tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post3701242242382390708..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #212Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3800893655388039842010-01-21T15:45:11.657-05:002010-01-21T15:45:11.657-05:00Beautiful done..Its deep and intense...the father ...Beautiful done..Its deep and intense...the father son relationship..the father wanting to be free to see his child...its all so beautiful and deep...<br /><br />great piece..keep up the good work!!!varu...https://www.blogger.com/profile/16538756012842302987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5613838022500008332010-01-19T14:06:30.223-05:002010-01-19T14:06:30.223-05:00I like PJDs take. Loved the philosophy throughout...I like PJDs take. Loved the philosophy throughout, but particularly the line 'you can not alter a shadow son'. Stark and heady.catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18042870828012274132010-01-18T18:40:16.615-05:002010-01-18T18:40:16.615-05:00I took the whole thing to be that he was raised to...I took the whole thing to be that he was raised to be a terrorist, and when it was his time he did what he'd been raised to do. The act, and the subsequent punishment, took away his art... until all he could do was try to sketch darkness itself.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23025871373698969312010-01-18T13:56:20.898-05:002010-01-18T13:56:20.898-05:00Oh! Nicely told.Oh! Nicely told.Rachel Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13048590167153841615noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13137682930503745832010-01-17T20:39:32.230-05:002010-01-17T20:39:32.230-05:00Great ending...pulls it all together nicely.Great ending...pulls it all together nicely.Kurt Hendrickshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16183333362118745153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49337431327831058642010-01-17T17:26:43.714-05:002010-01-17T17:26:43.714-05:00Interesting. I like how you able to create a great...Interesting. I like how you able to create a great deal of sypathy for the character even though he did something terrible.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66123162411532795192010-01-17T16:19:08.490-05:002010-01-17T16:19:08.490-05:00Did he confuse violence with art? I am certainly ...Did he confuse violence with art? I am certainly sensing that he had a different perspective on life than the others around him. tragic.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19912728747865568462010-01-16T08:08:19.055-05:002010-01-16T08:08:19.055-05:00"who" sounds like an owl. i meant "..."who" sounds like an owl. i meant "how." time for a break.JRnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26000760272747896592010-01-16T08:07:07.931-05:002010-01-16T08:07:07.931-05:00Anyone who knows me, knows who I prefer stories th...Anyone who knows me, knows who I prefer stories that turn from innocence to pure evil. You managed it here. I'm not clear about everything going on here, but I know it's dark.james r tomlinsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53731910507592488032010-01-16T07:52:25.375-05:002010-01-16T07:52:25.375-05:00Sigh...
Will the darkness ever end?
What i liked...Sigh...<br /><br />Will the darkness ever end?<br /><br />What i liked this for - is the disjointedness. YET you have woven the entire narrative with some fine invisible thread. There is shape but it evades. <br /><br />Loved it. Very expertly done.Preetihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00279859240371070699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87322037149413350022010-01-15T23:23:29.955-05:002010-01-15T23:23:29.955-05:00Caveat
Something I Would Keep
political and philos...<br><br><a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">Caveat</a><br><br /><b>Something I Would Keep</b><br><br />political and philosophical overtones - the questions that <i>weren't</i> asked, like what makes a criminal? (idiosyncratic imbalance)<br /><br /><b>Something I Might Tweak</b><br><br />more consistent time progression - since the rest of the piece is artful and not typical prose, keep the time progression typicalAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7522946952654952212010-01-15T02:01:27.553-05:002010-01-15T02:01:27.553-05:00beautifully done Yamini!beautifully done Yamini!Rohanhttp://cachememory.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72547157592944208592010-01-14T19:20:55.618-05:002010-01-14T19:20:55.618-05:00great progression...great progression...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82647005175433847182010-01-14T15:26:31.210-05:002010-01-14T15:26:31.210-05:00A dark turn, indeed.A dark turn, indeed.Deb Smythenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51289257468509472812010-01-14T12:09:58.351-05:002010-01-14T12:09:58.351-05:00I really like the start of the piece. His interact...I really like the start of the piece. His interaction with his grandpa was most interesting.<br /><br />I kind of lost you after the first time shift and got it on the second read.<br /><br />This will sure have very varied interpretations. I'm just left curious to know what made him follow such a path.<br /><br />A very good read as always though. Keep inspiring. ;)Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-62333736004975510212010-01-14T03:03:19.985-05:002010-01-14T03:03:19.985-05:00@Jean Ann: Someone who is a criminal for the socie...@Jean Ann: Someone who is a criminal for the society, probably isn't for some! <br />thanks for the encouragement :)yaminihttp://expressmyway.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86512963314309537332010-01-14T03:01:42.031-05:002010-01-14T03:01:42.031-05:00@laurel: True, it was dark. But i am glad the inte...@laurel: True, it was dark. But i am glad the interpretations are varied. <br />thanks for the comment!yaminihttp://expressmyway.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-30553617109978090182010-01-13T23:18:29.099-05:002010-01-13T23:18:29.099-05:00Very bleak, and I take it this is the life of a cr...Very bleak, and I take it this is the life of a criminal, like father like son?<br /><br />Nicely done!<br /><br />Jean AnnJean Ann Williamsnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86329887119967189922010-01-13T19:24:40.825-05:002010-01-13T19:24:40.825-05:00This took a turn for the worse! The ending is so b...This took a turn for the worse! The ending is so bleak. How dark did it get? <br /><br />Disturbing, to think of the bright young boy becoming the man in the darkness for seven years.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.com