tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post3903139760499936471..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #13Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51813746655167911502008-07-29T08:59:00.000-04:002008-07-29T08:59:00.000-04:00Jason, thanks for your perceptiveness. I strive t...Jason, thanks for your perceptiveness. I strive to touch readers on many levels. In so many of these cases, the person "not afflicted" is in just as much pain, if not more. I appreciate your taking time to comment. You are always so welcoming and gracious to one who doesn't often get a chance to visit. KayeAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37668624399813948842008-07-29T08:52:00.000-04:002008-07-29T08:52:00.000-04:00Aine, thanks for your comments. I tried to get in...Aine, thanks for your comments. I tried to get inside his head before starting. My poetry is a mix of things that have happened and things imagined. I suppose all writers can say the same. I appreciate your insight. KLGAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17412330353321804412008-07-23T23:36:00.000-04:002008-07-23T23:36:00.000-04:00The ache is so well done...the tension between the...The ache is so well done...the tension between the remembering and the person now there. Trying to soothe someone, and in the process increasing the pain in yourself. Good marks overall. A contender for placing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47378972589918558162008-07-23T14:08:00.000-04:002008-07-23T14:08:00.000-04:00Very creative and interesting story!Mental illness...Very creative and interesting story!<BR/><BR/>Mental illness is such a strange beast. We want so badly to believe that the "real" person is still in there somewhere. (And often they are.) Family and friends suffer terribly.<BR/><BR/>Your words painted the scene beautifully.Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34359857489493205092008-07-21T08:53:00.000-04:002008-07-21T08:53:00.000-04:00Linda, thanks for your comments. I love when read...Linda, thanks for your comments. I love when readers add their favorite lines. Glad you liked the poem.<BR/><BR/>Laughingwolf, no...thank YOU for reading my entry and leaving a comment. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9645489758188449002008-07-19T20:03:00.000-04:002008-07-19T20:03:00.000-04:00exceptional write, thank you....exceptional write, thank you....laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11227292345888672752008-07-19T10:23:00.000-04:002008-07-19T10:23:00.000-04:00Beautiful poem. Very unique entry. My favorite lin...Beautiful poem. Very unique entry. My favorite lines were "Where in the hell is your hair" and "They taste like 1963." Great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37178267773194346032008-07-17T17:39:00.000-04:002008-07-17T17:39:00.000-04:00Dottie, I appreciate your stopping by and commenti...Dottie, I appreciate your stopping by and commenting. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29534537766166350752008-07-17T12:03:00.000-04:002008-07-17T12:03:00.000-04:00I love the poetry and the understanding you bring ...I love the poetry and the understanding you bring to the protagonist. I really enjoyed this piece.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13749913185130672912008-07-16T09:16:00.000-04:002008-07-16T09:16:00.000-04:00Scott...thanks for your thoughts on my entry - app...Scott...thanks for your thoughts on my entry - appreciated.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-625627019836102362008-07-16T00:10:00.000-04:002008-07-16T00:10:00.000-04:00What a beautiful mix of poetry and story telling. ...What a beautiful mix of poetry and story telling. So sad and pretty.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27108396370398095252008-07-15T09:30:00.000-04:002008-07-15T09:30:00.000-04:00Havasusharon - I appreciate your comments. I hadn...Havasusharon - I appreciate your comments. I hadn't realized until you mentioned it, that there was a prevalence of senses throughout. <BR/><BR/>Sheri - your comments are most appreciated. Thanks for your very astute and sensitive observations. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61231910065432946122008-07-15T00:40:00.000-04:002008-07-15T00:40:00.000-04:00Beautiful! Just beautiful and so poignant. I loved...Beautiful! Just beautiful and so poignant. I loved how you vacillated between the thoughts in his head and the things he actually said out loud. I just loved how artfully you did that - we all do this - think one thing, but say another. Very well written and heartbreaking at the same time. It's so hard losing a loved one to dementia or Alzheimer. It's like you already lost them and are left with an empty shell.<BR/><BR/>Oh and I agree with Janey - those were my same absolute favorite lines.Sheri Perl-Oshinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08025716805041579831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39041296235778077312008-07-14T11:20:00.000-04:002008-07-14T11:20:00.000-04:00Excellent use of the senses. I see a lot of 'I sh...Excellent use of the senses. I see a lot of 'I should have ...' in this piece. A sad well written look at lossAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52961485663573924772008-07-14T09:25:00.000-04:002008-07-14T09:25:00.000-04:0024crayons and Wannabe Writer - thanks for taking t...24crayons and Wannabe Writer - thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my entry. It is a sad poem...but hopefully a life affirming one too. Live life deep and wide - with fervor! That is how I see my characters in their past.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53231154077148133982008-07-14T07:54:00.000-04:002008-07-14T07:54:00.000-04:00Sad poem. Well done. -RitaSad poem. Well done. -RitaMy crazy lifehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05631522969768435267noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16821731887712771842008-07-13T19:17:00.000-04:002008-07-13T19:17:00.000-04:00This was so sweet and sad too.This was so sweet and sad too.24crayonshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07171296576635888502noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28427700826049851052008-07-13T17:36:00.000-04:002008-07-13T17:36:00.000-04:00Chris, Yes, you got it. Glad you liked it. Thanks ...Chris, Yes, you got it. Glad you liked it. Thanks for the kind words. Bittersweet is what I felt when composing it - both happy times and sad times here.<BR/><BR/>Sarah, your interpretation is what I had hoped readers would discern. Thank you for taking time to comment.<BR/><BR/>Sameera, yes, a person lost in their own little world is always hard for the other. Melancholy to its fullest extent. Thanks for commenting.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60538613349903621232008-07-13T16:49:00.000-04:002008-07-13T16:49:00.000-04:00Beautiful and melancholic at the same time!Beautiful and melancholic at the same time!Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34313078284863526362008-07-12T21:56:00.000-04:002008-07-12T21:56:00.000-04:00The writing here is magical. I love the fact that ...The writing here is magical. <BR/><BR/>I love the fact that you gave us his questioning interior thoughts, and the buoyant exterior monologue. His love for her--and his nostalgia and regret--are achingly beautiful. If anyone could coax a smile, he could.<BR/><BR/>Really loved it.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55095340688559108652008-07-12T19:15:00.000-04:002008-07-12T19:15:00.000-04:00This is beautiful and touching. I 'got' it immedia...This is beautiful and touching. I 'got' it immediately. You did a wonderful job of pulling us into their world. Bittersweet.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63268521438341126042008-07-12T17:04:00.000-04:002008-07-12T17:04:00.000-04:00Janey, Bernard, and Wrath...my comments were suppo...Janey, Bernard, and Wrath...my comments were supposed to show my name. sorry KLGAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8102364201951048742008-07-12T17:02:00.000-04:002008-07-12T17:02:00.000-04:00September, I appreciate your comment.September, I appreciate your comment.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28201695911973916352008-07-12T16:58:00.000-04:002008-07-12T16:58:00.000-04:00Janey, having a family member suffer from alzheime...Janey, having a family member suffer from alzheimer's must be devastating. Thanks for your nice comments on my writing.<BR/><BR/>BernardL., Poetic way of putting it. Thank you.<BR/><BR/>Wrath999 - actually it is the male thinking and then speaking. The female is the one who is in the mental ward. Glad you liked my work, and thanks for taking time to comment.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-62939903738187684232008-07-12T16:47:00.000-04:002008-07-12T16:47:00.000-04:00I, too, was captured by those ending lines and hav...I, too, was captured by those ending lines and have to agree with Janeyv.<BR/>Well done.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.com