tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post4948205641632177908..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #46Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73740243001676970692009-01-21T19:35:00.000-05:002009-01-21T19:35:00.000-05:00Thank you very much for the comments. I enjoyed ta...Thank you very much for the comments. I enjoyed taking part in this contest and look forward to more challenges. <BR/><BR/>Jenn FarisAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67551452603006890092009-01-20T21:52:00.000-05:002009-01-20T21:52:00.000-05:00Great job with pacing, storytelling, and voice!Tha...Great job with pacing, storytelling, and voice!<BR/><BR/>Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81345298187038225802009-01-18T14:41:00.000-05:002009-01-18T14:41:00.000-05:00I never realized that my mother had a fear of ridi...I never realized that my mother had a fear of riding the escalator until I once found my self at the top of the ride and turned around to see my mom still standing at the bottom. She took the stairs instead. You've perfectly described the internal monologue I imagine any phobic might have when attempting to conquer his or her fear. Well done!<BR/><BR/>Janabluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11745517018600670322009-01-18T11:24:00.000-05:002009-01-18T11:24:00.000-05:00The innocence of the child - a mind that is unadul...The innocence of the child - a mind that is unadulterated - is portrayed beautifully....once he conquers those fears then he will discern good and bad and then maybe start neglecting things...<BR/><BR/>well writtenceedyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17767787593275846653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3302716536966828042009-01-16T15:16:00.000-05:002009-01-16T15:16:00.000-05:00I liked this. It reminded me of being a child and...I liked this. It reminded me of being a child and feeling all of that fear of the unknown. It was heartbreaking to imagine no one noticing the boy and his fear. You just want to go hug him, ya know, let him know it'll all be ok!Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61439454355183016222009-01-12T15:48:00.000-05:002009-01-12T15:48:00.000-05:00Will he ever get there, I wonder!Will he ever get there, I wonder!Rachel Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13048590167153841615noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46223580208243154642009-01-11T19:52:00.000-05:002009-01-11T19:52:00.000-05:00a feel good story - well told!a feel good story - well told!K.Lawson Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11204234196229710524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35260375303840849032009-01-11T18:07:00.000-05:002009-01-11T18:07:00.000-05:00Oh that was really lovely! well done!Oh that was really lovely! well done!Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74408813107792283882009-01-11T17:41:00.000-05:002009-01-11T17:41:00.000-05:00I cheered for him as I read - good work, and I lov...I cheered for him as I read - good work, and I loved the ending.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16272257857282777582009-01-11T15:49:00.000-05:002009-01-11T15:49:00.000-05:00just proves the point, a child needs a steady, pre...just proves the point, a child needs a steady, preferably parental, hand to best navigate the unknown... well done :)laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14988522095234659312009-01-11T15:48:00.000-05:002009-01-11T15:48:00.000-05:00Heartfelt, poignant piece, Jenn. If only we could ...Heartfelt, poignant piece, Jenn. If only we could be everything we imagine ourselves to be. <BR/><BR/>Strong descriptions of his fear and longing. I find myself wanting to take his hand, but maybe he needs to face it on his own.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44669728816143734562009-01-11T13:43:00.000-05:002009-01-11T13:43:00.000-05:00Perhaps my mind is in a dark place. You did a gre...Perhaps my mind is in a dark place. You did a great job with the POV. I knew early on it was a child. I was looking for him to get his hand chewed in the escalator. Did you know that escalator's cause more hand injuries than feet injuries? Anyway--where was I?--oh yeah, you did a good job showing us his desires, his perspective.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40705282503258324522009-01-11T12:21:00.000-05:002009-01-11T12:21:00.000-05:00I loved the way you showed us his conflict; the de...I loved the way you showed us his conflict; the desire to be a part of something better, to take his place with the others and the fear of the unknown.<BR/><I>His eyes drift shut and he thinks of moving up, of going up to where he needs to be and he smiles a pure smile, the warmth of the sun on his upturned face and he knows he's joined them</I><BR/>This is such an uplifting statement. I love the image of the child smiling a pure smile.<BR/><BR/>I think this was a lovely reflective piece.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2098919256368405422009-01-11T12:13:00.000-05:002009-01-11T12:13:00.000-05:00Kind of eerie!Well narrated,good one :)Kind of eerie!Well narrated,good one :)Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3259383230520859922009-01-11T12:00:00.000-05:002009-01-11T12:00:00.000-05:00Made me feel like i am ascending theer too.. felt ...Made me feel like i am ascending theer too.. felt like a part of this story.. Great work here done! Loved it :)Lenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787400183444796423noreply@blogger.com