tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post9101969674188157182..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #89Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger37125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18778227661812661072011-07-31T13:43:25.336-04:002011-07-31T13:43:25.336-04:00That was a hilarious conversation! Great pacing a...That was a hilarious conversation! Great pacing and timing and comedic dialogue. Timing is not easy to write. A high scorer!<br /><br />Congratulations on the Honorable Mention!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69810930147189044152011-07-30T14:51:26.944-04:002011-07-30T14:51:26.944-04:00As a fan of Marshall Dodge, I really enjoyed this....As a fan of Marshall Dodge, I really enjoyed this. I can hear the downeast drawls as I read it.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55874378303027198952011-07-27T14:30:04.754-04:002011-07-27T14:30:04.754-04:00Congratulations on the Honorable Mention. I was ha...Congratulations on the Honorable Mention. I was happy to see your story included in the top 10.pegjethttp://pegjet.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39762586726288815022011-07-25T19:38:00.035-04:002011-07-25T19:38:00.035-04:00Wendy this is a gentle and humourous vignette and ...Wendy this is a gentle and humourous vignette and I loved it. The voices were perfection.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63563432622950759592011-07-25T18:36:05.155-04:002011-07-25T18:36:05.155-04:00i am trying to think of a comment that would be wo...i am trying to think of a comment that would be worthy of the work but could find none. i love how the tempo of the piece increases throughout until the "careful consideration." followed by the hilarious "i don't rightly know" followed by the sitting and rocking and watching. those two lines create such depth in the relationship, they show of what substance their 63 years have been spent. thank you for introducing me to earl and arthur.rocky winghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01488820392849180671noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77443767750922091242011-07-25T14:54:09.530-04:002011-07-25T14:54:09.530-04:00I bet no one can read this without sayin "Aye...I bet no one can read this without sayin "Ayep" and smile, at least once in their head.<br /><br />Trust me. I'm a vegan and I've got ideas. :)<br /><br />Thoroughly loved the dialogues and enjoyed every bit reading this.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80247393107581668242011-07-25T10:27:43.554-04:002011-07-25T10:27:43.554-04:00Hilarious! I loved it, and Catrina I also was seei...Hilarious! I loved it, and Catrina I also was seeing double entendres with Casey and her Hoe.MG Ainsworthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12440473651655740044noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57252102376307080762011-07-24T22:03:24.051-04:002011-07-24T22:03:24.051-04:00Well, looks like I got me a favorite heah. Almost ...Well, looks like I got me a favorite heah. Almost missed it, glad I didn't! (the poor little chicken frying on the sidewalk with the bloody wings and everything perfectly captured the prompt, hence my favorite vote)Michael Morsehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07451637745981389920noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42316959831574541072011-07-24T21:50:52.133-04:002011-07-24T21:50:52.133-04:00So happy to see you here, Wendy!!So happy to see you here, Wendy!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31201652886223705382011-07-24T05:59:45.138-04:002011-07-24T05:59:45.138-04:00I love the way those two guys talk!I love the way those two guys talk!fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28922162316458415392011-07-23T16:15:57.980-04:002011-07-23T16:15:57.980-04:00As a New Englander, I have to say, Ayup, I liked t...As a New Englander, I have to say, Ayup, I liked this one.<br /><br />Actually, I thought I'd read every one and was just scrolling thru and found I didn't read this one. I am sorry--I may have realigned my top 5. As the other comments have stated, great humor, characters and all around original take on the prompt. Plus, you write well.pegjethttp://pegjet.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41210841576814913572011-07-23T12:53:47.252-04:002011-07-23T12:53:47.252-04:00Wendy:
I thoroughly enjoyed your entry—the humor ...Wendy:<br /><br />I thoroughly enjoyed your entry—the humor and the downhome dialogue of two old curmudgeons is first-rate. Such a fun story for this old vegetarian to read. <br /><br />The line: "Maisy Treece tried to shoot Elmer’s pecker off with a BB gun" made me laugh out loud!Richard Levangiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16596356126446766607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63795372547692407102011-07-23T11:49:38.614-04:002011-07-23T11:49:38.614-04:00Oh, my God. That poor chick!
