tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post5868258371655273257..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #11Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger32125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53980170256859056122011-07-28T21:07:05.104-04:002011-07-28T21:07:05.104-04:00The potent weight of guilt. And the reluctance to...The potent weight of guilt. And the reluctance to grasp salvation. We do punish ourselves viciously. Well done!<br /><br />Congrats on Forties Club!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8210252375821043182011-07-23T23:33:26.511-04:002011-07-23T23:33:26.511-04:00Thanks for reading my entry, Linda, Aidan, Wendy, ...Thanks for reading my entry, Linda, Aidan, Wendy, and JaneyV.Michelle H.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10117937124348728578noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78305266427658558502011-07-23T03:49:55.571-04:002011-07-23T03:49:55.571-04:00Michelle - this is very powerful. The guilt and i...Michelle - this is very powerful. The guilt and inner conflict is palpable. The note of hope at the end is a nice touch, but he has to be willing to leave his security blanket of self-loathing first. That's a big step.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1223707748913741082011-07-22T22:29:57.062-04:002011-07-22T22:29:57.062-04:00You did great capturing the struggle. Moving story...You did great capturing the struggle. Moving story.Wendyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03115002505324651653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76671910580485092582011-07-22T21:47:38.593-04:002011-07-22T21:47:38.593-04:00You've done a nice job capturing his inner con...You've done a nice job capturing his inner conflict and the guilt that riddles him.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14170148559429001125noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54527240484801355182011-07-22T15:23:48.276-04:002011-07-22T15:23:48.276-04:00Survival of the fittest, Mr. Darwin? Survival som...Survival of the fittest, Mr. Darwin? Survival sometimes is punishment enough, but we humans seldom see it that way as you so cleverly convey.Linda Ryan-Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15164148666810818891noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5746804942010824432011-07-22T13:33:58.258-04:002011-07-22T13:33:58.258-04:00Thank you for the kind words, Stephen.Thank you for the kind words, Stephen.Michelle H.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10117937124348728578noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80009256929594932362011-07-21T04:05:35.725-04:002011-07-21T04:05:35.725-04:00The revelation at the end is powerful and moving. ...The revelation at the end is powerful and moving. Great job.Stephen Parrishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16883165490847664389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18218842031141091832011-07-20T18:33:14.180-04:002011-07-20T18:33:14.180-04:00Thanks for your comments, yamini, Chris and C Sonb...Thanks for your comments, yamini, Chris and C Sonberg!Michelle H.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10117937124348728578noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14782287349662463192011-07-20T16:03:40.881-04:002011-07-20T16:03:40.881-04:00This is powerful. The tragedy of loss, the swirlin...This is powerful. The tragedy of loss, the swirling depth of shame. <br />Very well done in so few wordsC. Sonberg Larsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09925003570881003478noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74110400933380487382011-07-20T13:39:44.935-04:002011-07-20T13:39:44.935-04:00You've given his regret enough weight that it ...You've given his regret enough weight that it just may crush him. The bittersweet note of redemption at the end makes this very powerful.Chris Alliniottehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04094925215735680849noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24974856844383742132011-07-20T00:42:57.656-04:002011-07-20T00:42:57.656-04:00Very well written.
This is one of my favorites!Very well written. <br />This is one of my favorites!yaminihttp://expressmyway.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61354497439757751672011-07-19T22:23:52.729-04:002011-07-19T22:23:52.729-04:00Thank you for commenting Dottie, wrath999, Old Kit...Thank you for commenting Dottie, wrath999, Old Kitty, Michael and Richard!<br /><br />I agree, the ending could use a bit more something to it. I had the most trouble there and think that I should have sat on the story a little longer before submitting. Something better may have popped into the old noggin.Michelle H.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10117937124348728578noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74227637133941614362011-07-19T22:07:38.062-04:002011-07-19T22:07:38.062-04:00I think this is a powerful entry, Michelle, and yo...I think this is a powerful entry, Michelle, and you've created the story for an entire life in 250 words. But I'd change the ending... I don't know how the counselor could offer such a hopeful prognosis. <br /><br />I feel it's the place for "the longest journey begins with a single step" sort of phrase. But well done!Richard Levangiehttp://richardlevangie.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43115734909795192142011-07-19T20:38:15.812-04:002011-07-19T20:38:15.812-04:00He's living, one day at a time, fighting his d...He's living, one day at a time, fighting his disease that led to his soul's destruction, which feeds his disease. It's a bit overwhelming, but so well done, totally convincing and ultimately rewarding.Michael Morsehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07451637745981389920noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45921485098531248652011-07-18T18:54:07.860-04:002011-07-18T18:54:07.860-04:00Powerful for being so understated! It's very s...Powerful for being so understated! It's very sad but I'm glad there is closure for him at the end. Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39736258028415374872011-07-18T14:10:44.809-04:002011-07-18T14:10:44.809-04:00Great job!Great job!wrath999https://www.blogger.com/profile/10964105112015979524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40004513234602487772011-07-18T10:05:47.256-04:002011-07-18T10:05:47.256-04:00Very sad, but nicely done...
Dottie :)Very sad, but nicely done...<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69109584005517213502011-07-17T21:17:18.782-04:002011-07-17T21:17:18.782-04:00Fairy Hedgehog, Aniket and Jana, thank you for you...Fairy Hedgehog, Aniket and Jana, thank you for your comments! Who knows if a person can come back from it? The human will is a strange and powerful thing.Michelle H.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10117937124348728578noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33718570159994542412011-07-17T15:49:17.309-04:002011-07-17T15:49:17.309-04:00Addiction is a beast. Creative take on the prompt!...Addiction is a beast. Creative take on the prompt! ~janabluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51524854693815406862011-07-17T06:29:59.261-04:002011-07-17T06:29:59.261-04:00Like everyone said. There's no coming back fro...Like everyone said. There's no coming back from something like that. But kudos to you for getting us all to think that.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42424451889715605162011-07-17T02:35:10.167-04:002011-07-17T02:35:10.167-04:00It's an interesting take on the prompt. I wond...It's an interesting take on the prompt. I wonder if you could ever come back from something like that.fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18304940152670114432011-07-16T23:46:56.432-04:002011-07-16T23:46:56.432-04:00Thank you for your comments, Kunjal, JA and Peter....Thank you for your comments, Kunjal, JA and Peter. The photo just jumped out at me in this way, a sort of desperation, denial and sadness.Michelle H.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10117937124348728578noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3850425411296003562011-07-16T20:51:02.628-04:002011-07-16T20:51:02.628-04:00Devastating. I don't know that I could go on a...Devastating. I don't know that I could go on after that.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81888672871576519422011-07-16T12:44:56.497-04:002011-07-16T12:44:56.497-04:00Very powerful. I don't know if he'll ever ...Very powerful. I don't know if he'll ever be free. How could you?<br /><br />You really brought this to life. Nice job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com