tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post285039901366001460..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #137Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25921128438498327762010-01-19T13:04:01.025-05:002010-01-19T13:04:01.025-05:00A short prose poem of a moment--everyone can relat...A short prose poem of a moment--everyone can relate to the feelings here...Katherine Tomlinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696623795926663895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61766825082544146652010-01-18T12:50:35.916-05:002010-01-18T12:50:35.916-05:00haunting.haunting.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27674320978534241832010-01-18T12:06:22.434-05:002010-01-18T12:06:22.434-05:00Sad and lonely, and I'm thinking the shortness...Sad and lonely, and I'm thinking the shortness of this piece adds to the lonliness.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24127831597408195182010-01-17T21:25:02.996-05:002010-01-17T21:25:02.996-05:00my caveat
Something I Would Keep
It has the "...<br><br><a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my caveat</a><br><br /><b>Something I Would Keep</b><br><br />It has the "if a tree falls in the forest" "unplug from the Matrix" kinds of feel.<br /><br /><b>Something I Might Tweak</b><br><br />Moving from specifics (the coffee) to generalizations seems to be part of the structure, but I think some of the effectiveness is lost when you choose to use so few words. Just a thought.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65215448369317581782010-01-17T00:01:29.404-05:002010-01-17T00:01:29.404-05:00I've been reading these entries in reverse ord...I've been reading these entries in reverse order and have run across plenty of window sills. Nice sketch.James R. Tomlinsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-71311466076790779922010-01-16T15:01:12.458-05:002010-01-16T15:01:12.458-05:00stark.stark.quin brownehttp://www.quinbrowne-words.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61259983990478760682010-01-16T06:48:28.554-05:002010-01-16T06:48:28.554-05:00Jeffrey - this is how I often think the elderly an...Jeffrey - this is how I often think the elderly and infirm residents of nursing homes think. Its melancholy and longing is wrapped up in stillness and quiet.<br /><br />You packed a lot of feeling into these few words.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24776086467226728252010-01-15T18:39:53.963-05:002010-01-15T18:39:53.963-05:00Smooth. I'd say this was poetry because of the...Smooth. I'd say this was poetry because of the way if flowed and how it's hard to put your finger on its subtle complexities.Barry J. Northernhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12078136594892291058noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48426729674325553912010-01-15T06:03:08.626-05:002010-01-15T06:03:08.626-05:00one of those middle-of-day-existential crises?one of those middle-of-day-existential crises?Kartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43199891576616059312010-01-14T14:12:00.405-05:002010-01-14T14:12:00.405-05:00Fabulous wrap around- you always tie everything to...Fabulous wrap around- you always tie everything together, with such sharp, honesty – love that.EChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09359075647077590741noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68561364737869082512010-01-13T21:47:36.016-05:002010-01-13T21:47:36.016-05:00Nicely done Jeff - even tho I know your feelings o...Nicely done Jeff - even tho I know your feelings on the piece I still think its good.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85824396314195503802010-01-13T11:11:29.345-05:002010-01-13T11:11:29.345-05:00Nice writing. Can we have some Spring soon? Plea...Nice writing. Can we have some Spring soon? Please?catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9403236254842644312010-01-12T17:49:20.617-05:002010-01-12T17:49:20.617-05:00Nicely drawn snapshot.Nicely drawn snapshot.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42708986118524140532010-01-12T14:32:20.191-05:002010-01-12T14:32:20.191-05:00Loneliness is one of the saddest feelings in the w...Loneliness is one of the saddest feelings in the world. You have shown the weight of it very well.lenahttp://www.thecolorsmagazine.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51744046390539337152010-01-12T11:28:28.515-05:002010-01-12T11:28:28.515-05:00I am bereft.
This is so lonesome.I am bereft.<br /><br />This is so lonesome.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27683230358503720102010-01-12T11:25:40.542-05:002010-01-12T11:25:40.542-05:00Very melancholic. Almost makes me feel lonely!Very melancholic. Almost makes me feel lonely!DILLIGAFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16520650650468676361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25308175483528645282010-01-12T10:39:56.157-05:002010-01-12T10:39:56.157-05:00You hit the cold and lonely vibe, smack on.You hit the cold and lonely vibe, smack on.Deb Snoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27066494205413421062010-01-12T10:31:01.394-05:002010-01-12T10:31:01.394-05:00well said...well said...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14526917906290476562010-01-12T05:44:03.319-05:002010-01-12T05:44:03.319-05:00Short and sweet. Err bittersweet. Great. Yes. I su...Short and sweet. Err bittersweet. Great. Yes. I suck at profound comments. :)Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22228431755340453632010-01-12T03:57:48.261-05:002010-01-12T03:57:48.261-05:00You put across the narator's confusion well wi...You put across the narator's confusion well without overplaying it. Well done.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52407756059074583182010-01-12T03:38:40.899-05:002010-01-12T03:38:40.899-05:00Stark and sharp. Very good work.Stark and sharp. Very good work.Paul D Brazillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12881642426845398389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34044265687893212602010-01-12T01:54:39.473-05:002010-01-12T01:54:39.473-05:00Echo to Nevine. Its melancholic and serene.Echo to Nevine. Its melancholic and serene.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82143178060097282192010-01-11T22:08:22.917-05:002010-01-11T22:08:22.917-05:00Wonderful, Jeff. Glad to see it here.Wonderful, Jeff. Glad to see it here.LynnAlexanderhttp://www.fashionforcollapse.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59739492192709365022010-01-11T20:46:41.745-05:002010-01-11T20:46:41.745-05:00I reckon the narrator wishes it to be a dream that...I reckon the narrator wishes it to be a dream that he can wake from. He is drifting, not noticing coffee going cold. The latter being representative of how his life is going. It's cold outside, the coffee's cold, but he's colder. Likewise, he perceives his loneliness in all other things - whether animate, as with the bird; or inanimate, as with the window (twice). I think he should really think about the bird outside and start to think why he is chirping, and then, start to do the same. He a loner, but not a natural one.kashersnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64992392260997218492010-01-11T20:45:59.794-05:002010-01-11T20:45:59.794-05:00Conveys a certain ennui.Conveys a certain ennui.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.com