tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post114605617558937989..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #24Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146586448084557492006-05-02T12:14:00.000-04:002006-05-02T12:14:00.000-04:00Lyndon, I appreciate the genre-bending quality of ...Lyndon, I appreciate the genre-bending quality of this piece. The snippets of action carry it. <BR/><BR/>I loved the image of "hidden in flicking shadows."Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146236797523202432006-04-28T11:06:00.000-04:002006-04-28T11:06:00.000-04:00I like your unusual take on the two lights. Well d...I like your unusual take on the two lights. Well done :)Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146108811723722252006-04-26T23:33:00.000-04:002006-04-26T23:33:00.000-04:00Thanks for the comments. I think Terri captures i...Thanks for the comments. I think Terri captures it: 'A day in the life of two lamps called Life and Liberty'. And 'twas an interesting and scary day for them indeed. Appreciate the kind words. lgpLynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11998346902027037420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146099948341879902006-04-26T21:05:00.000-04:002006-04-26T21:05:00.000-04:00Well written. :)Well written. :)Jeffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06106410070220667314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146096360623920002006-04-26T20:06:00.000-04:002006-04-26T20:06:00.000-04:00I read it the same way Terri did and very much enj...I read it the same way Terri did and very much enjoyed the personification, I hope that's the correct term, of the two lights. Good job.Robinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17517751302431903689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146084649059325992006-04-26T16:50:00.000-04:002006-04-26T16:50:00.000-04:00Ditto what Terri said. That was exactly the way I...Ditto what Terri said. That was exactly the way I read it, too, and I <I>am</I> American. I rather enjoyed the story and picked up on Lyn's point/message immediately, so I thought the writing was perfect. Interesting the differences in perspective and interpretation here.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146083365260200452006-04-26T16:29:00.000-04:002006-04-26T16:29:00.000-04:00Perhaps it's because I'm not American, but I didn'...Perhaps it's because I'm not American, but I didn't read any political message here.<BR/>What I saw was, for lack of better phrasing, 'A day in the life of two lamps called Life and Liberty'. And 'twas an interesting and scary day for them indeed.<BR/>I saw it as more a historical tribute than anything else and I quite enjoyed this.<BR/>Or maybe I'm just dense.Terrihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03158421102740382411noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146077010652256862006-04-26T14:43:00.000-04:002006-04-26T14:43:00.000-04:00Wow, I'll need to rewrite a bit then because I'm t...Wow, I'll need to rewrite a bit then because I'm trying to side with Liberty (as traditionally understood in America) but maintain the tension that tyranny is always at the door ready to gain an advantage. Since both you and B had the same impression, it must be the writing then! lol <BR/><BR/>Could the phrase "friendly spotlight" put Booth in a favorable light? (pun intended :-) I think as an actor he was "respected" and so did not pose an evident threat to Life and Liberty - simply a man with which they were familiar. Am I being too opaque in this piece? Trying to do too much by blurring the lines of fiction and essay? (which, btw, most good fiction is good essay or commentary on the times - science fiction especially can have this effect a la Ender's Game) <BR/><BR/>Thanks for the feedback. lgpLynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11998346902027037420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146074027802911762006-04-26T13:53:00.000-04:002006-04-26T13:53:00.000-04:00I didn't understand the message of the piece. I w...I didn't understand the message of the piece. I was left with the feeling that the author considered the assassination as a good thing, which also gave me the feeling of unease. It was well written and all, and I'm not passing judgement, that's how I felt.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146067897178258492006-04-26T12:11:00.000-04:002006-04-26T12:11:00.000-04:00One might consider this an essay rather than ficti...One might consider this an essay rather than fiction.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146063671317462282006-04-26T11:01:00.000-04:002006-04-26T11:01:00.000-04:00Good reminder, Jason. I hadn't actually considere...Good reminder, Jason. I hadn't actually considered the political message so much as the tension between liberty and tyranny. Would be interested in comments as to whether I've expressed it in a compelling way. Thanks. lgpLynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11998346902027037420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146063066368908502006-04-26T10:51:00.000-04:002006-04-26T10:51:00.000-04:00Lyndon, yes, you have the word count to make the a...Lyndon, yes, you have the word count to make the addition. No problem!<BR/><BR/>This dialog has been fine, but given the focus of this piece, please let me ask folks to avoid political comments one way or another. Please focus on matters of construction, expression, and writing. Thanks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146062208016075052006-04-26T10:36:00.000-04:002006-04-26T10:36:00.000-04:00Good word. Ambivalence is what I'm after - not app...Good word. Ambivalence is what I'm after - not approval of the assasination attempt - but the struggle and the uncertain outcome. So Jason, can you add two words to the end of the story? <BR/><BR/>Thus Life and Liberty still shine<BR/><I>. . . for now.</I><BR/><BR/>Thanks for the feedback. My first attempt at such as short short story! :-) lgpLynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11998346902027037420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146061025035983502006-04-26T10:17:00.000-04:002006-04-26T10:17:00.000-04:00Um, no.The apparent ambivalence of the message.Um, no.<BR/>The apparent ambivalence of the message.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146059828512680242006-04-26T09:57:00.000-04:002006-04-26T09:57:00.000-04:00Bernita,What about the story makes you uneasy? Is ...Bernita,<BR/>What about the story makes you uneasy? Is that a good thing? Does your unease stem from the knowledge that the outcome of Life and Liberty are still in the balance? With renewed terrorism, the victory is never assured, it seems. <BR/>LyndonLynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11998346902027037420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146058994140005802006-04-26T09:43:00.000-04:002006-04-26T09:43:00.000-04:00Frankly, makes me uneasy.Frankly, makes me uneasy.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.com