Another Sign
by Matt Dawdy
The assassin hovers near a shack, watching the road. Its snake-body is almost invisible; a vicious streak of blurred grey sent to kill somebody.
It could be for me. I finger the pistol in my pocket.
I make it by, huddled down in my hood, never so glad to be ignored, deciding once again to change my ways.
Wow, that opens up so much in just a few words. A quick strike. Nice.
ReplyDeleteDitto what Joni said. This actually generated a couple of potential story ideas in my head.
ReplyDeleteImmediately suspenseful & the pace never let up!
ReplyDeleteGood job with such an economy of words!
ReplyDeleteShort and sweet - packs a punch!
ReplyDeleteWow! Economy of words or what!
ReplyDeleteShort and very punchy! Good job.
ReplyDeleteAll of a sudden 250 words seems like incessant chatter, lol!
ReplyDeleteWell done!
You evoke a great deal in these few words. Very vivid and well executed.
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