tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post115146777634563265..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #52Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1152110505692607102006-07-05T10:41:00.000-04:002006-07-05T10:41:00.000-04:00Thank you Fran and Jason both!Thank you Fran and Jason both!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1152067565774234732006-07-04T22:46:00.000-04:002006-07-04T22:46:00.000-04:00Jade, strong writing style with good use of verbs....Jade, strong writing style with good use of verbs. The image of the buck was very real to me. I've watched my share in the forest. Just right.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151711111399518162006-06-30T19:45:00.000-04:002006-06-30T19:45:00.000-04:00Loved your description of the marsh - it really dr...Loved your description of the marsh - it really drew me in. "Beside the road a marsh began to speak" - there's a line of poetry there.<BR/><BR/>Good job!Fran Piperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08177027484914337117noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151605999389430292006-06-29T14:33:00.000-04:002006-06-29T14:33:00.000-04:00Bhaswati, thank you! Incidentally, that’s also on...Bhaswati, thank you! Incidentally, that’s also one of my favorite lines in the piece (being a lover of solitude myself).<BR/><BR/>cesarcarlos, many thanks!<BR/> <BR/>Anthony J. Rapino, thank you for the compliments. I’m glad you enjoyed the read.<BR/><BR/>sandra seamans, deer really are amazing… I’ve had some “curse” at me for sure for following too close behind, and they really can be a wiley bunch. Thanks!<BR/><BR/>Amra Pajalic, thanks so much! So often it is the deer who is startled into the road, I just had to try and turn that one around.<BR/><BR/><BR/>Lisa, thank you! That’s one of the elements that I enjoy most about flash fiction, is the frugal use of words and thoughts (a bit like poetry). <BR/><BR/>INKcogKNEEdough, I’m glad you enjoyed it, and thank you for the compliments.<BR/><BR/> <BR/>desiderata, I enjoy challenging myself to find new ways to tell stories – thank you!<BR/><BR/>Elisha Bridges, I’m so glad you like it. I loved the chance to exchange roles between the human and the deer.<BR/><BR/>anna, thank you so much for your kind thoughts, and for your constructive criticism – I always appreciate feedback on my work! Thank you for your input!<BR/><BR/>Thanks again everyone, I had so much fun reading your work, and I’m glad that you enjoyed mine.Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151582321715464942006-06-29T07:58:00.000-04:002006-06-29T07:58:00.000-04:00Intense visuals. could almost feel the water in m...Intense visuals. could almost feel the water in my boots, smell the heavy scent of fear from Damian. Great little twist at the end. A tiny constuctive thought<BR/>(very tiny!) Since Damian is the only character in your piece, instead of using his name everytime a he might have sufficed.<BR/>Just a thought.<BR/>Excellent concept and a great read!annahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07274795863426882004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151563604447993842006-06-29T02:46:00.000-04:002006-06-29T02:46:00.000-04:00My favourite bit: The human caught in the headligh...My favourite bit: The human caught in the headlights. Great!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151552118860160322006-06-28T23:35:00.000-04:002006-06-28T23:35:00.000-04:00like the irony, as amra noted. learnt the novelty ...like the irony, as amra noted. learnt the novelty of a different approach to telling tales.chong y lhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10365847893009738913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151546129017313512006-06-28T21:55:00.000-04:002006-06-28T21:55:00.000-04:00VERY nice use of descriptions to put us(the reader...VERY nice use of descriptions to put us(the readers there). very enjoyable read.<BR/><BR/>INKcogKNEEdoughAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151544326783280672006-06-28T21:25:00.000-04:002006-06-28T21:25:00.000-04:00Concise writing packed with action and suspense. Y...Concise writing packed with action and suspense. You did a great job in making every word count.Lisa Jordanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16334253815212707025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151524281758390022006-06-28T15:51:00.000-04:002006-06-28T15:51:00.000-04:00I live in the country and this piece rings so true...I live in the country and this piece rings so true. There's nothing more noisy at night than a deer that doesn't know you're there, and then they snort! Scares the crap out of you. Great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151524003605704982006-06-28T15:46:00.000-04:002006-06-28T15:46:00.000-04:00Great sounds and images. You put me there. What ...Great sounds and images. You put me there. What else can I say.Anthony Rapinohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11581208296144295224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151520141756104492006-06-28T14:42:00.000-04:002006-06-28T14:42:00.000-04:00Nicely done.Nicely done.cesarcarloshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06521521008555753588noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151513422094140792006-06-28T12:50:00.000-04:002006-06-28T12:50:00.000-04:00It was the kind of peaceful night that only solitu...<B>It was the kind of peaceful night that only solitude could perfect.</B><BR/><BR/>Such a nice line. <BR/><BR/>I liked the tension that ran throughout the piece. Nice!Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151510143950136552006-06-28T11:55:00.000-04:002006-06-28T11:55:00.000-04:00Flood – Thanks! I really had fun writing this pie...Flood – Thanks! I really had fun writing this piece!<BR/><BR/>Scott – I totally agree, deer are so intelligent. Where I am currently living, we have many who pass through every day, so I’m sure they provided some of the inspiration. ;)<BR/><BR/>Jenny – Thank you, it’s a fun new challenge for me to play with flash fiction.<BR/><BR/>Jaye – Thanks again, it’s been so much fun to read everyone’s work!<BR/><BR/>K L Gilbert – I’m glad that you enjoyed it, and I really did like your poetry. Being a poet myself, I have a great affinity for it, and sometimes find it hard to keep the poetry out of my prose!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151508808417989832006-06-28T11:33:00.000-04:002006-06-28T11:33:00.000-04:00I like your use of vivid verbs and descriptive lan...I like your use of vivid verbs and descriptive language. Love the tables turned perspective. <BR/><BR/>Also, thanks for the favorable comments on my poetry entry. It shores me up.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151508293737609952006-06-28T11:24:00.000-04:002006-06-28T11:24:00.000-04:00Nice job.Nice job.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151506628530065792006-06-28T10:57:00.000-04:002006-06-28T10:57:00.000-04:00Great suspense built up in such a compact space! N...Great suspense built up in such a compact space! Nicely done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151499007791187432006-06-28T08:50:00.000-04:002006-06-28T08:50:00.000-04:00Yeah, such irony. I only went deer hunting once. ...Yeah, such irony. I only went deer hunting once. The man who took me said that deer were extremely intelligent, and thank God that for their lack of opposible thumbs. "If they carried guns..."Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151468529312374752006-06-28T00:22:00.000-04:002006-06-28T00:22:00.000-04:00"sent his blood flashing"Lots of great lines in th..."sent his blood flashing"<BR/><BR/>Lots of great lines in this, and I liked the deer as pursuer.Floodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14341265651121116197noreply@blogger.com