tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post1767074134105625983..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Forties Club Finalist #50Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14131938960731383082010-08-02T18:55:44.747-04:002010-08-02T18:55:44.747-04:00OUCH! This is nicely done. I like the dialogue! An...OUCH! This is nicely done. I like the dialogue! And great title. :)Michelle D. Argylehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696465137285587646noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9061429163348481052010-08-02T08:50:03.310-04:002010-08-02T08:50:03.310-04:00Bad bad child, evil bad terrible awful child. GRE...Bad bad child, evil bad terrible awful child. GREAT story, awesome excellent well written wonderfully wicked story.Catherine Viberthttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84506537103861183872010-07-30T23:16:15.578-04:002010-07-30T23:16:15.578-04:00Just goes to show you, never pick on someone for t...Just goes to show you, never pick on someone for their differences. They might just bury you in the sandbox!<br /><br />Reminds me of Jason Vorhees from Friday the 13th. The kid gets his revenge on the bullies, but I have a feeling he's got a taste for it now. Should we expect a pirate-related serial killer in the near future?Vincent Kalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04625863843215035035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73837270278713269732010-07-30T16:46:01.225-04:002010-07-30T16:46:01.225-04:00Pirates, jewels and big red X's; what's no...Pirates, jewels and big red X's; what's not to like!<br /><br />I did wonder at the beginning, though, how wind could be deathly still.Michael Morsehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07451637745981389920noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7244097458009341262010-07-29T12:11:02.789-04:002010-07-29T12:11:02.789-04:00Wow. The ending IS chilling. Great job!Wow. The ending IS chilling. Great job!Meghanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03375626649089998707noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29658466694591182322010-07-29T09:41:20.763-04:002010-07-29T09:41:20.763-04:00The was chilling. And very well done. Unlike Aerin...The was chilling. And very well done. Unlike Aerin, I thought separating the last two lines added punch. But either way works for me.Deb Smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10990130480508998598noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57591876836056818572010-07-29T08:58:51.039-04:002010-07-29T08:58:51.039-04:00Shudder me timbers!
OK - sorry but I always turn ...Shudder me timbers!<br /><br />OK - sorry but I always turn to childish humour in the face of the scary. You wrote this very well but I'm left feeling rather disturbed by it.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83619968132850386412010-07-28T23:37:56.944-04:002010-07-28T23:37:56.944-04:00ICK! This one is chilling! And that last detail of...ICK! This one is chilling! And that last detail of the big red X...shudder.<br /><br />Great piece.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38884489980506169192010-07-28T21:40:38.139-04:002010-07-28T21:40:38.139-04:00Not your Pirates of the Caribbean sort of buccanee...Not your Pirates of the Caribbean sort of buccaneer. What an immensely creepy story and fantastic use of the prompt. I was icked out. Thank you.Katherine Tomlinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696623795926663895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88249982213084074052010-07-28T20:07:03.759-04:002010-07-28T20:07:03.759-04:00Excellence in execution as always Angel.
I wonder...Excellence in execution as always Angel.<br /><br />I wonder if the ruined eye contributed to Chris' ruined mind? I think yes.<br /><br />So much in so few words. Well done.Chris Alliniottehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04094925215735680849noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-30010393334599671842010-07-28T18:19:15.081-04:002010-07-28T18:19:15.081-04:00Budding little psychopath?
Freaky. Nice work.Budding little psychopath?<br /><br />Freaky. Nice work.Jonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18109855683749612076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33780551681337852272010-07-28T16:41:51.974-04:002010-07-28T16:41:51.974-04:00Echoes of Lord of the Flies.Echoes of Lord of the Flies.Lewis Petershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07977006391190429073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5867846137946429252010-07-28T05:45:03.062-04:002010-07-28T05:45:03.062-04:00A sinister little tale! Good interaction between t...A sinister little tale! Good interaction between the kids and a suggestion of intriguing back story. Very nice.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76981998956165850992010-07-28T04:49:49.128-04:002010-07-28T04:49:49.128-04:00Brilliant take on the prompt. It had that eerie fe...Brilliant take on the prompt. It had that eerie feeling right from the first line. Loved it through and through.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39771562752710288422010-07-28T01:58:40.519-04:002010-07-28T01:58:40.519-04:00Hi Angel
I guess it gives a whole other meaning t...Hi Angel<br /><br />I guess it gives a whole other meaning to buried treasure. Chris needs psycho analysis... LOL What happened to his eye BTW?<br /><br />Frighteningly done!<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1143060134144477592010-07-27T21:42:25.883-04:002010-07-27T21:42:25.883-04:00Yikes! Poor Brandon!Yikes! Poor Brandon!Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33520207221762361432010-07-27T20:31:17.365-04:002010-07-27T20:31:17.365-04:00Please may I nitpick? PLEASE? 'Cause there'...Please may I nitpick? PLEASE? 'Cause there's too much that's really well done and I feel mean-spirited.<br /><br />I feel like the last two lines could have been combined to make a bigger punch and a smoother ending.<br /><br />(Chalk it up to me wanting to punch someone myself.)<br /><br />Haunted by the church themes.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64654130527018543722010-07-27T15:51:01.301-04:002010-07-27T15:51:01.301-04:00Vivid and brutal!Vivid and brutal!Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35044213540242575442010-07-27T10:49:16.875-04:002010-07-27T10:49:16.875-04:00Oh good stuff, and completely eerie. Big red x. Ug...Oh good stuff, and completely eerie. Big red x. Ugh. Peace...Lindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80425381644987697542010-07-27T00:27:19.720-04:002010-07-27T00:27:19.720-04:00ooooh! that was scary...
It kept me glued till the...ooooh! that was scary...<br />It kept me glued till the end...wow!Erratic Thoughtshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14852558150033296079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18836784647711918732010-07-27T00:15:54.087-04:002010-07-27T00:15:54.087-04:00Hee hee - GREAT STUFF. So many lovely intersection...Hee hee - GREAT STUFF. So many lovely intersections of brutal humor and of course... pirates!!! Nice.Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5167748376136066912010-07-26T21:29:02.858-04:002010-07-26T21:29:02.858-04:00LOVED the eye patch over the ruined eye and the li...LOVED the eye patch over the ruined eye and the line: <i>“And you know what a pirate does with his treasure, right?”</i><br /><br />Excellent story!J. Elis Morganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07768747366196080032noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13679780132759901062010-07-26T18:27:16.320-04:002010-07-26T18:27:16.320-04:00Oh, man. That is cold blooded.
Very well written...Oh, <i>man</i>. That is cold blooded.<br /><br />Very well written. Truly unique use of the prompt, very clever.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51644734897624254352010-07-26T16:51:27.761-04:002010-07-26T16:51:27.761-04:00Very well done. I like your take on the treasure (...Very well done. I like your take on the treasure (or should I say Chris's take on the treasure) how it leads to the police going on a treasure hunt of their own.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58585032642246425812010-07-26T12:06:46.271-04:002010-07-26T12:06:46.271-04:00Now that's a bad day for you-scary what people...Now that's a bad day for you-scary what people do to each other.Oddyoddyo13https://www.blogger.com/profile/05557994037779209704noreply@blogger.com