tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post2846312102778864239..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #66Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78829803993831259472011-07-31T12:57:08.126-04:002011-07-31T12:57:08.126-04:00What a great example of a unique story with a stor...What a great example of a unique story with a story delivery. Thsi kind of writing really sticks.<br /><br />Congratulations on the Honorable Mention!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24401830561478257862011-07-28T10:03:06.974-04:002011-07-28T10:03:06.974-04:00Very different and a nice subtle approach into the...Very different and a nice subtle approach into the realm of childhood's mindL.A Speedwinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07734240100355616049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8612239210183967302011-07-25T17:37:59.405-04:002011-07-25T17:37:59.405-04:00I have often conjugated a cuss word or two myself....I have often conjugated a cuss word or two myself. This piece was very alive - the child's POV gave it a real strength. Well done.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29712051031754828672011-07-22T22:38:06.286-04:002011-07-22T22:38:06.286-04:00Beautiful the way this captures the child's po...Beautiful the way this captures the child's point of view with it not entirely being clear or understanding, yet enough is here under the covers to give the horror of this away.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14170148559429001125noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16562502088194591922011-07-22T22:34:36.900-04:002011-07-22T22:34:36.900-04:00This is too true to life, as in when did you spend...This is too true to life, as in when did you spend the night in our house?<br /><br />Kids know stuff, way too early, they just know.<br /><br />I agree with Linda...you must write. Just write, write, write.Rachelhttp://artsdaughter.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36417260310313149252011-07-22T16:01:55.833-04:002011-07-22T16:01:55.833-04:00I was pulled in from the first word. You have suc...I was pulled in from the first word. You have such a way with characters; I knew them well by the end of the tale. I also loved how our narrator believed "tenure review" a cuss word. Nice work.<br /><br />Thank you for sharing!Michele Zugnonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12394802719932859470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13914389801906960742011-07-22T14:19:59.138-04:002011-07-22T14:19:59.138-04:00I felt this, rather than read it. Somehow your wor...I felt this, rather than read it. Somehow your words formed images and emotion, with no need for thought. Magic? I think not. Just a great bit of writing.Michael Morsehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07451637745981389920noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79209864050493992262011-07-22T09:35:38.646-04:002011-07-22T09:35:38.646-04:00The POV made this entry really powerful and evocat...The POV made this entry really powerful and evocative. Well done, Catrina!Richard Levangiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16596356126446766607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60808995834159896982011-07-21T17:56:30.630-04:002011-07-21T17:56:30.630-04:00Yay for mum!!! I like her!! I love the child and m...Yay for mum!!! I like her!! I love the child and mother bond too! Wonderful very dark story. Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53728070347736153232011-07-21T15:31:13.758-04:002011-07-21T15:31:13.758-04:00Maybe I just lean toward the dark, but I read it a...Maybe I just lean toward the dark, but I read it as the bonfire being intentionally set by the mom, too - and that she had done this before. :) The tale is realistic - nicely done! ~Janabluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39276000024154777852011-07-21T10:05:05.675-04:002011-07-21T10:05:05.675-04:00I thought the bonfire was set by the mother to bur...I thought the bonfire was set by the mother to burn father's stuff.<br /><br />The story carried out an intriguing scene, nice imagery and the POV worked well. Good tale!Jay R. Thurstonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12369000584179598973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85662208779632149002011-07-21T02:40:03.668-04:002011-07-21T02:40:03.668-04:00I loved the swearing; fancy using naughty words li...I loved the swearing; fancy using naughty words like mortgage in front of a child! And I loved the child's point of view. The ending was chilling.fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32569146922692010732011-07-20T13:44:04.024-04:002011-07-20T13:44:04.024-04:00Strong concept with some really stunning phrasing....Strong concept with some really stunning phrasing. Nice work.Jonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18109855683749612076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69112708155990409362011-07-19T20:43:11.508-04:002011-07-19T20:43:11.508-04:00Interesting...a child's view and yet, the adul...Interesting...a child's view and yet, the adult perspective of jobless and anger, both views are helpless. Nice job!<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86359273944101660742011-07-19T00:18:54.213-04:002011-07-19T00:18:54.213-04:00@Precie: Sorry for the nightmares! Thank you for y...@Precie: Sorry for the nightmares! Thank you for your kind words.<br /><br />@Aerin: Same here. Thank you.<br /><br />@Aimee: Thank you for your honest feedback! It's hard to be clear in 250 words; things get cut out in the editing. What I was trying to convey was that the father often lost his temper and fought with the mother. But for this fight, the two have gone off-"script" (i.e. no words of comfort, etc.). Mom hasn't defused Dad's anger, and Dad's driven off with a container of gas in the trunk. Thank you so much for letting me know this was unclear.<br /><br />@Linda: Thank you! Your comment made my night. =)Catrinanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37549648473346365212011-07-18T23:29:01.429-04:002011-07-18T23:29:01.429-04:00The terrors of childhood and the mysterious veil b...The terrors of childhood and the mysterious veil between parents and their offspring folded into a language we as children are taught to embrace, but often sense as something foreign. You are definitely a writer.Linda Ryan-Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15164148666810818891noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36221545938642282852011-07-18T21:29:36.866-04:002011-07-18T21:29:36.866-04:00I've read it 2x to figure out the bonfire and ...I've read it 2x to figure out the bonfire and who actually set it and where. In the backyard or was the car on fire? Not sure, but that could just be me. :) I did like this being from the POV of the kid though. They definitely see 'fights' in a completely different 'light'.Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7836036443018650182011-07-18T19:21:30.999-04:002011-07-18T19:21:30.999-04:00Precisely why I never pursued a professor position...Precisely why I never pursued a professor position, Precie. (Like all the alliteration in there?)<br /><br />I love how skillfully this child is drawn, to be both innocent and willful, aware and naive. <br /><br />Cue the bonfire. Chilling.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2099306671195298202011-07-18T18:36:01.520-04:002011-07-18T18:36:01.520-04:00Gee, thanks. Of all these entries, this will be th...Gee, thanks. Of all these entries, this will be the one I have nightmares about. Tenure review. *shudder* <br /><br />Seriously, nicely done. Dropping bits and pieces from the child's perspective...excellent.Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.com