tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post115681811121988869..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #74Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1157722685667801232006-09-08T09:38:00.000-04:002006-09-08T09:38:00.000-04:00Such a strong image. The trapped feel really come...Such a strong image. The trapped feel really comes out too. Great description. High marks overall.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1157064883423661522006-08-31T18:54:00.000-04:002006-08-31T18:54:00.000-04:00Cesar, loved it.It feels like it's begging to be t...Cesar, loved it.<BR/><BR/>It feels like it's begging to be turned into a longer piece. I especially love the way you let us slowly come to the realisation that all is not well. Quite chilling.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156961325885309202006-08-30T14:08:00.000-04:002006-08-30T14:08:00.000-04:00THis is scary and desperate stuff. A pacy read wit...THis is scary and desperate stuff. A pacy read with some lovely description.<BR/>Great story.<BR/>AddyWilfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15255247027469318384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156866264554871692006-08-29T11:44:00.000-04:002006-08-29T11:44:00.000-04:00I fear that this can come to no good end.I fear that this can come to no good end.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156860493127742332006-08-29T10:08:00.000-04:002006-08-29T10:08:00.000-04:00LOL, Scott. I feel your anguish. Great piece, Cesa...LOL, Scott. I feel your anguish. <BR/><BR/>Great piece, Cesar. The woman's desperation is so real. I also like the subtle change in perception that takes place in the middle of the story. At first it seems like the two are related; later you realise she's been held captive. Great job, all in all!Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156858447086118382006-08-29T09:34:00.000-04:002006-08-29T09:34:00.000-04:00This drives me crazy. What the hell is she lollyg...This drives me crazy. What the hell is she lollygagging for outside if she's trying to escape? Run dammit! I agree, this is nice narrative, and like any good suspense piece, the protagonist is behaving against my instincts.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156835854817283482006-08-29T03:17:00.000-04:002006-08-29T03:17:00.000-04:00You really sense how alone she feels. Nice.You really sense how alone she feels. Nice.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156822644124069582006-08-28T23:37:00.000-04:002006-08-28T23:37:00.000-04:00Makes me think of "Misery." The innocent being he...Makes me think of "Misery." The innocent being held captive. Good sense of desperation. I hope she makes it. :)Jonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18109855683749612076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156820647260525562006-08-28T23:04:00.000-04:002006-08-28T23:04:00.000-04:00great pacing and great narrative.i loved this simp...great pacing and great narrative.<BR/><BR/>i loved this simple line:<BR/><BR/>I hold myself as the wind hits me. <BR/><BR/>how can something so simple tell so much? but it does.<BR/><BR/>very nice.anne frasierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13044828332429421657noreply@blogger.com