tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post114692522252254623..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Flashlight Tag, Part 1 (Fiction)Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147295275123934492006-05-10T17:07:00.000-04:002006-05-10T17:07:00.000-04:00Anne, much obliged for the feedback! Thanks. :DAnne, much obliged for the feedback! Thanks. :DAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147236157744534132006-05-10T00:42:00.000-04:002006-05-10T00:42:00.000-04:00great writing, jason! wonderful dialog. love it!...great writing, jason! wonderful dialog. love it!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147233796961589072006-05-10T00:03:00.000-04:002006-05-10T00:03:00.000-04:00Claire, flashlight tag was the best!! I too grew ...Claire, flashlight tag was the best!! I too grew up in an area with woods that didn't last into my adulthood. We lose so much when those wild places get plowed under.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147229285907531362006-05-09T22:48:00.000-04:002006-05-09T22:48:00.000-04:00I like it already! Of course, I was always a fan ...I like it already! Of course, I was always a fan of flashlight tag when I was a kid. Running in my grandparents' backyard with my cousin before they mowed down the woods and put in a new subdivision...ProducerClairehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09464981676181697475noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147226251135996932006-05-09T21:57:00.000-04:002006-05-09T21:57:00.000-04:00BeadinggalinMS, I hope this story doesn't end up m...BeadinggalinMS, I hope this story doesn't end up messing with you. ;) I'm afraid you and the protagonist will be confronted with the same, um, <I>opportunities</I>.<BR/><BR/>Brian, thanks for stopping by and dropping the note. Hope to see you back!!<BR/><BR/>Antonia, I'll take your recommendations. Thanks!<BR/><BR/>Ben O., another new visitor! Very cool! Thanks for the comment on the picture. You can actually make out a double shadow of my face. I thought the whole effect was pretty creepy.<BR/><BR/>Terri, you can if plenty of lights are on. :DAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147204451868669402006-05-09T15:54:00.000-04:002006-05-09T15:54:00.000-04:00Methinks this game is not going to go well. Note ...Methinks this game is not going to go well. Note to self: don't read Part 2 just before bedtime.Terrihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03158421102740382411noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147196983232070472006-05-09T13:49:00.000-04:002006-05-09T13:49:00.000-04:00Pretty good stuff - I love the picture as well (I ...Pretty good stuff - I love the picture as well (I have to admit to being at least partially visual - I actually consider the cover of a book when deciding.)<BR/><BR/>Anyway - thanks for the insight . . . I enjoyed reading it and look forward to the next bit.<BR/><BR/>Ben O.Ben O.https://www.blogger.com/profile/17771867224421972175noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147196283690047512006-05-09T13:38:00.000-04:002006-05-09T13:38:00.000-04:00hi jason, am sorry to hear that...it is a shame ac...hi jason, am sorry to hear that...it is a shame actually that they dont have him in store...but sure they must have him at amazon, could recommend you 'The Rings of Saturn' or 'Austerlitz'...<BR/>hope you like it...*https://www.blogger.com/profile/05680450955867041830noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147195592364774962006-05-09T13:26:00.000-04:002006-05-09T13:26:00.000-04:00"deranged light" I like that a lot."deranged light" I like that a lot.Brian Farreyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13752212248460652888noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147193795379068372006-05-09T12:56:00.000-04:002006-05-09T12:56:00.000-04:00"Everyone ready?"I am ready for more! Katirna too..."Everyone ready?"<BR/>I am ready for more! Katirna took out our night light outside so I am always with the flashlight at night. Ya know it is quite dark in the woods with no other light around. Now I am curious to see what creepy things I can see or maybe not. LOL :)Lindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08665167693563457389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147179631506281542006-05-09T09:00:00.000-04:002006-05-09T09:00:00.000-04:00Antonia, I went into the bookstore last week with ...Antonia, I went into the bookstore last week with Sebald top on my list to buy. Nothing in stock. My next stop is Amazon!<BR/><BR/>Eileen, thanks! :) I usually don't open with dialog, but I wanted to give it a try.<BR/><BR/>Kelly, I appreciate the feedback! :D<BR/><BR/>Melissa, thanks for the encouragement! Shivers are golden in this genre. =)<BR/><BR/>Moncrief Speaks, welcome to my blog! Glad you're enjoying this story so far. Hope to see you back.