tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post2153265897663754076..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #172Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73897904843346569612010-01-22T10:59:42.153-05:002010-01-22T10:59:42.153-05:00Thanks for all the great comments, guys. It's ...Thanks for all the great comments, guys. It's a small moment, in which all of this man's life is enfolded.<br /><br />Glad you liked it!Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37004971309150563752010-01-18T20:28:37.512-05:002010-01-18T20:28:37.512-05:00Great take--the bluriness jumped out at me most, a...Great take--the bluriness jumped out at me most, as well. Very sweet story.TLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01613912638668399684noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5739947988251694162010-01-18T19:35:26.639-05:002010-01-18T19:35:26.639-05:00So elegant and sweet. Very nicely written!So elegant and sweet. Very nicely written!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2579163191659778142010-01-17T18:10:15.446-05:002010-01-17T18:10:15.446-05:00my caveat
Something I Would Keep
It's subtle, ...<br><br><a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my caveat</a><br><br /><b>Something I Would Keep</b><br><br />It's subtle, but the piece unfolds in a sort of chronological movement, so that there's definitely "action" in a smooth, understated sense.<br /><br /><b>Something I Might Tweak</b><br><br />grackles? really? I had to literally stop and Google - :) Oh, wait, that's my own ignorance...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65612630448979812282010-01-17T03:57:15.738-05:002010-01-17T03:57:15.738-05:00Yes, for the elderly, looking through the world ca...Yes, for the elderly, looking through the world can be as if it is an impressionistic painting; seen through tears; blurred, out of focused. The physical condition acts a metaphor for the spiritual condition of humankind that destroys (squanders) habitats of nature as it builds up habitats for itself. Perhaps, we can't see what we are doing, we all have scales on our eyes.Linda Ryan-Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15164148666810818891noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21700870956009160342010-01-16T19:17:29.619-05:002010-01-16T19:17:29.619-05:00Loss of eyesight, but not acuity. Nicely done. I r...Loss of eyesight, but not acuity. Nicely done. I really feel for your MC.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22200097790437657322010-01-16T13:51:32.444-05:002010-01-16T13:51:32.444-05:00Beautiful description of the ordinary cruelty with...Beautiful description of the ordinary cruelty with which time takes things away.Kurt Hendrickshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16183333362118745153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72041209235322850192010-01-16T12:10:45.952-05:002010-01-16T12:10:45.952-05:00I love this depiction of an old timer. You showed...I love this depiction of an old timer. You showed us his life, how it changed and the way it is now - all through blurry eyes. Gentle and warm I find Grandfather a compelling character. I enjoyed this very much.<br /><br />(BTW last year in a CoN contest I had a woman who was practically blind from glaucoma getting a bike ride down route 66)JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87065918431481612632010-01-15T23:10:10.363-05:002010-01-15T23:10:10.363-05:00I like the last sentence; it suggests that his wif...I like the last sentence; it suggests that his wife has been gone along time, but he is not alone. Bravo! --JRAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83082807547299951872010-01-15T12:56:31.131-05:002010-01-15T12:56:31.131-05:00Very lovingly portrayed!Very lovingly portrayed!Kartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72544209430573645492010-01-15T00:56:49.021-05:002010-01-15T00:56:49.021-05:00Two things taken away from him over the years... s...Two things taken away from him over the years... sight and, well... site, I suppose. Nicely written, wistful.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12656317711750738532010-01-15T00:13:23.688-05:002010-01-15T00:13:23.688-05:00I love they way you wove all those little details ...I love they way you wove all those little details together to show the MC's age.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75665746189794880672010-01-14T11:12:33.748-05:002010-01-14T11:12:33.748-05:00Nice, clean writing. A real pleasure to read.Nice, clean writing. A real pleasure to read.Deb Smythenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-62780233824852180692010-01-13T16:42:41.322-05:002010-01-13T16:42:41.322-05:00Loved the feel of changes in this, loved the watch...Loved the feel of changes in this, loved the watching of the hawks. I am surrounded by red tailed hawks - a nest just up the road means we keep our small animals indoors when they're scanning the neighborhood. A neighbor lost a teacup chihuahua a few years ago and the rest of us learned our lesson.<br /><br />Debid smith kaich joneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13450581639610967780noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50941382740502214272010-01-13T15:25:46.406-05:002010-01-13T15:25:46.406-05:00I love how you portrayed the character. And your i...I love how you portrayed the character. And your interpretation of the picture. Great writing!lenahttp://www.thecolorsmagazine.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25801378072005282052010-01-13T15:21:45.202-05:002010-01-13T15:21:45.202-05:00this is a very well written piece. the flow was sm...this is a very well written piece. the flow was smooth and uninterrupted. i loved the characterization. simple and sweet. <br /><br />nice. liked.Preetihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00279859240371070699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37933381999372101152010-01-13T09:52:32.225-05:002010-01-13T09:52:32.225-05:00not glaucoma, but i have eye probs, so can relate....not glaucoma, but i have eye probs, so can relate...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10244121099017252922010-01-13T09:48:31.717-05:002010-01-13T09:48:31.717-05:00Thanks, everybody. The thing that struck me most a...Thanks, everybody. The thing that struck me most about the picture wasn't the bird, the trees, or the lack of color or leaves. It was the blurriness.<br /><br />I'm glad you liked it!Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26952225694881105742010-01-13T07:55:28.981-05:002010-01-13T07:55:28.981-05:00Oh, it made me happy to read this. Just yesterday...Oh, it made me happy to read this. Just yesterday I was looking in my Petersen's to try to identify a great big hawk I've been seeing lately. I also came to the conclusion that it wasn't a Cooper's Hawk, but I'll need to see it in flight above me to get it right. I also saw a pair of Pileated Woodpeckers yesterday, and added them to my life list, yes I keep one. So all this to say that I was captivated by your story both for the birding, and the tenderness I felt for the old man. Excellent writing, just beautiful.catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40046720357370594772010-01-13T05:24:26.160-05:002010-01-13T05:24:26.160-05:00What McKoala said.What McKoala said.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64173899294293237712010-01-13T04:17:44.835-05:002010-01-13T04:17:44.835-05:00I like the writing in this one; simple but effecti...I like the writing in this one; simple but effective.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23518387502295247722010-01-13T03:28:44.999-05:002010-01-13T03:28:44.999-05:00Lovely portrayal of the character. This literally ...Lovely portrayal of the character. This literally placed us in his shoes.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86393874556009587802010-01-13T02:43:32.308-05:002010-01-13T02:43:32.308-05:00Liked this one for the brevity as for the silver s...Liked this one for the brevity as for the silver sense you're brought in so effortlessly.austerehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16839224877080864005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11237733026095694742010-01-12T21:35:51.438-05:002010-01-12T21:35:51.438-05:00Gorgeous depiction of the knowledge we gain and th...Gorgeous depiction of the knowledge we gain and the things we lose with our years.<br /><br />Loving and eloquent.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-921941424760381582010-01-12T21:08:43.557-05:002010-01-12T21:08:43.557-05:00Nice play on the picture with the blurry thing goi...Nice play on the picture with the blurry thing going on. You have a way of giving your characters so much personality. :)Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.com