tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post8793825633480414713..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #47Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14369880597042258202009-01-21T04:47:00.000-05:002009-01-21T04:47:00.000-05:00Thank you all for your very generous comments. I h...Thank you all for your very generous comments. I haven't written anything for a while so this is a great kick start especially as I made it to the Forties Club!<BR/><BR/>HxHilaryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16453656841031800824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45602812475618291102009-01-20T21:53:00.000-05:002009-01-20T21:53:00.000-05:00Great job with pacing, entertainment value, techni...Great job with pacing, entertainment value, technical skill, storytelling, and pacing! And welcome to the Forties Club!!<BR/><BR/>Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9002852257493736372009-01-19T07:22:00.000-05:002009-01-19T07:22:00.000-05:00The last few lines of one of my favorite rhymes go...The last few lines of one of my favorite rhymes go like this :<BR/><BR/>....and time cannot be halted in its swift and endless flight..<BR/>parting is sure to follow meeting as day comes after night...<BR/><BR/>Nicely written. The detailing of the emotions was really good.. :)Obscure Optimisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08541424160034383432noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61473495992072944742009-01-19T02:48:00.000-05:002009-01-19T02:48:00.000-05:00"...make the words true..." - a tinge of reality m..."...make the words true..." - a tinge of reality mixed with the longing. Ouch - and what a reality that is. Being the "other woman" isn't all it's cracked up to be. Still, there are other valid readings of this that work too... Nicely done!<BR/><BR/>janabluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65374411987485857332009-01-17T12:09:00.000-05:002009-01-17T12:09:00.000-05:00I liked this even better on the second read. Well ...I liked this even better on the second read. Well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73795706520576941562009-01-17T11:25:00.000-05:002009-01-17T11:25:00.000-05:00Beautifully written. I got the feeling from her s...Beautifully written. I got the feeling from her salute that he was going off to battle somewhere.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49165426062275157262009-01-12T15:46:00.000-05:002009-01-12T15:46:00.000-05:00How sad.Lovely piece :)How sad.<BR/><BR/>Lovely piece :)Rachel Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13048590167153841615noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84244556845793084762009-01-11T22:58:00.000-05:002009-01-11T22:58:00.000-05:00Powerful emotions here. ExcellentPowerful emotions here. Excellentwrath999https://www.blogger.com/profile/10964105112015979524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20971461063309939992009-01-11T20:48:00.000-05:002009-01-11T20:48:00.000-05:00An affair to remember... I hope. :)An affair to remember... I hope. :)BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43906143313727992692009-01-11T19:49:00.000-05:002009-01-11T19:49:00.000-05:00Parting IS such sweet sorrow....I enjoyed this.Parting IS such sweet sorrow....I enjoyed this.K.Lawson Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11204234196229710524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13210299092428940322009-01-11T17:36:00.000-05:002009-01-11T17:36:00.000-05:00powerful emotions. I liked this. And, actually, I ...powerful emotions. I liked this. And, actually, I can make a few scenarios out of this. I'm not totally sure which it is but that's ok - it works with the several that come to mind and that's good.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57411571237953288892009-01-11T15:53:00.000-05:002009-01-11T15:53:00.000-05:00I wonder who's missing him. But I think I know. Ve...I wonder who's missing him. But I think I know. <BR/><BR/>Very emotionally charged. Her stability feels as fragile, and fleeting, as a kiss. I really liked how you worked in the trains and gap, too. With the world pulsing around her, she seems to be standing still. <BR/><BR/>Touching and complex interpretation, Hilary. Good work.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-30753783933746324872009-01-11T15:34:00.000-05:002009-01-11T15:34:00.000-05:00good one, hilary... leaves no doubt as to why he l...good one, hilary... leaves no doubt as to why he left....laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2325186831679041182009-01-11T13:38:00.000-05:002009-01-11T13:38:00.000-05:00Great job showing the separation they will endure....Great job showing the separation they will endure. So where was he going?JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45558458929622457052009-01-11T12:30:00.000-05:002009-01-11T12:30:00.000-05:00Lovely!The passion,the pain and the longing have b...Lovely!The passion,the pain and the longing have been portrayed so beautifully :)Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54190713627676972492009-01-11T12:25:00.000-05:002009-01-11T12:25:00.000-05:00As long as he's close she believes him but as the ...As long as he's close she believes him but as the gap widens her faith leaves her too. I think you've achieved a lot with these few words. This piece is so emotionally charged. Very well done.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40934115268713862382009-01-11T12:11:00.000-05:002009-01-11T12:11:00.000-05:00nicely written...i could visualize evrything!nicely written...i could visualize evrything!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18250776566723555722009-01-11T11:57:00.000-05:002009-01-11T11:57:00.000-05:00love the way you captured emotions with few detail...love the way you captured emotions with few details.<BR/>Well done :)Lenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787400183444796423noreply@blogger.com