Your characterizati...Oh, my God. That poor chick!<br /><br />Your characterizations were dynamic, your dialogue brilliant. I felt as if I was watching a movie.<br /><br />Thank you for sharing!Michele Zugnonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12394802719932859470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56730497931884891672011-07-23T09:19:13.551-04:002011-07-23T09:19:13.551-04:00Earl and Arthur really made me laugh. They really ...Earl and Arthur really made me laugh. They really seem to know their hoes.Bruce Roushnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50570980098237197592011-07-23T07:07:43.526-04:002011-07-23T07:07:43.526-04:00Wonderful characters and dialogue. I laughed right...Wonderful characters and dialogue. I laughed right outloud. Ayep...Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78228339305614758222011-07-22T20:42:48.205-04:002011-07-22T20:42:48.205-04:00Rachel, be careful of old men if you do!
Thank yo...Rachel, be careful of old men if you do!<br /><br />Thank you again to all the people wandering in after my first thanks. I really appreciate the feedback and comments.Wendyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03115002505324651653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90603477425609060462011-07-22T19:27:07.048-04:002011-07-22T19:27:07.048-04:00OK from my gut out loud guffaws here. This is spl...OK from my gut out loud guffaws here. This is splendid!!!!!<br /><br />"...- it was that year Maisy Treece tried to shoot Elmer’s pecker off with a BB gun.” hee hee hee<br /><br />I'm off to hardware for a yellow hoe - every gal should have one!<br /><br />Awesome! Well done!Rachelhttp://artsdaughter.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43577952584659654192011-07-22T18:36:49.313-04:002011-07-22T18:36:49.313-04:00Brilliant dialogue and fun play on the word "...Brilliant dialogue and fun play on the word "hoe" - had me laughing all the way!! Thank you!! Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17539724757163337682011-07-22T16:03:43.475-04:002011-07-22T16:03:43.475-04:00How did I miss this? (Vegetarian here).
As other...How did I miss this? (Vegetarian here).<br /><br />As others have said this is just perfect characterization. You've shown so much in so few words. We feel like we know these two--or at least like we'd like to listen in for awhile! <br /><br />Wonderful!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80462229720671503682011-07-22T15:49:48.663-04:002011-07-22T15:49:48.663-04:00"Them vegans, they got ideas" - favorite..."Them vegans, they got ideas" - favorite line! I could totally envision your characters. Nicely drawn slice of life here! ~Jana Abluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7082859639047848512011-07-21T07:23:41.059-04:002011-07-21T07:23:41.059-04:00:D this was so giggly..I really liked it...:D this was so giggly..I really liked it...Erratic Thoughtshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14852558150033296079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70810013780017448702011-07-21T04:31:39.264-04:002011-07-21T04:31:39.264-04:00uhm, a yellow hoe - i just read it aloud :)
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i c...uhm, a yellow hoe - i just read it aloud :)<br />:)<br />i can very well imagine that implication coming from those old men...SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19805930281651895332011-07-21T04:28:27.477-04:002011-07-21T04:28:27.477-04:00whee-hee :)
a lively anecdote!whee-hee :)<br />a lively anecdote!SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87377424218235158552011-07-20T19:13:15.122-04:002011-07-20T19:13:15.122-04:00I loved the voices of the old men, and the fact th...I loved the voices of the old men, and the fact that this was such a different take on the prompt. It felt so down-to-earth and real.<br /><br />And funny. Nice.Ellis Bergstresserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15899990567512770024noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51349485866024603732011-07-20T17:45:14.883-04:002011-07-20T17:45:14.883-04:00Hilarious. Was I the only one who read in double ...Hilarious. Was I the only one who read in double entendres about Casey and her hoe?<br /><br />Well done.Catrinanoreply@blogger.com