tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post6177012515111152512..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #155Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger30125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12232006031284169682010-01-18T15:40:03.009-05:002010-01-18T15:40:03.009-05:00AHAHAHAHA! Love your title, and love your story! W...AHAHAHAHA! Love your title, and love your story! Way to go!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59347500959712950642010-01-17T20:02:36.693-05:002010-01-17T20:02:36.693-05:00my caveat
Something I Would Keep
The gory first pa...<br><br><a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my caveat</a><br><br /><b>Something I Would Keep</b><br><br />The gory first paragraph set the perfect tone for the creepy rest of the piece. Ugh. And I mean that in a caring, respectful way.<br /><br /><b>Something I Might Tweak</b><br><br />breath came in pants - after the description of the broken leg, I was literally picturing trousers.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77271563697663021452010-01-17T14:45:14.309-05:002010-01-17T14:45:14.309-05:00Perfect twist! Was so thinking he was talking to t...Perfect twist! Was so thinking he was talking to the bird! :)Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63123480465774921362010-01-17T05:51:07.609-05:002010-01-17T05:51:07.609-05:00Ah- Haa...
Fabulous. :-)
I loved this. I so love...Ah- Haa...<br /><br />Fabulous. :-)<br /><br />I loved this. I so loved this. <br />Unique...excellent characterizations ... the man, the bird the tree..all equal players in the game...<br />the flow kept me absolutely hooked...i loved the build up...and in the end the twist had me entangled...<br /><br />im still trying to set myself free...<br /><br />:-))) BRILLIANT...Preetihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00279859240371070699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39638579093585859012010-01-16T23:14:04.675-05:002010-01-16T23:14:04.675-05:00I had to reread the ending, great twist. Great voi...I had to reread the ending, great twist. Great voice! Nice writing.Jean Ann Williamsnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69765098214440716272010-01-16T19:49:00.518-05:002010-01-16T19:49:00.518-05:00Great twist. Had to re-read it to make sure the tr...Great twist. Had to re-read it to make sure the tree didn't start talking, too.<br /><br />Well done.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44612379081091529112010-01-16T15:10:44.080-05:002010-01-16T15:10:44.080-05:00i had a big hoot of laughter at the end.... well ...i had a big hoot of laughter at the end.... well done, john!quin brownehttp://www.quinbrowne-words.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57579464680667400792010-01-16T08:56:45.036-05:002010-01-16T08:56:45.036-05:00A nice solid build up a to a solid twist at the en...A nice solid build up a to a solid twist at the end. Well done.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50636768891019759442010-01-15T20:40:29.651-05:002010-01-15T20:40:29.651-05:00Although I'm sure I know how Sam got injured, ...Although I'm sure I know how Sam got injured, I'm still wondering why he was in the tree in the first place. The sneaker is probably a clue as to his age, which in turn means he decided to climb the tree for fun. As a reader, I really had to work for the meaning. This was a clever piece. --JTAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56359525273395678052010-01-15T18:37:30.430-05:002010-01-15T18:37:30.430-05:00I like this, John. I also like the version I made ...I like this, John. I also like the version I made where I search and replaced "Sam" for "Spam".Barry J. Northernhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12078136594892291058noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3567825277597766742010-01-15T12:30:07.973-05:002010-01-15T12:30:07.973-05:00I totally didn't see that coming! Super twist!...I totally didn't see that coming! Super twist!!Kartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36035639738210902602010-01-14T14:21:09.597-05:002010-01-14T14:21:09.597-05:00I didn't see that coming- fabulously inventive...I didn't see that coming- fabulously inventive.EChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09359075647077590741noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27286240834627293292010-01-14T13:53:52.714-05:002010-01-14T13:53:52.714-05:00Ha!Ha!Deb Smythenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69591641109636813272010-01-13T16:31:05.109-05:002010-01-13T16:31:05.109-05:00The first few lines were intensely vivid.The first few lines were intensely vivid.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52111137564247337742010-01-13T12:52:16.142-05:002010-01-13T12:52:16.142-05:00I love flesh-eating trees. Always brings back fond...I love flesh-eating trees. Always brings back fond memories of watching Day of the Triffids on tv as a boy. Your flair for the unusual certainly shines throughout this piece. Great stuff, John.Angel Zapatahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01166540490117426226noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89084965498890531802010-01-13T11:41:20.335-05:002010-01-13T11:41:20.335-05:00Now that was grimly funny! Wow!Now that was grimly funny! Wow!AngelConradiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09423318903817661244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48969895739870138312010-01-13T09:32:42.374-05:002010-01-13T09:32:42.374-05:00Ok, I'm hearing a scene from a Seinfeld episod...Ok, I'm hearing a scene from a Seinfeld episode here, the Soup Nazi episode. You intended that, didn't you? :-) Funny take, I would never imagine flesh eating trees, but here one is. You must border on insane. I like it a lot.catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6785838003343444192010-01-13T04:47:50.337-05:002010-01-13T04:47:50.337-05:00Didn't see that twist.Didn't see that twist.austerehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16839224877080864005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20988888389126166682010-01-13T04:32:25.081-05:002010-01-13T04:32:25.081-05:00Sharp twist; I like it.Sharp twist; I like it.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33841819427611395562010-01-13T01:15:50.095-05:002010-01-13T01:15:50.095-05:00Where's Tom Bombadil (or Tim Benzedrine) when ...Where's Tom Bombadil (or Tim Benzedrine) when you need him? Good for a laugh, this. You just know Sam will somehow make it out alive.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72248239115899468572010-01-12T21:07:16.147-05:002010-01-12T21:07:16.147-05:00nice one, john! :)nice one, john! :)laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65595801060384225482010-01-12T19:49:08.429-05:002010-01-12T19:49:08.429-05:00Awesome twist! Didn't see THAT coming. Great j...Awesome twist! Didn't see THAT coming. Great job!Meghanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03375626649089998707noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10799570498519755832010-01-12T18:23:10.652-05:002010-01-12T18:23:10.652-05:00Unique tale on bird-eating trees. Well done flash....Unique tale on bird-eating trees. Well done flash.Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13401347482359193392010-01-12T15:57:19.837-05:002010-01-12T15:57:19.837-05:00Nicely done . . . Liked the imagery of the broken ...Nicely done . . . Liked the imagery of the broken leg and circling buzzard. Bravo!Weezelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04441857346642599256noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57343982555321245212010-01-12T14:52:10.282-05:002010-01-12T14:52:10.282-05:00I was picturing hobbit, too ;) Good imagery and an...I was picturing hobbit, too ;) Good imagery and an unexpected ending.TLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01613912638668399684noreply@blogger.com