tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post1981190756528832255..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Forties Club Finalist #33Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88652947221786111732010-08-02T10:29:53.336-04:002010-08-02T10:29:53.336-04:00Wonderful! I love fairy tales, and this is a very ...Wonderful! I love fairy tales, and this is a very modern one. Very very nice.Catherine Viberthttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69417860144558989752010-07-29T15:29:05.594-04:002010-07-29T15:29:05.594-04:00I don't know if I feel worse for Bess or Maudi...I don't know if I feel worse for Bess or Maudie! Both of those curses sound awful. (Maudie's affliction reminds me of Ron Weasley blarfing up slugs) What a terrible fairy though, what'd these two girls ever do to her? I wish Bess could have had a better resolution though :-/ so sad<br /><br />Very entertaining!Vincent Kalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04625863843215035035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41857956328764949082010-07-29T08:22:18.702-04:002010-07-29T08:22:18.702-04:00i'm reading the stories backwards and the last...i'm reading the stories backwards and the last one i recall was one with a human 'mule'.<br />so i thought at first that it would end up like that story.<br />i was fascinated by being it a fairy tale.<br />and loved how the toads are accepted in a friendly fashion, whereas jewels are just jewels - there's no love around for poor Bess.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87255901844264446592010-07-29T05:54:37.896-04:002010-07-29T05:54:37.896-04:00This is really story that examines that is meant b...This is really story that examines that is meant by the concept off value. The fairy saw only human greed so she rewarded kindness with what she thought was valuable. The sister's venom could not be cured because she was jealous of her sibling. The King saw the nice sister as an appropriate suitor because she had riches and the poor girl who did the good turn would have been satisfied with a good man who loved and appreciated her.<br /><br />So much packed in, so cleverly, into 250 words.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31530349571361471532010-07-29T01:46:32.414-04:002010-07-29T01:46:32.414-04:00I adore this, in part because this fairy tale fasc...I adore this, in part because this fairy tale fascinated me as a child. I found the prospect of spitting stones every time one speaks to be absolutely horrifying and never did get how that was supposed to be a good thing.<br /><br />Great take on an old tale.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49479504712765532162010-07-28T22:24:50.982-04:002010-07-28T22:24:50.982-04:00This is neat. I like the idea of changing the orig...This is neat. I like the idea of changing the original tale (which I had not heard of before now). I will note, though, I agree with Peter Dudley's comment, in that I thought this was an entirely different genre at first. I am only starting my reading of the contest entries, and I thought maybe your main character was a child who had swallowed her Mom's jewels and been forced to bring them up. Some sad tale indeed! So I'd look for a way to "place" the genre more firmly at the outset. But I do like where you went with it!bekbekhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17935766604154823539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74163407423954528842010-07-28T20:33:36.529-04:002010-07-28T20:33:36.529-04:00I kind of liked the fact that it was the wicked-to...I kind of liked the fact that it was the wicked-tongued sister who got the loving guy and the kind sister married someone who used her. It was an unexpected twist and I love the unexpected! Really good read.J. Elis Morganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07768747366196080032noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64343347886130235042010-07-28T13:46:59.234-04:002010-07-28T13:46:59.234-04:00Ouch. Not all fairytales have happy endings.
Nice...Ouch. Not all fairytales have happy endings. <br />Nice writing.Deb Smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10990130480508998598noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5421651891185664462010-07-28T05:23:01.817-04:002010-07-28T05:23:01.817-04:00I like the idea that what's meant to be a bles...I like the idea that what's meant to be a blessing is in fact a curse.fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53479703396129024112010-07-28T00:22:20.288-04:002010-07-28T00:22:20.288-04:00Hi Kimberly!
