tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post1796795212504173682..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #152Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11877354154714796402009-07-27T10:06:24.633-04:002009-07-27T10:06:24.633-04:00Sometimes the friction is just too big. Even thou...Sometimes the friction is just too big. Even though we know they are both right and both wrong, we feel as stuck as they do. Great!<br /><br />Perfect score.<br /><br />Welcome to The Forties Club!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13052524806262340552009-07-23T03:10:11.444-04:002009-07-23T03:10:11.444-04:00I meant to say "a very vivid piece..." ...I meant to say "a very vivid piece..." Sorry for being so mushy-brained.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85790276752022766802009-07-20T17:46:16.450-04:002009-07-20T17:46:16.450-04:00You painted a very vivid people of how two people ...You painted a very vivid people of how two people are meant to be apart. These characters lack of respect and empathy for each other was their undoing. You showed that beautifully.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38557343225613544492009-07-20T11:09:44.291-04:002009-07-20T11:09:44.291-04:00What PJD said. This kind of push and pull in a re...What PJD said. This kind of push and pull in a relationship is hard to capture. I think you did it very well. Lots of gray area for sure. I enjoyed this because I like reading about real people. Flawed people who are just trying...Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36166942013222215892009-07-19T14:35:10.383-04:002009-07-19T14:35:10.383-04:00Bravo for the first post.
Great character buildin...Bravo for the first post.<br /><br />Great character building. Very believable too.<br /><br />And its much like the first kill you know. The anxiety and the rush. It gets easier from the next time but the excitement always remains.<br /><br />PS: No, I haven't killed anyone... Just a few characters in my stories here and there. :D Just fooling around. :D :DAniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16187115745001030812009-07-19T09:32:04.040-04:002009-07-19T09:32:04.040-04:00I think Hoodie said it, but very evocative. Very w...I think Hoodie said it, but very evocative. Very well-written.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83645667093397547942009-07-18T11:58:42.778-04:002009-07-18T11:58:42.778-04:00It's so sad when two people are on two totally...It's so sad when two people are on two totally different wave-lengths and both pushing each other's buttons and not really communicating but we see the guy's deeper self at the end. Very well done.Leah McClellanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18183361669157109674noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42187482061309632532009-07-18T08:39:25.763-04:002009-07-18T08:39:25.763-04:00Learning to enjoy what's in hand rather than s...Learning to enjoy what's in hand rather than striking out at what's not is a difficult concept to grasp.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9204115875269915842009-07-18T02:46:45.382-04:002009-07-18T02:46:45.382-04:00She's sacrificing herself for his benefit. Th...She's sacrificing herself for his benefit. That's how she sees it. To him, though, she's ignoring the one thing he wants from her. If only people would understand that what you're providing isn't always what the other person wants to get... and that instead of thinking of the other person as ungrateful trying to find a way to meet in the middle... <i>that's</i> where successful relationships live. He can't expect her to see what he wants through that sarcastic, caustic treatment. She shouldn't expect him to appreciate something he doesn't appreciate.<br /><br />On the surface, I just didn't much like either character. I found I didn't have much patience for them. When I gave it a few minutes to sink in and another read, I saw the same thing in this couple that I've seen in several long-married couples. Some work their way through it; others don't.<br /><br />These two fail.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47915537721529980082009-07-18T00:48:33.103-04:002009-07-18T00:48:33.103-04:00sad, but an all-too-common description of many rel...sad, but an all-too-common description of many relationships.<br />good work - i could picture the whole thingEsther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33848959762325226992009-07-18T00:47:59.905-04:002009-07-18T00:47:59.905-04:00sad, but an all-too-common description of many rel...sad, but an all-too-common description of many relationships.<br />good work - i could picture the whole thingEsther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58309591988544930222009-07-17T07:54:56.293-04:002009-07-17T07:54:56.293-04:00And good riddance I say. That's one relations...And good riddance I say. That's one relationship he is far better off without. Nicely written, great flow and visuals.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39285850200267459682009-07-17T06:44:12.817-04:002009-07-17T06:44:12.817-04:00That'll teach him for being a house husband! W...That'll teach him for being a house husband! Wimp! ;-)<br /><br /><br />First blogpost ever? One to be proud of old bean. Very well written indeed.<br /><br /><br /><br />Four DinnersThe Preachermanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10224135811862587701noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81740359176699285762009-07-16T12:37:02.866-04:002009-07-16T12:37:02.866-04:00Well done on your first post - it is realistic eno...Well done on your first post - it is realistic enough to make me feel sad and want to shake them both a bit.Terrihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03158421102740382411noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15383988637637406362009-07-16T11:49:28.152-04:002009-07-16T11:49:28.152-04:00A powerful glimpse into the intracacies of relatio...A powerful glimpse into the intracacies of relationsips.<br /><br />Very nicely crafted. Realistic and evocative.Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10917743786000477372009-07-16T10:09:31.486-04:002009-07-16T10:09:31.486-04:00Nice job on the character portrayal!Nice job on the character portrayal!Deb Snoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50275830715765812242009-07-16T02:41:57.019-04:002009-07-16T02:41:57.019-04:00I definitely connected with the character. I felt ...I definitely connected with the character. I felt for him. I felt with him. This may be your first blogpost but I'm absolutely sure the second is close.Ranee Kaur Banerjeehttp://www.raneespoems.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6687301080445716282009-07-16T00:17:24.353-04:002009-07-16T00:17:24.353-04:00New khaki pants? Just for tonight? I sense a storm...New khaki pants? Just for tonight? I sense a storm brewing. Welcome to the blogosphere, J.M.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56399244431155290862009-07-15T23:37:05.086-04:002009-07-15T23:37:05.086-04:00Effective dialogue and characterization; nicely wr...Effective dialogue and characterization; nicely writtenAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22232473676591034482009-07-15T23:20:21.675-04:002009-07-15T23:20:21.675-04:00Thanks guys for reading and commenting! I really ...Thanks guys for reading and commenting! I really appreciate that. This is my first blog post ever. Yay! So glad you connected with the character.J. M. Poirothttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047291112115641863noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67381091982817366882009-07-15T22:44:06.506-04:002009-07-15T22:44:06.506-04:00Poor Jim. He needs to drink the rest of the wine a...Poor Jim. He needs to drink the rest of the wine and find himself a nice girl. Maybe not quite so pretty.<br /><br />Good story.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86568567983450731962009-07-15T22:22:32.561-04:002009-07-15T22:22:32.561-04:00how sad...that it should come to this...anywhere.....how sad...that it should come to this...anywhere...Monahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08615034229525061880noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36252296349290564342009-07-15T21:51:40.830-04:002009-07-15T21:51:40.830-04:00nasty, he...nasty, he...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.com