tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post4522268023848427805..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #68Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19744914675357487082008-03-06T16:45:00.000-05:002008-03-06T16:45:00.000-05:00Nicely written! I like how you used the two poems...Nicely written! I like how you used the two poems to describe the evolution of the affair.<BR/><BR/>I would love to hear her perspective (as would he, I'm sure). And, as others have commented, that last line is the perfect conclusion!Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48576444814065948542008-03-04T16:52:00.000-05:002008-03-04T16:52:00.000-05:00Wow. This reminds me of the old truth that loving...Wow. This reminds me of the old truth that loving someone doesn't mean he/she is good for you. Interesting take on this depthless subject. Well done. High marks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7593624796572571682008-02-29T21:43:00.000-05:002008-02-29T21:43:00.000-05:00Szelosfa--When I read of the contest in your blog,...Szelosfa--When I read of the contest in your blog, I imagined the tree you use as an avatar, and thought of the Eildon Tree. But the bare tree on the hillside made me think of the Keats poem. So I tried to combine them. I had a girlfriend in high school who thought she was a femme fatale, and maybe she was. I'm thankful to have married a woman who, though beautiful, never exploited her beauty. Thank you for letting me know about this contest. <BR/><BR/>Dottie, Thank you for your words of support. I thought your entry was excellent. This is a wonderful community of writers.steve on the slow trainhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18257811143869341854noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85338184008457270362008-02-29T14:59:00.000-05:002008-02-29T14:59:00.000-05:00Steve, your character is very self-aware and able ...Steve, your character is very self-aware and able to see her in such a clear and mature way. Alot came through and I enjoyed your story.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49878025059762820332008-02-29T10:50:00.000-05:002008-02-29T10:50:00.000-05:00I like how the two poems illustrated the two diffe...I like how the two poems illustrated the two different stages of a love. The last line is superb, Steve.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12233616914355537542008-02-28T20:57:00.000-05:002008-02-28T20:57:00.000-05:00Thank you all. This is a very supportive communit...Thank you all. This is a very supportive community. I have yet to read all the entries, but I have yet to read one that's badly written or uninteresting.steve on the slow trainhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18257811143869341854noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68314842623483494042008-02-28T09:12:00.000-05:002008-02-28T09:12:00.000-05:00I can't help it, ditto to Sarah as I'd be rephrasi...I can't help it, ditto to Sarah as I'd be rephrasing everything she wrote.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90467336940632149902008-02-28T08:40:00.000-05:002008-02-28T08:40:00.000-05:00This is a remarkable piece of writing, incorporati...This is a remarkable piece of writing, incorporating as it does poetry, fantasy and reality. It is beautifully and poignantly handled and creates for a very powerful and graceful piece of writing. Really well done.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55345282722240670072008-02-27T23:52:00.000-05:002008-02-27T23:52:00.000-05:00you really covered a lot of ground here,, the addi...you really covered a lot of ground here,, the additions of the poem and the fantasy really made it special....paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24016638407553915372008-02-27T22:36:00.000-05:002008-02-27T22:36:00.000-05:00A broken relationship brought out with spirit and ...A broken relationship brought out with spirit and grace. Wonderful stuff!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40905749188300869532008-02-27T21:44:00.000-05:002008-02-27T21:44:00.000-05:00I loved the Keats inspiration here! "I served my Q...I <I>loved</I> the Keats inspiration here! "I served my Queen for less than two." is such a great line, as is your last.<BR/><BR/>This was a beautiful elegy for a doomed relationship. Great work!!Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12574906401552007922008-02-27T20:50:00.000-05:002008-02-27T20:50:00.000-05:00Lovely incorporation of poetry. Fabulous last lin...Lovely incorporation of poetry. Fabulous last line.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com