I too thought Mom was forcing the da...Hi Kimberly!<br /><br />I too thought Mom was forcing the daughter to bring jewels into the house, what a nasty little fairy this was... at least her sister found happiness even with the toad and snakes. Too bad it didn't work out for Bess.<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23832462454096906472010-07-27T23:15:21.817-04:002010-07-27T23:15:21.817-04:00Oh wow! I love the juxtaposition in this piece bet...Oh wow! I love the juxtaposition in this piece between the jewels and the toads. This is lovely and refreshing. So much told in a little space!Michelle D. Argylehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696465137285587646noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74126730354505870572010-07-26T19:38:21.152-04:002010-07-26T19:38:21.152-04:00Very nice, particularly the statement about love a...Very nice, particularly the statement about love as depicted by the sister. Some people just have all the luck, even if they do spew toads.Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14751567478811396094noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50470353650992718702010-07-26T19:08:27.224-04:002010-07-26T19:08:27.224-04:00Magic always comes with a price. This is a dynamit...Magic always comes with a price. This is a dynamite story.Angel Zapatahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01166540490117426226noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3065578439669205422010-07-26T06:27:54.287-04:002010-07-26T06:27:54.287-04:00Nice combo of fairy tale and 'real life' e...Nice combo of fairy tale and 'real life' emotion and love!Shona Snowdenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02588447219623308333noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22433949810715210062010-07-25T21:18:21.621-04:002010-07-25T21:18:21.621-04:00Thanks for all your kind words! I'll admit, I ...Thanks for all your kind words! I'll admit, I was a little hesitant to enter a story based on a lesser known fairy tale, but that's just what the prompt brought to mind.<br /><br />If it's any consolation, September, in the original fairy tale the rude sister goes off into the story and dies. The good one marries the king; no indication whether she cares about his motivation or not.Kimberly B.https://www.blogger.com/profile/06915078905615036882noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2701580560270706542010-07-25T11:44:34.145-04:002010-07-25T11:44:34.145-04:00I never trust them fairies. No one can be that goo...I never trust them fairies. No one can be that good. And my doubts were confirmed in this piece. Poor Bess. :( Felt like a much darker take on Midas.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82339970961350464352010-07-24T15:35:18.150-04:002010-07-24T15:35:18.150-04:00No good can come of fairy gifts. Nice take on the...No good can come of fairy gifts. Nice take on the old story.Katherine Tomlinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696623795926663895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69859444110697919462010-07-24T11:48:37.372-04:002010-07-24T11:48:37.372-04:00Quite interesting. Though it did make me upset tha...Quite interesting. Though it did make me upset that the foul-mouth sister found such a nice suiter.<br />It's always the sweet ones who end up getting taken advantaged of. <br />Great little story. Nicely done.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34993262268599305512010-07-24T10:09:18.411-04:002010-07-24T10:09:18.411-04:00I've been starting my day by reading a few of ...I've been starting my day by reading a few of these stories, what a start today! Great imagery, the tale flowed freely and will stay around my mind for a while. I may even watch what I say.Michael Morsehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07451637745981389920noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77401783008199154802010-07-24T05:42:13.866-04:002010-07-24T05:42:13.866-04:00My mind's too embedded in reality to enjoy fai...My mind's too embedded in reality to enjoy fairy tales, but I will say this: "very well written and excellent word choice."JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72366036926274048172010-07-24T04:27:35.679-04:002010-07-24T04:27:35.679-04:00I rather like it. No words wasted, a genuine fair...I rather like it. No words wasted, a genuine fairytale with the cast you'd want, then the darkness of the ending to tie it all off like a ribbon.sea minorhttp://nigelpbird.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87932846373895016582010-07-24T02:30:00.304-04:002010-07-24T02:30:00.304-04:00Such a sad fairy tale! Great use of good/evil dich...Such a sad fairy tale! Great use of good/evil dichotomy.<br /><br />(My personal favorite part is the side mention of the sister whose loving husband dodges creepies at the morning kiss. Lovely!)Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44539110822107112802010-07-23T23:04:36.693-04:002010-07-23T23:04:36.693-04:00Ouch! Sad, sad, sad. Well done.
I'm with you,...Ouch! Sad, sad, sad. Well done.<br /><br />I'm with you, Pete, but I think I was derailed by the smuggling story I read prior to this one.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80080098119928404272010-07-23T19:36:45.637-04:002010-07-23T19:36:45.637-04:00I've heard that one before...interesting too!I've heard that one before...interesting too!Oddyoddyo13https://www.blogger.com/profile/05557994037779209704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89380624181780761572010-07-23T19:29:52.585-04:002010-07-23T19:29:52.585-04:00Pete, it's an older fairy tale about a girl wh...Pete, it's an older fairy tale about a girl who falls down a well and is kind to an old woman who's the fairy.<br /><br />Of course, this is not an ending Grimms or Anderson or whomever ever wrote - but as a fellow fairy tale lover, I liked it just the same!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com