tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post6641100244375816055..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #136Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger31125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5809761620201435982010-01-18T11:59:19.424-05:002010-01-18T11:59:19.424-05:00The names confused me too, at first. But I reread ...The names confused me too, at first. But I reread then enjoyed it much more. Love your voice in this one!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69809757345382292152010-01-18T11:50:42.372-05:002010-01-18T11:50:42.372-05:00I had a bit of trouble following this in the first...I had a bit of trouble following this in the first passage, but I clued in soon enough. Overall, a very entertaining snippet of this girl's life.Rabid Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13307255127156087170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73262891670757989022010-01-17T21:27:46.169-05:002010-01-17T21:27:46.169-05:00my caveat
Something I Would Keep
The interplay bet...<br><br><a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my caveat</a><br><br /><b>Something I Would Keep</b><br><br />The interplay between the mom and daughter - nicely authentic; the play on colors and the lack thereof - I toyed with using a color-colorless-theme but couldn't pull it off. Well done.<br /><br /><b>Something I Might Tweak</b><br><br />The backs and forths confused me a bit - perhaps it was the names, I'm not sureAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57047952300044173782010-01-17T15:53:25.410-05:002010-01-17T15:53:25.410-05:00What a great read! I can see her trying to help an...What a great read! I can see her trying to help and needing the help herself, her grandmother proving it unintentionally. Wonderfully done!Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48334242594935529072010-01-17T00:44:10.844-05:002010-01-17T00:44:10.844-05:00Agree with Sarah--would be intriguing as a longer ...Agree with Sarah--would be intriguing as a longer piece.<br />Interesting concept, well done.rainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04258822737734173873noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49485600680573338952010-01-17T00:05:09.475-05:002010-01-17T00:05:09.475-05:00This is a gem, a keeper. Love the originality. Ver...This is a gem, a keeper. Love the originality. Very well told story.James R. Tomlinsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61176373537441627382010-01-16T20:21:59.773-05:002010-01-16T20:21:59.773-05:00What an interesting take. Love this idea. I think ...What an interesting take. Love this idea. I think Lexi's 'voice' is a bit off in that sometimes she sounds young and sometimes old. Could be a side effect of her gift.<br /><br />Love that the mentally absent grandmother gives her comfort and a space in which to hear herself.<br /><br />This could be very cool worked into a larger piece.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13428209095208115402010-01-16T14:56:26.930-05:002010-01-16T14:56:26.930-05:00and you thought eloise was eerie? a great creepy ...and you thought eloise was eerie? a great creepy character...and a smashingly great last line.quin brownehttp://www.quinbrowne-words.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72031318047329328602010-01-15T05:58:59.365-05:002010-01-15T05:58:59.365-05:00Very fascinating and disturbing at the same timeVery fascinating and disturbing at the same timeKartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83804641930352876742010-01-14T13:55:25.274-05:002010-01-14T13:55:25.274-05:00Intriguing work that's got a lot going on in s...Intriguing work that's got a lot going on in such few words. The use of colors is quite exquisite. I find Lexi both cute and creepy. The overall work here is well done and quite original!Christian Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03160609304010597116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27014205879393332212010-01-13T21:46:01.766-05:002010-01-13T21:46:01.766-05:00I had to read it twice, but the second time the na...I had to read it twice, but the second time the names made sense to me and left me wondering if you might write more. I love the idea and its creepy yet satisfying all on its own.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41375086123628868262010-01-13T11:15:21.542-05:002010-01-13T11:15:21.542-05:00Interesting concept, I like it a lot. Can't r...Interesting concept, I like it a lot. Can't really add more than what the others have said, but great job here.catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2698244004643802062010-01-12T21:48:21.608-05:002010-01-12T21:48:21.608-05:00I like how you've used the child to explain th...I like how you've used the child to explain things. I did have some trouble sorting through the names, but no much.Thom Gabrukiewiczhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13286670695334830471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88648296429353932142010-01-12T18:21:47.682-05:002010-01-12T18:21:47.682-05:00Speaking in colors. Splendid write.Speaking in colors. Splendid write.Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78128576324112993992010-01-12T17:47:35.833-05:002010-01-12T17:47:35.833-05:00Lexi's statements uncover an old soul, a tired...Lexi's statements uncover an old soul, a tired soul. I love that even though grandma is "gone," she can still provide comfort and exactly what he granddaughter needs. This is marvellous.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1357194614579868782010-01-12T14:35:05.379-05:002010-01-12T14:35:05.379-05:00It was confusing at first but then after rereading...It was confusing at first but then after rereading it I figured it out. Very cleverly done.lenahttp://www.thecolorsmagazine.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54736389558854560812010-01-12T11:34:05.866-05:002010-01-12T11:34:05.866-05:00Very intriguing and well written. Read it several ...Very intriguing and well written. Read it several times to suss who was who. Don't care. Loved it!DILLIGAFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16520650650468676361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63774247977657218182010-01-12T11:26:50.181-05:002010-01-12T11:26:50.181-05:00I love this. I also liked the double meaning about...I love this. I also liked the double meaning about the dementia ward having no color. I can't imagine the cacophony of hearing the thoughts of others.<br /><br />Poor Lexi.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87360710358611797042010-01-12T10:51:26.167-05:002010-01-12T10:51:26.167-05:00I was a little slow on figuring out who was who. L...I was a little slow on figuring out who was who. Loved the aura concept though.Deb Snoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68530664981419048622010-01-12T10:26:22.580-05:002010-01-12T10:26:22.580-05:00nicely done, peg...nicely done, peg...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83556072166004279952010-01-12T07:45:46.445-05:002010-01-12T07:45:46.445-05:00Fascinating tale, very well told. Loved the cleve...Fascinating tale, very well told. Loved the clever build up of anticipation towards the outcome.Tessahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05233122532137654099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54735861005625942352010-01-12T07:17:35.634-05:002010-01-12T07:17:35.634-05:00Loved the edgy, mysterious feel to this piece. Not...Loved the edgy, mysterious feel to this piece. Not sure who Doreen is though. Being a relatively old fashioned name, I thought it might be Grandma as she would call herself, thereby showing Lexi having a 'super awareness' as to who the crow would be calling. <br /><br />I sense this is one of those stories that will keep coming back to me.kashersnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81591735901431670482010-01-12T07:09:35.570-05:002010-01-12T07:09:35.570-05:00Interesting take. Well done.Interesting take. Well done.K. Solesnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21794239445736979502010-01-12T03:55:40.949-05:002010-01-12T03:55:40.949-05:00Intriguing.Intriguing.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14893600170734063112010-01-12T03:40:34.686-05:002010-01-12T03:40:34.686-05:00very clever and very well written.very clever and very well written.Paul D Brazillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12881642426845398389noreply@blogger.com