tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post536709952225887486..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #6Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74761188603646261612008-07-23T23:26:00.000-04:002008-07-23T23:26:00.000-04:00Chilling! Excellent use of the motorcycle to say ...Chilling! Excellent use of the motorcycle to say what he doesn't want to say. Very well done. High marks.<BR/><BR/>Congratulations on the Honorable Mention!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15349907217939862872008-07-23T13:17:00.000-04:002008-07-23T13:17:00.000-04:00I loved how each observation and fact became succe...I loved how each observation and fact became successively more complicated. And yet each has a common thread: <I>This is all there was.</I><BR/><BR/>Such a great description of pure passion.<BR/><BR/>Congrats on the honorable mention-- very well deserved!Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58333563445305247582008-07-21T15:40:00.000-04:002008-07-21T15:40:00.000-04:00Dark and mysterious, and keeps you questioning. Th...Dark and mysterious, and keeps you questioning. This is very well done. It comes close to out-of-control intensity, but you reign us in just in time.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68103978601709583502008-07-17T08:55:00.000-04:002008-07-17T08:55:00.000-04:00Nicely done. Great use of the word count, and the...Nicely done. Great use of the word count, and the back story is immense.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8590627505244221052008-07-16T19:02:00.000-04:002008-07-16T19:02:00.000-04:00good'un, scott!good'un, scott!laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11734787532226957472008-07-16T16:16:00.000-04:002008-07-16T16:16:00.000-04:00I love, love, love this!I love, love, love this!ourladybethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08003089621986303208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3815654443504658602008-07-16T00:34:00.000-04:002008-07-16T00:34:00.000-04:00Second person narratives aren't easy to write, yet...Second person narratives aren't easy to write, yet you pulled it off. Good job.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12289467710294729462008-07-13T21:56:00.000-04:002008-07-13T21:56:00.000-04:00Methinks I wrote a Roschach (sp?) tests. I am amaz...Methinks I wrote a Roschach (sp?) tests. I am amazed to see all of the various interpretations of this.<BR/><BR/>Thanks for the comments. Especially the really nice ones...Scott from Oregonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01331284708780612453noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58604980284169265562008-07-13T17:44:00.000-04:002008-07-13T17:44:00.000-04:00That's how life is.What we rely on the most just s...That's how life is.What we rely on the most just shakes us up at times.<BR/><BR/>Well written!Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61360672156656919712008-07-12T17:50:00.000-04:002008-07-12T17:50:00.000-04:00Interesting.Goes to show - In the end, even a mach...Interesting.<BR/>Goes to show - In the end, even a machine can let you down.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37007320132675833442008-07-12T08:40:00.000-04:002008-07-12T08:40:00.000-04:00Fresh and creative.I enjoyed the read.Fresh and creative.<BR/>I enjoyed the read.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37091275724188896162008-07-11T22:16:00.000-04:002008-07-11T22:16:00.000-04:00Wow, this my favorite story so far. I had to read ...Wow, this my favorite story so far. I had to read it several times to completely understand it. There is quite a lot that it just barely says. Brilliant! And written in a very powerful tone.Melanie Odhnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15983449037092784887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32587027232539833692008-07-11T17:38:00.000-04:002008-07-11T17:38:00.000-04:00I seriously loved this.I seriously loved this.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23045304931112587022008-07-11T16:19:00.000-04:002008-07-11T16:19:00.000-04:00I too thought the repetition was a nice touch. The...I too thought the repetition was a nice touch. There were some excellent lines here. I particularly liked <BR/><I>The guilt all came from where you’d been.</I><BR/>So much truth.<BR/><BR/>Well done!JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23119437413556556212008-07-11T16:02:00.000-04:002008-07-11T16:02:00.000-04:00brilliantly done in the word limit! had fun readin...brilliantly done in the word limit! had fun reading :)<BR/><BR/>Keep rockin!<BR/><BR/>NPallavhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09597178864833810868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75136660724697601022008-07-11T12:36:00.000-04:002008-07-11T12:36:00.000-04:00Uh oh! :)Uh oh! :)BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59006076678653518712008-07-11T11:19:00.000-04:002008-07-11T11:19:00.000-04:00'leaves you no mind with which to pick up the piec...'leaves you no mind with which to pick up the pieces.' Great line here. Very intense visual. I enjoyed itwrath999https://www.blogger.com/profile/10964105112015979524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80315071003250596652008-07-11T10:53:00.000-04:002008-07-11T10:53:00.000-04:00I like the tightrope you walked here, between teas...I like the tightrope you walked here, between teasing us with a mystery, and not telling too much. I wondered whether he was talking about a real woman or just the bike. Great ambiguity.<BR/><BR/>The repetitive <I>This was all there was.</I> added a nice, stark touch. Great writing all around!Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80860149050836153622008-07-11T06:50:00.000-04:002008-07-11T06:50:00.000-04:00Clever. Well done.Clever. Well done.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66683722950022103402008-07-11T02:34:00.000-04:002008-07-11T02:34:00.000-04:00I can tell. This is a man who has ridden flat out...I can tell. This is a man who has ridden flat out on a bike and wondered what the next curve will bring--exhiliration, or extinction.<BR/>Been there myself.<BR/><BR/>Loved it.Charles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.com