tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post5824967017868972734..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #188Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger36125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-91432315925612953082010-01-25T11:35:02.714-05:002010-01-25T11:35:02.714-05:00Since I have no other way of getting a hold of you...Since I have no other way of getting a hold of you JR, I'm here to tell you that I miss you and your blog. Sigh...catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49107518530479917582010-01-20T10:50:54.806-05:002010-01-20T10:50:54.806-05:00that was awesome !!! didn't see 'that'...that was awesome !!! didn't see 'that' end comingAntriksh Satyarthihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00773435839422574840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73740567775521685302010-01-19T17:00:32.342-05:002010-01-19T17:00:32.342-05:00Well, this is refreshing after reading all day. N...Well, this is refreshing after reading all day. Nothing like waiting until the last minute. I'm so used to seeing your entries in the first few, here you are all the way toward the 200 mark. Laughed outloud at the end. Excellent as usual JR. The others have spoken what I would have said, so no need to parrot. It was electrifying.catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66869069833169444772010-01-18T18:04:56.890-05:002010-01-18T18:04:56.890-05:00*Gentle, neighborly creatures* you say?
Ha!
Shar...*Gentle, neighborly creatures* you say?<br /><br />Ha!<br /><br />Sharply written, James! I'm astounded you could create a portrait of a complex character in so few words.<br /><br />The crows in the birdbath are (to me) demostrative of what Lloyd would like to do to the 'overpaid Mexicans' (that last being an interpretation of the character's opinion, not my own.)<br /><br />You create action, dialogue, and a window into this man's mind in surprisingly short time. Really sharply written.<br /><br />Love the title. Great contrast.<br /><br />Best of luck in the contest!<br /><br />~ Corra McFeydonAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23144539881062960072010-01-18T12:37:49.643-05:002010-01-18T12:37:49.643-05:00Great characters and very realistic scene.Great characters and very realistic scene.TLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01613912638668399684noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67959082310579031202010-01-18T12:07:10.905-05:002010-01-18T12:07:10.905-05:00Great dialogue. And a twisted little ending. Nice ...Great dialogue. And a twisted little ending. Nice work.Rabid Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13307255127156087170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49725069772641350412010-01-17T22:04:48.158-05:002010-01-17T22:04:48.158-05:00Once again, thank you for being polite. Like most ...Once again, thank you for being polite. Like most of you, I've read every single entry. Now I'm making my picks. Let's see: I've got two historical flashes, one science fiction, three noir, a yet to be categorized story with a disco ball in it, a comedy, a religious tale, and one plain old husband and wife getting along just fine story. <br /><br />I'm going to give it a rest, look over my list tomorrow, then submit.<br /><br />Have a Happy MLK Day!<br /><br />P.S Does it start with Vii, Vir, or Va ... ??? Nix that last one cause it ain't something you'd say in mixed company.JRnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83630975858272227542010-01-17T17:21:28.198-05:002010-01-17T17:21:28.198-05:00Okay, okay, okay, make fun of the blonde....*raspb...Okay, okay, okay, make fun of the blonde....*raspberries* at all of you!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45706419000388443282010-01-17T16:52:22.586-05:002010-01-17T16:52:22.586-05:00Great, very funny writing. Changing the wife'...Great, very funny writing. Changing the wife's name to 'Viigina' might help, though :PKurt Hendrickshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16183333362118745153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74682266538763647682010-01-17T15:40:15.020-05:002010-01-17T15:40:15.020-05:00I'm trying to read these in order, but I'm...I'm trying to read these in order, but I'm popping out once in a while for names I recognize. I remember yours from the last contest! And once again, you don't disappoint. LOL @ UnPC! A strong entry. Very nicely rendered.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17633512406104037952010-01-17T15:01:35.365-05:002010-01-17T15:01:35.365-05:00A nice piece of writing.A nice piece of writing.David Barberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05006533626998905560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55740125378619169022010-01-17T13:20:38.462-05:002010-01-17T13:20:38.462-05:00That is just downright mean! And so unfortunate th...That is just downright mean! And so unfortunate that someone has probably really done that! ;) Run woman, run! ;)Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74064514793372202942010-01-17T12:54:10.048-05:002010-01-17T12:54:10.048-05:00What can I say other than that last line was marve...What can I say other than that last line was marvelous. Great piece, and I do like writing where something stays in my head afterwardsBlodeueddhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03435479623560871881noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81010282192959287822010-01-17T12:49:05.230-05:002010-01-17T12:49:05.230-05:00A juicer - electrifying!A juicer - electrifying!Michael Solenderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01120045114297450520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3325706167809051932010-01-16T22:25:49.018-05:002010-01-16T22:25:49.018-05:00I can just picture this old guy! With only a littl...I can just picture this old guy! With only a little background and a bit of dialogue, you've created a memorable character.