tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post2310427749333620117..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #38Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55852621234402845892009-07-29T22:22:25.016-04:002009-07-29T22:22:25.016-04:00Regrets, he has a few. ;) A nicely written piece. ...Regrets, he has a few. ;) A nicely written piece. Great job!Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51789860080653592532009-07-24T18:28:38.348-04:002009-07-24T18:28:38.348-04:00A very good sense of narrative here. The story fl...A very good sense of narrative here. The story flows seamlessly.<br /><br />Welcome to The Forties Club!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36704219323709070262009-07-20T17:10:23.616-04:002009-07-20T17:10:23.616-04:00This slice of thought makes me want to hear more -...This slice of thought makes me want to hear more - I like the possibility of the opening line to send the narrator off in a new direction by the end.Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69917678584820233142009-07-18T09:52:24.664-04:002009-07-18T09:52:24.664-04:00That generation valued self sacrifice and martyred...That generation valued self sacrifice and martyred themselves endlessly thinking, not only that it made them better people, but that it made them better than others. I have witnessed first hand how years of depriving oneself of the joys of life just leaves regret and emptiness.<br /><br />Drink fully from the cup of life I say.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2751865358032334752009-07-17T00:02:18.369-04:002009-07-17T00:02:18.369-04:00Very distinctive rhythm to your piece. Really nic...Very distinctive rhythm to your piece. Really nice.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-30514069369598946112009-07-14T13:01:41.945-04:002009-07-14T13:01:41.945-04:00pjd--ah I remember that! I haven't seen eithe...pjd--ah I remember that! I haven't seen either movie in its entirety, but in high school my history teacher liked to give us pop culture examples of what we were learning and that was one of the clips he showed us.<br /><br />and I'm pretty sure I have a book about Socrates' philosophy somewhere around here...hm.Lexiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01997726505496899916noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45248208410662832932009-07-14T11:16:52.056-04:002009-07-14T11:16:52.056-04:00Everyone is showing their age... Lexie, you are yo...Everyone is showing their age... Lexie, you are young so perhaps you were not channeling Kansas but rather Socrates. <a href="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2EwaFkPMdlY" rel="nofollow">All we are is dust in the wind, dude.</a><br /><br />Dust. Wind. Dude.<br /><br />But the story is a well written account of one person's second guessing of their own choices in life. Nicely done.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7401292440196636762009-07-14T09:05:40.642-04:002009-07-14T09:05:40.642-04:00Your piece drew wine and age together for a brief ...Your piece drew wine and age together for a brief glimpse back. Nice.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74089943043824952332009-07-13T13:51:27.029-04:002009-07-13T13:51:27.029-04:00"No one will know or care."
Those are p..."No one will know or care."<br /><br />Those are powerful words.<br /><br />Great piece, Alexandra.Theresehttp://shoeism.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5114775233299613352009-07-13T12:05:07.678-04:002009-07-13T12:05:07.678-04:00I think you touch a raw nerve in this well-judged ...I think you touch a raw nerve in this well-judged tale - the lonliness of old age.Tessahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05233122532137654099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5290967917820143562009-07-12T17:55:35.970-04:002009-07-12T17:55:35.970-04:00I read this after a very hard day at work (and I d...I read this after a very hard day at work (and I don't like the 'w' word) followed by several pints of Kronenburg and several bottles of Bud once home.<br /><br />I shouldn't have read this now.<br /><br />I can't spell mela...melen...whatever even sober.<br /><br />I like it and cried.<br /><br />So there.<br /><br />hic<br /><br /><br />Four Dinners xThe Preachermanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10224135811862587701noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58231219625989054592009-07-11T17:36:53.487-04:002009-07-11T17:36:53.487-04:00@Laurel:
