tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post115681806426264226..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #73Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1157722634451706992006-09-08T09:37:00.000-04:002006-09-08T09:37:00.000-04:00Wow. The weight of this piece is palpable. The d...Wow. The weight of this piece is palpable. The dark place she is in. The want. Very powerful. High marks overall.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156995709508036862006-08-30T23:41:00.000-04:002006-08-30T23:41:00.000-04:00"He" and "his" are meant to imply that in the Urba..."He" and "his" are meant to imply that in the Urban jungle, all men are the same. History will repeat itself, for this woman it has and it will in the future until "she" learns to shine for herself.<BR/>MJ Cole<BR/><BR/>Thanks for the wonderful encouragement. I wrote it first draft, after seeing the spooky and erie photograph. MJ ColeAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156865532413041582006-08-29T11:32:00.000-04:002006-08-29T11:32:00.000-04:00I kept expecting "he" to actually be an "it" of so...I kept expecting "he" to actually be an "it" of some kind, but the context never really indicated that.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156860225607201572006-08-29T10:03:00.000-04:002006-08-29T10:03:00.000-04:00I am in the list of people who didn't understand t...I am in the list of people who didn't understand the significance of "he"/"his". Perhaps you could explain that to us?<BR/><BR/>Otherwise, this is such a realistic depiction of urban dilemmas. Something a lot of people would be able to relate with. Well done. :)Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156858604095082202006-08-29T09:36:00.000-04:002006-08-29T09:36:00.000-04:00I don't understand the "he" thing either. It appe...I don't understand the "he" thing either. It appears that Anne and Nicholas do. I like the writing though.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156836023841996932006-08-29T03:20:00.000-04:002006-08-29T03:20:00.000-04:00Another great addition in the best last line depar...Another great addition in the best last line department!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156823037320468212006-08-28T23:43:00.000-04:002006-08-28T23:43:00.000-04:00Nice snapshot. A little slice of desperation, fru...Nice snapshot. A little slice of desperation, frustration and longing. Strong voice.<BR/><BR/>I did have a little trouble with the fourth line. I had to read it several times. A bit awkward. Also, maybe I missed the significance of it, but I'm wondering why "he" and "his" are alwyas in quotation marks. Could be my own density that I'm not catching on to what that means.<BR/><BR/>Otherwise, great pacing, very tight. Good work.Jonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18109855683749612076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156820287201824322006-08-28T22:58:00.000-04:002006-08-28T22:58:00.000-04:00oh, wow. another great one! this is going to be ...oh, wow. another great one! this is going to be so tough.<BR/><BR/>this was almost a modern version of the yellow wall paper. <BR/><BR/>nice!!!anne frasierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13044828332429421657noreply@blogger.com