tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post153261366267324293..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #208Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-71587605038814854302010-01-19T16:33:26.553-05:002010-01-19T16:33:26.553-05:00Thank you, everyone, for all of your comments!
-G...Thank you, everyone, for all of your comments!<br /><br />-Gary KnowldenAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56621084429057803622010-01-18T02:18:48.943-05:002010-01-18T02:18:48.943-05:00what laughingwolf said...what laughingwolf said...PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54910330648810523892010-01-17T16:15:19.139-05:002010-01-17T16:15:19.139-05:00Highly original approach.Highly original approach.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26691533892139373312010-01-17T14:00:11.770-05:002010-01-17T14:00:11.770-05:00I like the thought of my soul coursing through my ...I like the thought of my soul coursing through my body looking for an escape route. It feels part of life's energy. And I also love the explosive return to the oneness of the universe <i>from troll to triumph</i>.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6727998185789742122010-01-16T19:49:16.813-05:002010-01-16T19:49:16.813-05:00Dude there was a lot of medical in that! :) And st...Dude there was a lot of medical in that! :) And still it completely told the story! :)Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87454905482437349802010-01-16T08:36:10.709-05:002010-01-16T08:36:10.709-05:00Maybe I'm just a simpleton, but I'd have t...Maybe I'm just a simpleton, but I'd have to agree with Aerin. Way too heavy, in fact, textbook heavy.James R. Tomlinsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33583749618569685862010-01-16T08:14:23.317-05:002010-01-16T08:14:23.317-05:00i absolutely loved this.
Deep, philosophical, spir...i absolutely loved this.<br />Deep, philosophical, spiritual.<br /><br />All of us are entitled to our takes on life, living and the soul and i think you've done a marvelous job with the way you've expressed yours.<br /><br />It almost sounds like a rant but there is something so energetic and passionate about rants. i truly loved this one. Truly.Preetihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00279859240371070699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23808863819863803222010-01-16T00:37:29.311-05:002010-01-16T00:37:29.311-05:00Well, I think you did a fabulous job writing this ...Well, I think you did a fabulous job writing this piece. Its beautiful and I'm putting it on my list of keepers. I disagree with the comment above and think you should leave it the way it is.<br /><br />Excellent work.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60653593426402789012010-01-15T23:35:15.306-05:002010-01-15T23:35:15.306-05:00Caveat
Something I Would Keep
the poetry of the pi...<br><br><a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">Caveat</a><br><br /><b>Something I Would Keep</b><br><br />the poetry of the piece - it's heavy, and needs some pruning, but it's lots and lots of lovely and intentional language<br /><br /><b>Something I Might Tweak</b><br><br />I felt...hammered..by the metaphors. Maybe intersperse with dialogue, exposition, <i>or</i> put the prose into a poetry form. <br /><br /><br />I also personally happen to disagree with your take on the soul, but that's not a technical difficulty :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43363981020313521272010-01-15T05:34:00.813-05:002010-01-15T05:34:00.813-05:00There were many moments in the piece that made me ...There were many moments in the piece that made me stop and think like 'The universe expands, contracts, and stifles toward singularity.' <br /><br />I like pieces that make me wonder. ;)Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29977555289447198732010-01-14T19:06:34.796-05:002010-01-14T19:06:34.796-05:00what bernita said...what bernita said...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72163366501722381502010-01-14T15:10:55.031-05:002010-01-14T15:10:55.031-05:00Unusual metaphor.Unusual metaphor.Deb Smythenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76978301696546309752010-01-14T09:01:19.534-05:002010-01-14T09:01:19.534-05:00Unique take. Like the dark edge of this piece. T...Unique take. Like the dark edge of this piece. Terrific line. especially liked: From soul’s beak a stick pokes at the folds kindling nervous energy; yet neurons know only their own AND The universe expands, contracts, and stifles toward singularity. Well crafted.Michelle Khttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08347394355082676606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74476580087160583832010-01-13T22:21:53.160-05:002010-01-13T22:21:53.160-05:00Interesting concept.Interesting concept.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73260468873008989852010-01-13T22:15:12.960-05:002010-01-13T22:15:12.960-05:00Interesting, but I have the feeling you are trying...Interesting, but I have the feeling you are trying to hard to enforce your theme.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54393309564748916392010-01-13T20:23:10.891-05:002010-01-13T20:23:10.891-05:00Overwhelming sense of biological entropy.
Clinica...Overwhelming sense of biological entropy.<br /><br />Clinical and fatalistic at the same time. Effective tone.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.com