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73768956049809427862010-01-16T18:46:48.339-05:002010-01-16T18:46:48.339-05:00Aerin - your grandma's name was Viigina - Seri...Aerin - your grandma's name was Viigina - Seriously???JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75421193570974417172010-01-16T18:45:53.680-05:002010-01-16T18:45:53.680-05:00Love the "ignore him" which leads to wat...Love the "ignore him" which leads to watching him switch on the crow-zapper. A man you love to hate. And know at least one living in your own neighborhood.<br /><br />Excellent.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42892252609325933542010-01-16T14:22:10.076-05:002010-01-16T14:22:10.076-05:00I, too, was wondering about your strange appearanc...I, too, was wondering about your strange appearances throughout the contest, but now I understand the need to stay below radar.<br /><br><br><a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my caveat</a><br><br /><b>Something I Would Keep</b><br><br />As ever, that wicked sense of humor. Wouldn't be a CoN contest without you, Sir Tomlinson!! (or is it...Officer?)<br /><br /><b>Something I Might Tweak</b><br><br />I'm quite sure their names are not Allison and Lloyd, but rather, Don and Viigina...my grandparents' names....Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13413427489944444152010-01-16T13:41:37.542-05:002010-01-16T13:41:37.542-05:00JR - I love the way you are always uncompromisingl...JR - I love the way you are always uncompromisingly unPC. You have created another grotesque in Lloyd to loathe and laugh at in equal measure. I love that you never try to dilute his nastiness.<br /><br />All hail the JR!JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77574296073863767542010-01-16T10:49:30.296-05:002010-01-16T10:49:30.296-05:00Although I got confused by all the names without a...Although I got confused by all the names without anchors at the beginning, it all became clear partway through. This is a great picture of a woman mortified by her bigot misogynist cranky old husband, and it just gets worse as it goes. Also a sort of picture of a changing society. Although it's a fun yet horrifying read, it's a lot deeper than it first appears. Terrific work.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55984725020143099272010-01-16T10:15:36.673-05:002010-01-16T10:15:36.673-05:00Hi JR!
Wow, nice take on the prompt. A man as un...Hi JR!<br /><br />Wow, nice take on the prompt. A man as unhappy as Lloyd needs to spread it around. Poor crows (even though I do dislike the oily winged creatures!)<br /><br />LOLOL Love your Bio, isn't how we all serve? 8 hours at a time, the dredge of the mind numbing prison?<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90706456204892902952010-01-16T10:13:25.566-05:002010-01-16T10:13:25.566-05:00managed to track you down at least james...'fr...managed to track you down at least james...'fry, you bastards' love that line lol..hate crows and this should be standard garden equipment imo...he'd make a killing flogging these devices on ebay ;-)Janiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01307744393832704228noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8019631034968197942010-01-16T06:17:19.948-05:002010-01-16T06:17:19.948-05:00Thanks for the encouraging words everyone. We'...Thanks for the encouraging words everyone. We've certainly got our work cut out for us with so many entries. I'm going to read the entries in batches of ten and make some picks; not an easy task.<br /><br />On a different note: Whitenoise, an email was sent during the holidays. Due to the record number of parolees in Michigan (not to mention concealed weapons permits), I've decided to make myself less known. With modern technology, GPS systems and whatnot, I certainly don't want any ex-felons at my doorstep. I'll continue writing and visiting blogs though.<br /><br />Back to the entries, time is running out. Peace. --JRAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61197326868350989142010-01-16T02:35:43.111-05:002010-01-16T02:35:43.111-05:00Cousin Jim!
Love the use of mundane detail to set ...Cousin Jim!<br />Love the use of mundane detail to set the stage for your crackpot character terrifyingly plausible actions...It's all about the by-laws. Most enjoyable.Katherine Tomlinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696623795926663895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78801495814350281612010-01-15T15:37:37.533-05:002010-01-15T15:37:37.533-05:00I was "shocked" too! Trust me, I wasn...I was "shocked" too! Trust me, I wasn't laughing!Kartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.com