why can't we fly..<br /><br /><br />brava.quin brownehttp://www.quinbrowne-words.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11954473983853527622010-01-16T12:01:50.897-05:002010-01-16T12:01:50.897-05:00Alisa - this is really quite lovely. I adore Pops...Alisa - this is really quite lovely. I adore Pops and I think you wrote him with great skill. He does feel timeless.<br /><br />The ending was very satisfying too. Lovely. Quite lovely.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31913261111368179042010-01-16T07:04:24.385-05:002010-01-16T07:04:24.385-05:00and wondered if we didn’t somehow lose both in the...<i>and wondered if we didn’t somehow lose both in the choosing.</i><br /><br />got me thinking. excellent piece.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51730471810078560662010-01-15T12:58:14.220-05:002010-01-15T12:58:14.220-05:00Lovely ... "The choices we make", how ap...Lovely ... "The choices we make", how apt!Kartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76936234063526307712010-01-15T00:11:39.244-05:002010-01-15T00:11:39.244-05:00I love how you built up the character of Pops in s...I love how you built up the character of Pops in so few words.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5203636878074916782010-01-14T18:25:24.735-05:002010-01-14T18:25:24.735-05:00echo Laurel. This is really very good.echo Laurel. This is really very good.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61793324191764252542010-01-14T11:31:18.276-05:002010-01-14T11:31:18.276-05:00Pops is great.Pops is great.Deb Smythenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12206349275410937092010-01-13T15:27:21.827-05:002010-01-13T15:27:21.827-05:00I wonder how you managed to combine so much in suc...I wonder how you managed to combine so much in such a short piece. Really great! Liked it.lenahttp://www.thecolorsmagazine.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12109884853210536562010-01-13T15:26:07.441-05:002010-01-13T15:26:07.441-05:00haww.... beautiful. Pops is indeed one of the most...haww.... beautiful. Pops is indeed one of the most memorable characters in this contest. such a wise and yes...'timeless/ageless' man...<br />and the last line. My God...it left me reeling. such an amazing, thought provoking insightful piece. <br /><br />loved it. thoroughly.Preetihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00279859240371070699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44852117668313797392010-01-13T09:45:33.425-05:002010-01-13T09:45:33.425-05:00definitely a keeper, thx alisa...definitely a keeper, thx alisa...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69435692558062107422010-01-13T08:00:52.311-05:002010-01-13T08:00:52.311-05:00Whew! When I got to the line "we had to choo...Whew! When I got to the line "we had to choose once, wings or a soul, one but not both" I was floored and overcome with shivers. I love this beautiful story. Especially your old black story telling man. Just wonderful wonderful. Putting it on my favorites list.catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34561561465526180872010-01-13T03:23:07.125-05:002010-01-13T03:23:07.125-05:00Genius. Very clever plot.
This has emotions, phil...Genius. Very clever plot.<br /><br />This has emotions, philosophy, learning - everything! What more could a reader want?<br />Truly enjoyed reading it. Thank you!Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20937566778201295122010-01-13T02:45:17.825-05:002010-01-13T02:45:17.825-05:00"..but not both"
Loved this one."..but not both"<br /><br />Loved this one.austerehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16839224877080864005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40811776491936328802010-01-12T23:33:44.845-05:002010-01-12T23:33:44.845-05:00Cool and vivid story. I could see PopsCool and vivid story. I could see Popswrath999https://www.blogger.com/profile/10964105112015979524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89135450950626024762010-01-12T22:58:03.068-05:002010-01-12T22:58:03.068-05:00I love you guys. Thanx for the nice comments. If I...I love you guys. Thanx for the nice comments. If I had wings I'd fly over and say so myself.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88395955235417197772010-01-12T22:53:40.862-05:002010-01-12T22:53:40.862-05:00For a second I thought you were attempting a frame...For a second I thought you were attempting a frame-story in 250-words. Whew! I liked the innocent child's question and Pop's answer. --JRAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com