tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post4756746388242238148..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #14Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20225853361611471442008-03-04T13:26:00.000-05:002008-03-04T13:26:00.000-05:00Surprising twist! My favorite line is “Charlotte,...Surprising twist! My favorite line is “Charlotte, looky there…” The down-to-earth (ha!) character and humor in his experience of existence is refreshing. It is comforting to think of deceased loved ones in this manner.Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63278410990730322202008-03-04T09:15:00.000-05:002008-03-04T09:15:00.000-05:00The POV of the grave! I've been fascinated by the...The POV of the grave! I've been fascinated by the same thing. I have a tendency to personify the dead, if that makes any sense. High marks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5166207445678701702008-03-02T06:26:00.000-05:002008-03-02T06:26:00.000-05:00this was really good. :) one of my favs.this was really good. :) one of my favs.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17353823072805304712noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86198422863281260732008-03-01T11:43:00.000-05:002008-03-01T11:43:00.000-05:00Great twist, and what a compelling voice!Great twist, and what a compelling voice!Linda Petershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06773494842656021840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74971805571172568502008-02-29T15:29:00.000-05:002008-02-29T15:29:00.000-05:00Several of the entries hint at a body in the roots...Several of the entries hint at a body in the roots of the tree, but your character actually personifies the metaphor. Great story!Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5612818731060611462008-02-29T03:04:00.000-05:002008-02-29T03:04:00.000-05:00I love the original take on this, talking from bey...I love the original take on this, talking from beyond life yet still so very much alive. Lovely gentle humour.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44957251230356296672008-02-28T21:54:00.000-05:002008-02-28T21:54:00.000-05:00I had to read it a couple of times to get the twis...I had to read it a couple of times to get the twist everyone was talking about, but that was partly because I was so focused on thoughts of my own Nana that this invoked. Very very clever!1Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73844855810337984932008-02-26T21:48:00.000-05:002008-02-26T21:48:00.000-05:00The last line clinched a well-packaged piece. I l...The last line clinched a well-packaged piece. I like the feel of it. Clever!Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47857172077893157972008-02-25T12:33:00.000-05:002008-02-25T12:33:00.000-05:00Fantastic variation on the theme! At first I thoug...Fantastic variation on the theme! At first I thought he was just a lonely old grandpa...and now I know why... I enjoyed reading this piece. Nicely done.bluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19161272921097500882008-02-25T07:32:00.000-05:002008-02-25T07:32:00.000-05:00Oh, clever!Like the rueful yet boyant tone.Oh, clever!<BR/>Like the rueful yet boyant tone.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33380473790370747562008-02-24T20:26:00.000-05:002008-02-24T20:26:00.000-05:00The contentment in his voice is a startling contra...The contentment in his voice is a startling contrast to the situation revealed at the end. Nicely executed twist ending. And I love his conclusion that she resents being placed there. It's touching, really.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74455971154317851212008-02-24T14:47:00.000-05:002008-02-24T14:47:00.000-05:00I had to read it more than once, but I like the st...I had to read it more than once, but I like the style and the unexpected backstory.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86420557135175233642008-02-23T20:05:00.000-05:002008-02-23T20:05:00.000-05:00Wow, what a twist in this one. I loved the convers...Wow, what a twist in this one. I loved the conversational, matter-of-fact voice for such an unusual point of view. Wonderful details, too.<BR/><BR/>The ending was just great. Excellent!Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81977355633196182162008-02-23T17:01:00.000-05:002008-02-23T17:01:00.000-05:00Imaginative look, almost like 'Our Town' in the st...Imaginative look, almost like 'Our Town' in the stark aspect of viewing life.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64689610838353037462008-02-23T13:55:00.000-05:002008-02-23T13:55:00.000-05:00I am in awe of this one. I really liked it!I am in awe of this one. I really liked it!24crayonshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07171296576635888502noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39484364714950046102008-02-23T09:41:00.000-05:002008-02-23T09:41:00.000-05:00Nice change in perspective here.Nice change in perspective here.pattinase (abbott)https://www.blogger.com/profile/02916037185235335846noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42982645603871354092008-02-22T15:17:00.000-05:002008-02-22T15:17:00.000-05:00Very nice!Very nice!Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22799122970575865802008-02-22T11:18:00.000-05:002008-02-22T11:18:00.000-05:00Whoa. That was a twist! Good job!Whoa. That was a twist! Good job!karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04203594257221430139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39134891935539221862008-02-22T09:49:00.000-05:002008-02-22T09:49:00.000-05:00cool.I came over to link this up to my blog, and w...cool.<BR/><BR/>I came over to link this up to my blog, and was surprised by all these pleasant comments. And, if you're a writer, you must know how that feels! Thanks.Missyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16638784910676212171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12790874702816133812008-02-22T08:53:00.000-05:002008-02-22T08:53:00.000-05:00The narrator for this piece has a strong voice, an...The narrator for this piece has a strong voice, and I enjoyed the transposition below ground at the end! Nicely done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72073282129244710032008-02-22T08:13:00.000-05:002008-02-22T08:13:00.000-05:00oh that was clever.. i do so enjoy a twist!!oh that was clever.. i do so enjoy a twist!!paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83699085864567247612008-02-22T08:05:00.000-05:002008-02-22T08:05:00.000-05:00Loved the angle on this one, quirky and well writt...Loved the angle on this one, quirky and well written.Gonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17979621132151870323noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49050649200766464002008-02-22T03:06:00.000-05:002008-02-22T03:06:00.000-05:00Yes this asks to be read a couple of times, but it...Yes this asks to be read a couple of times, but it is a wonderful piece of writing and twist on the photo. Another strong contender.DBA Lehanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12902739256082564278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75463866792778111082008-02-22T00:13:00.000-05:002008-02-22T00:13:00.000-05:00I read this twice before I realized you were plant...I read this twice before I realized you were planted under the tree ... and the silence of your wife ... gosh, your complacency with it all. I just adored this one. Once I got it, I felt hit over the head by it. Well done!Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63696718070430380512008-02-21T23:54:00.000-05:002008-02-21T23:54:00.000-05:00Interesting! I read this a few times, and get some...Interesting! I read this a few times, and get something new each time!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.com