tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post3279299977477626327..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #96Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2474032478461629192009-07-29T21:44:38.143-04:002009-07-29T21:44:38.143-04:00I really liked this story. The ironic last line, t...I really liked this story. The ironic last line, the details, it all comes together in a nice, tight package. Great job.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61277941718504920772009-07-27T08:04:04.423-04:002009-07-27T08:04:04.423-04:00The movements are hypnotic. A ship tossing in the...The movements are hypnotic. A ship tossing in the sea. Kind of calming.<br /><br />High marks for pacing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87472506624269527092009-07-19T09:07:07.870-04:002009-07-19T09:07:07.870-04:00This is one of my favorites. The story itself is ...This is one of my favorites. The story itself is not complicated, but you lead us to the end with such strong character development and writing. There are no weird twists that don't fit, but it is still fresh and unexpected. Nice job.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82413758258648769012009-07-18T03:58:56.570-04:002009-07-18T03:58:56.570-04:00This is a very fine piece of writing. The way you...This is a very fine piece of writing. The way you described the spinning on the chair was masterful. It makes me think that what had gone before was doomed to recur - no matter how often she changed the scenery she'd always come back to her abuser.<br /><br />Very moving.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56629002459181332222009-07-17T14:33:53.569-04:002009-07-17T14:33:53.569-04:00This was really nicely written. So much detail. I ...This was really nicely written. So much detail. I was wondering why she seemed so calm as I was shown the disarray around her -- and then you hit us with it at the end... great writing.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66576153388398014952009-07-17T00:08:16.077-04:002009-07-17T00:08:16.077-04:00i agree on the not letting the violence be seen as...i agree on the not letting the violence be seen as crucial to the story.quin brownehttp://www.quinbrowne-words.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88510019068446952162009-07-16T20:08:29.712-04:002009-07-16T20:08:29.712-04:00I also felt this was very strong writing. Elegant,...I also felt this was very strong writing. Elegant, yet powerful. Your attention to detail is superb--just the right balance to ground us without overwhelming us.<br />Very nicely drawn!!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26712809753733933892009-07-16T02:21:28.322-04:002009-07-16T02:21:28.322-04:00I hope she gets her glass slipper in the end.
Thi...I hope she gets her glass slipper in the end.<br /><br />This is, as others have said, properly told. The counterclockwise movement, the fact that she has done this before and has a routine... very well done.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52697568165843923762009-07-15T16:35:59.007-04:002009-07-15T16:35:59.007-04:00Drunken violence without spelling it out - superbl...Drunken violence without spelling it out - superbly done.Amanda F.https://www.blogger.com/profile/11302784595594793121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20419475391232957532009-07-15T13:56:52.230-04:002009-07-15T13:56:52.230-04:00One too many glasses of wine. Nicely done.One too many glasses of wine. Nicely done.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15841492802745012712009-07-15T07:20:02.712-04:002009-07-15T07:20:02.712-04:00Wow, great writing, rich, visual, subtle - there&#...Wow, great writing, rich, visual, subtle - there's the makings of a great thriller in this. Really strong writing, very well done!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42336331319672091842009-07-15T02:49:44.000-04:002009-07-15T02:49:44.000-04:00i like your writing. riveting!i like your writing. riveting!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52926715355198534152009-07-14T19:42:36.131-04:002009-07-14T19:42:36.131-04:00Wow! The detail of the spinning in and out of visi...Wow! The detail of the spinning in and out of vision sells me on this. Great point of view; very good writing.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56172402415015634542009-07-14T11:26:52.636-04:002009-07-14T11:26:52.636-04:00Very nicely done, Christina. Strong detail, a cri...Very nicely done, Christina. Strong detail, a crisp peek into the moment. I particularly like the way the title plays in.<br /><br />(Its me BTW. I got an entry in last night. 112)Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43271231343655929792009-07-13T18:57:04.786-04:002009-07-13T18:57:04.786-04:00It's good to know that Andrew isn't dead! ...It's good to know that Andrew isn't dead! Interesting movement in this story.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52927046803327541382009-07-13T16:07:50.772-04:002009-07-13T16:07:50.772-04:00understated elegance...understated elegance...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44979375516784805762009-07-13T13:49:40.939-04:002009-07-13T13:49:40.939-04:00Thank you for not letting us see the violence happ...Thank you for not letting us see the violence happen. This was really great, I enjoyed it very much. Great last line.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55776709705731325672009-07-13T11:48:17.845-04:002009-07-13T11:48:17.845-04:00She sure seems to have a getaway plan intact. I wo...She sure seems to have a getaway plan intact. I wouldn't cross paths with that women... ever.<br /><br />The ones who curse and shout a lot are still predictable. The calm ones are to be feared. :)<br /><br />Liked this a lot.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3483904167552714222009-07-13T11:13:12.241-04:002009-07-13T11:13:12.241-04:00I like your attention to detail. "usually in ...I like your attention to detail. "usually in rigid order", "files flung from North to South".<br /><br />Really subtle piece. Really well done. Good job.Theresehttp://shoeism.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32246122614355381862009-07-13T11:08:45.367-04:002009-07-13T11:08:45.367-04:00I love the counter clockwise detail, like she want...I love the counter clockwise detail, like she wants to turn time back.<br /><br />So well done.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44174263766979578432009-07-13T11:04:17.005-04:002009-07-13T11:04:17.005-04:00Understated violence supurbly done. I'm not su...Understated violence supurbly done. I'm not sure I was meant to smile at the last line but I did anyway.<br /><br />Really really like this a lot.<br /><br /><br /><br /><br />Four DinnersThe Preachermanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10224135811862587701noreply@blogger.com