Hmm. Sleep seems to dodge me too. Its 3 ...@Laurel:<br /><br />Hmm. Sleep seems to dodge me too. Its 3 a.m here right now. :)<br /><br />And no one can beat the laughingwolf. I've learnt my lesson the last time. He is on another level. :) He's very spirited.<br /><br />And JR has a unique style in everything. Even if he posted anonymously you can figure out by his style. Same is the case with Sarah and SarahA. They have unique styles.<br /><br />So we are pretty much targeting you cause you are the new probie. :PAniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20540491056834046952009-07-11T16:54:07.140-04:002009-07-11T16:54:07.140-04:00The word melancholy waited for years for you to wr...The word melancholy waited for years for you to write this. <br /><br />I love the intimation that the choice to abstain was always laced with righteousness that no longer seems worth the effort. Nice characterization.<br /><br />Aniket and Chris:<br /><br />We're racing? Seriously? Will that increase my chances of winning anything? 'Cause if so I have two huge advantages.<br /><br />1) I have major issues with sleep<br />2) I should be editing my novel so I am always on the computer checking online instead. It's called displacement activity.<br /><br />That being said, if we are really racing then Laughing Wolf and JR's Thumbprint are kicking our collective a@@.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31443568920444034022009-07-11T13:58:11.331-04:002009-07-11T13:58:11.331-04:00@JR: oh I'm sure JR, I mean I don't even k...@JR: oh I'm sure JR, I mean I don't even know who Kansas is...I guess its possible I heard the song before (cause my stepdad listens to practically everything except Rap) and maybe unconsciously channeled that, but my normal music tastes aren't even in English 90% of the time (I prefer Japanese and Korean songs, with Mandarin Chinese mixed in...except for Vanessa Carlton and Taylor Swift and on occasion Coldplay and Lifehouse).<br /><br />I'll have to see if I can find it now!Lexiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01997726505496899916noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81835834296655057182009-07-11T13:54:33.226-04:002009-07-11T13:54:33.226-04:00Are you sure you weren't listening to Kansas? ...Are you sure you weren't listening to Kansas? I could hear "Dust in the Wind" as I read this piece. They go together.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17196398448889280252009-07-11T11:59:02.547-04:002009-07-11T11:59:02.547-04:00@catvibe: I had no idea that it was a song lyric? ...@catvibe: I had no idea that it was a song lyric? XD <br /><br />@everyone: thank you for your encouraging words! when I first began the piece I wanted it to be funny, but when I began trimming out words and sentences to keep to the ascribed limit I found I wanted to cut out all the funny (in a dark humor sort of way) lines and keep all the melancholy ones.Lexiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01997726505496899916noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81943623614718602482009-07-11T11:57:38.541-04:002009-07-11T11:57:38.541-04:00makes one ponder, indeed...makes one ponder, indeed...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63615335117485063202009-07-11T11:15:24.598-04:002009-07-11T11:15:24.598-04:00Beautiful and yet so melancoly and lonelyBeautiful and yet so melancoly and lonelylucyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15794908366190951214noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-314678040574994412009-07-11T08:54:02.575-04:002009-07-11T08:54:02.575-04:00@ Chris,
Together we can beat her.
Reading glass...@ Chris,<br /><br />Together we can beat her.<br /><br />Reading glasses - Check<br />Laptop Handy - Check<br />Net Connection - Check<br /><br />Now we wait for Jason to put up the entries.<br /><br />Dunno why but my mail subscription is coming a day late. :(<br /><br />Google Reader also updates itself quite late. Should we bribe Jason? :P :PAniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63379722641851366992009-07-11T08:16:33.228-04:002009-07-11T08:16:33.228-04:00LOL @ Aniket! heheeh I've been racing Laurel...LOL @ Aniket! heheeh I've been racing Laurel also.<br />:-)<br /><br />Sad and melancholy piece--really tugs at my emotions.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9605033256432119322009-07-11T06:46:28.698-04:002009-07-11T06:46:28.698-04:00The sad thing about this piece is the number of se...The sad thing about this piece is the number of seniors who feel exactly this way. You used the song lyrics Dust in the Wind, but I couldn't help think of an old Elton John song 'Talking Old Soldiers'. It had a similar feel. Nice one.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66751706821116456652009-07-11T06:35:51.257-04:002009-07-11T06:35:51.257-04:00Where's Laurel? Is she not here yet? Yay!!! :D...Where's Laurel? Is she not here yet? Yay!!! :D :D<br /><br />Aherm. Liked this piece a lot. (I know I've been saying this a lot, but there isn't any story one can't like, is there?)<br /><br />The tangled emotions and test of beliefs. Urge to give in to desires. The loneliness. Everything was very well described.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34037816128472059082009-07-10T23:22:44.947-04:002009-07-10T23:22:44.947-04:00A very sad but well done soliloquy.A very sad but well done soliloquy.Katherine Napiernoreply@blogger.com