tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post1480380241639747935..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #29Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80532957552948876352007-11-21T11:02:00.000-05:002007-11-21T11:02:00.000-05:00Great, great concept! And I like the skipped numb...Great, great concept! And I like the skipped numbers. That was a nice touch. Strong, tight writing. Very good mix of back story too.<BR/><BR/>Congratulations on winning 2nd Place!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70399210145204871122007-11-19T18:02:00.000-05:002007-11-19T18:02:00.000-05:00Thanks, gals. I truly appreciate it and really lo...Thanks, gals. I truly appreciate it and really love the reading in these contests.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13118615585600433182007-11-19T14:40:00.000-05:002007-11-19T14:40:00.000-05:00Congratulations on your well deserved placing, Bet...Congratulations on your well deserved placing, Beth. You framed this story so well, and executed it beautifully. Great work!Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79607094286771726462007-11-19T12:20:00.000-05:002007-11-19T12:20:00.000-05:00Congratulations, Beth. I took a run at sunrise th...Congratulations, Beth. I took a run at sunrise this morning and thought of your story as I was climbing a very large hill. Luckily I was on a trail in the middle of an Arizona desert, so I was at little risk for getting hit by a car.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54989279721851673172007-11-19T00:43:00.000-05:002007-11-19T00:43:00.000-05:00I have to say I really loved this one. I thought i...I have to say I really loved this one. I thought it was really well written.Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89811662809383582842007-11-16T08:54:00.000-05:002007-11-16T08:54:00.000-05:00Missy, thanks for the chuckle and the praise.Raine...Missy, thanks for the chuckle and the praise.<BR/><BR/>Raine, thank you as well. <BR/><BR/>Isn't it amazing the different takes on the same picture?Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48586821302086534522007-11-16T04:23:00.000-05:002007-11-16T04:23:00.000-05:00This was VERY well done, and put me right there on...This was VERY well done, and put me right there on scene.<BR/>Well-written!rainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04258822737734173873noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38949111953363801982007-11-15T15:57:00.000-05:002007-11-15T15:57:00.000-05:00Made me want to run... at first. Great read and t...Made me want to run... at first. Great read and the countdown really pulls me in. I'm sad she's missing the sunrise.Missyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16638784910676212171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74041848603412337072007-11-15T09:24:00.000-05:002007-11-15T09:24:00.000-05:00I actually know a woman this same story happened t...I actually know a woman this same story happened to except she was hit from behind. It always made me extra careful after I met her. <BR/><BR/>She still runs even though the doctors told her she'd never even be able to walk again.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89023687386677487892007-11-15T03:06:00.000-05:002007-11-15T03:06:00.000-05:00Beth:Reading this reminds me that wlays, even as I...Beth:<BR/>Reading this reminds me that wlays, even as I put my best foot forward, I must take care whether running, jogging or just taking one step at a time!:)chong y lhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10365847893009738913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67117041788810931012007-11-14T15:31:00.000-05:002007-11-14T15:31:00.000-05:00Nice story! Great build-up. Well done.And I though...Nice story! Great build-up. Well done.<BR/><BR/>And I thought running was supposed to be good for you.mr. schprockhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16216294034597931274noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38473367942817132212007-11-14T12:46:00.000-05:002007-11-14T12:46:00.000-05:00Hoodie, thank you. There are so many entries you ...Hoodie, thank you. There are so many entries you summed up for me ... terribly impressed. I'm terribly humbled.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5120700654155375152007-11-14T10:56:00.000-05:002007-11-14T10:56:00.000-05:00This is really great Beth! I'm terribly impressed...This is really great Beth! I'm terribly impressed.Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44943734435970284942007-11-13T12:06:00.000-05:002007-11-13T12:06:00.000-05:00Thanks, you three. I never foreshadow. I just wr...Thanks, you three. I never foreshadow. I just wrote it and when my daughter read it she said, "Aha, nice foreshadowing, Mom." I said, "Oh yeah, yeah, I planned that." =/Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20712196741501108922007-11-13T11:05:00.000-05:002007-11-13T11:05:00.000-05:00Nicely done, Beth. Definite foreshadowing.Nicely done, Beth. Definite foreshadowing.Kathleenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04399098868122212536noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84150537323744229212007-11-12T22:05:00.000-05:002007-11-12T22:05:00.000-05:00Very well done.Very well done.The Anti-Wifehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02027321787352577548noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24234673795484956412007-11-12T19:22:00.000-05:002007-11-12T19:22:00.000-05:00Nice example of storytelling with that bit of fore...Nice example of storytelling with that bit of foreshadow and gradual rise in tension.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19915843914482673812007-11-12T15:45:00.000-05:002007-11-12T15:45:00.000-05:00Sarah, I'm glad you agree on the similarities and ...Sarah, I'm glad you agree on the similarities and am really excited to see other runners in this contest.<BR/><BR/>Thank you, Josh, I really do the countdown so used it here.<BR/><BR/>Szelsofa, much appreciated.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74399050274849307662007-11-12T14:47:00.000-05:002007-11-12T14:47:00.000-05:00That's just great, Beth.That's just great, Beth.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77029394791658477082007-11-12T14:44:00.000-05:002007-11-12T14:44:00.000-05:00I like the way the story started counting down, gi...I like the way the story started counting down, giving it tension, like tunnel vision.JRVogthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501549592361240370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14110558135283223512007-11-12T14:09:00.000-05:002007-11-12T14:09:00.000-05:00Amazing, Beth. And you were right about the simila...Amazing, Beth. And you were right about the similarities between our stories. Just different perspectives. <BR/><BR/>As a runner who has climbed many hills, and marveled at my surroundings, this felt very authentic to me. I loved your animals "trading shifts" description, and your last line is perfect. <BR/><BR/>High marks, for sure!Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13449462016483303162007-11-12T13:54:00.000-05:002007-11-12T13:54:00.000-05:00Thanks, everyone. I love running, especially at t...Thanks, everyone. I love running, especially at the time I wrote about, but haven't done so for years. I was afraid this would be terribly confusing. <BR/><BR/>I am thoroughly enjoying reading all the submissions. I am humbled by the talent here.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89887413481622744022007-11-12T12:58:00.000-05:002007-11-12T12:58:00.000-05:00I like this one as both a runner and a writer. Yo...I like this one as both a runner and a writer. You've caught the feel of hill work. It's hard to write well about running (let alone getting hit by a car) and you've done a lovely job.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72794606427350333832007-11-12T12:45:00.000-05:002007-11-12T12:45:00.000-05:00Good work...Even I like to go skirt a lake near my...Good work...Even I like to go skirt a lake near my house in the early dawn. Well managed, my perfect neurotic!!!Abhinavhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15760314837510920601noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74326651592163318682007-11-12T12:10:00.000-05:002007-11-12T12:10:00.000-05:00I love this! One of my favorites by far! :)Angel...I love this! One of my favorites by far! :)<BR/><BR/>AngeliqueThe Quoiblerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13632853309100258560noreply@blogger.com