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147150239576432532006-05-09T00:50:00.000-04:002006-05-09T00:50:00.000-04:00Nice piece.Nice piece.Moncrief Speakshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09581719197784065295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147137981753687142006-05-08T21:26:00.000-04:002006-05-08T21:26:00.000-04:00This gave me a shiver, just thinking about the dar...This gave me a shiver, just thinking about the dark forest and all those creepy things that might be hanging around. I want to read more (as usual!).Melissa Amateishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16086267508858187716noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147129392549761882006-05-08T19:03:00.000-04:002006-05-08T19:03:00.000-04:00Really good start, Jason! I can already envision ...Really good start, Jason! I can already envision the creepy possibilities. =DKelly (Lynn) Parrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04827605655761900263noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147121132524170042006-05-08T16:45:00.000-04:002006-05-08T16:45:00.000-04:00The dialogue works really well in this- fresh and ...The dialogue works really well in this- fresh and crisp. You can feel the story building, sort of sneaking up on you....Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147120654306836302006-05-08T16:37:00.000-04:002006-05-08T16:37:00.000-04:00hi jason....really have to apology that I again co...hi jason....<BR/>really have to apology that I again come with this Sebald....<BR/>but let me know what you think of him once you read him? each time I come here the similarity strikes me. Similarity to the tombstonething and not to this story above I mean....*https://www.blogger.com/profile/05680450955867041830noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147108488876281172006-05-08T13:14:00.000-04:002006-05-08T13:14:00.000-04:00Flood, your enthusiasm is great! Thanks for the m...Flood, your enthusiasm is great! Thanks for the motivation. :D<BR/><BR/>Mark, sorry about that. ;) I'll try not be too hard on these folks.<BR/><BR/>Mermaid, thank you. :) I like to weave in layers which you have to listen quietly to hear.<BR/><BR/>Anne, I got it. :D And you're very right. The obvious evils are not the most dangerous.<BR/><BR/>Scott, I should probably post genres, but I don't like discouraging readers who might not normally read a certain kind of story. This one is suspense/horror.<BR/><BR/>Bernita, thanks! I thought I'd try a dialog opening for a change.<BR/><BR/>Kara, at least Stephen isn't alone and choosing to walk into danger, LOL! He has to deal with the peer pressure of the moment.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147095084751596502006-05-08T09:31:00.000-04:002006-05-08T09:31:00.000-04:00I'm already afraid of Craig. He sounds like a sic...I'm already afraid of Craig. He sounds like a sicko. Why do people (Stephen) in scary stories never follow their instincts to run the other way?Kara Alisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17382393133894023610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147092528103464292006-05-08T08:48:00.000-04:002006-05-08T08:48:00.000-04:00Great set-up, Jason.The potentials are many.Great set-up, Jason.<BR/>The potentials are many.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147089957601833862006-05-08T08:05:00.000-04:002006-05-08T08:05:00.000-04:00Great dialog Jason. If I didn't know the genre, I...Great dialog Jason. If I didn't know the genre, I would say this is just a bunch of kids being kids, but this is going to get ugly!Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147079990758381862006-05-08T05:19:00.000-04:002006-05-08T05:19:00.000-04:00Excellent start! I'm sooooo looking forward to Par...Excellent start! I'm sooooo looking forward to Part Deux now. And I like how you misdirect the tension. <BR/>[not sure about this last sentence, but thank god, I know what I mean... ;)]annehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08734374991569484126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147065688797163022006-05-08T01:21:00.000-04:002006-05-08T01:21:00.000-04:00"What the hell are you worried about? You're one o..."What the hell are you worried about? You're one of the ones looking."<BR/><BR/>Craig doesn't realize he is empowering Stephen with these words. Stephen is the one looking, questioning the darkness that is about to be cast out like a net to trap the frightened fish. Stephen sees that the net is Craig's creation.<BR/><BR/>We humans often trip ourselves.<BR/><BR/>I know I've said this before, but the unspoken words between your lines are why I keep coming back.mermaidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15895749686844178804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147062258945901042006-05-08T00:24:00.000-04:002006-05-08T00:24:00.000-04:00My sons play "night tag" almost every night. I al...My sons play "night tag" almost every night. I almost had to give up my Stephen King addiction when he turned me into a paranoid, overprotective parent (of my older children - during the 80s). Now you... arggh.Mark Pettushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14650234232914657192noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1147060207656327982006-05-07T23:50:00.000-04:002006-05-07T23:50:00.000-04:00I've been looking forward to this. Great set-up, c...I've been looking forward to this. Great set-up, can't wait for the next installementFloodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14341265651121116197noreply@blogger.com