tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post7570109835131652394..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #5Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58167264526504186962008-03-04T13:07:00.000-05:002008-03-04T13:07:00.000-05:00Run , Jack, run! :)I like how the tree triggered ...Run , Jack, run! :)<BR/><BR/>I like how the tree triggered such detailed memories and physiological response (shivering). I hope they can make it work this time.Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22772972200143426582008-03-04T09:09:00.000-05:002008-03-04T09:09:00.000-05:00His haunted thoughts came through well. He probab...His haunted thoughts came through well. He probably feels like he's seen a ghost.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43423665201506076912008-03-01T11:36:00.000-05:002008-03-01T11:36:00.000-05:00Enjoyed it very well written!Enjoyed it very well written!wrath999https://www.blogger.com/profile/10964105112015979524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33109863490496798112008-02-29T08:33:00.000-05:002008-02-29T08:33:00.000-05:00Thanks again for taking the time to comment. :)Thanks again for taking the time to comment. :)BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64965341594780171992008-02-28T15:26:00.000-05:002008-02-28T15:26:00.000-05:00I couldn't help but think of Kirk and Antonia. A ...I couldn't help but think of Kirk and Antonia. A sweet little love story you've got here!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65226009963350651282008-02-28T11:11:00.000-05:002008-02-28T11:11:00.000-05:00Great story woven beautifully with the seasons. I...Great story woven beautifully with the seasons. I loved the journey Jack took from "all green and fresh" to having a "shattered soul." I hope she's gentle with him second time around.<BR/><BR/>I love a good story, me!JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21716204596078389612008-02-28T02:36:00.000-05:002008-02-28T02:36:00.000-05:00Oh, very nicely done, Bernard!Love the changing of...Oh, very nicely done, Bernard!<BR/>Love the changing of the relationship mirrored by the landscape, the coming of the new. And he'll fall again, oh yes he will. ;)rainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04258822737734173873noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52376575525690961382008-02-24T22:54:00.000-05:002008-02-24T22:54:00.000-05:00"when tree, hillside, and his attitude were all gr..."when tree, hillside, and his attitude were all green and fresh" - haven't we all been there?! Yes, I like how the tree mirrors his place in life - once naive, but a bit barren now...and yet...who is that in the distance?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-62743767658759507152008-02-24T10:07:00.000-05:002008-02-24T10:07:00.000-05:00Like others stated, the use of all available eleme...Like others stated, the use of all available elements of the landscape makes the reading feel like watching a great canvas of time.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3903847500543230952008-02-24T08:56:00.000-05:002008-02-24T08:56:00.000-05:00A slightly whimsical, poignant and hopeful piece o...A slightly whimsical, poignant and hopeful piece of writing, very beautifully done. Your characterisation is powerful.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-361583949940095512008-02-23T10:18:00.000-05:002008-02-23T10:18:00.000-05:00Thanks for the feedback, and no shotgun, pjd. :)Thanks for the feedback, and no shotgun, pjd. :)BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36706866773654198362008-02-23T08:09:00.000-05:002008-02-23T08:09:00.000-05:00Restful and restless at the same time. Nicely done...Restful and restless at the same time. Nicely done.pattinase (abbott)https://www.blogger.com/profile/02916037185235335846noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81563919042609787072008-02-23T06:05:00.000-05:002008-02-23T06:05:00.000-05:00Romantic and hopeful! I love your descriptions!Romantic and hopeful! I love your descriptions!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5098083601356895242008-02-23T01:42:00.000-05:002008-02-23T01:42:00.000-05:00Some lyrical writing here.After just reading the o...Some lyrical writing here.<BR/><BR/>After just reading the one about the strangulation by the stranger, I am wondering if this blond woman on the roan horse at the end is actually bearing down with a loaded and ready shotgun.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60778321595190837182008-02-22T10:35:00.000-05:002008-02-22T10:35:00.000-05:00I am impressed with your use of the entire scene -...I am impressed with your use of the entire scene - the tree, the fence, the skyline. The seasonal imagery is beautifully descriptive. You left not a scrap on the plate. Seconds?Missyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16638784910676212171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39849317456519676882008-02-21T23:33:00.000-05:002008-02-21T23:33:00.000-05:00I love the theme of patient love -- for all time a...I love the theme of patient love -- for all time and all seasons. Someone before me wrote you put a lot of time in 250 words -- that's it exactly.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13746397525313707462008-02-21T18:12:00.000-05:002008-02-21T18:12:00.000-05:00I appreciate all your gracious comments, and for t...I appreciate all your gracious comments, and for taking the time to make them.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73008382467679180542008-02-21T16:23:00.000-05:002008-02-21T16:23:00.000-05:00This reminds a little of the Magnus Mills novel 'T...This reminds a little of the Magnus Mills novel 'The Restraint of Beasts' in a strange way. I like the fact you have brought the fence into play in this story.DBA Lehanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12902739256082564278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24897024845642180202008-02-21T10:55:00.000-05:002008-02-21T10:55:00.000-05:00oh, nice!As if she were a Persephone, a witch of s...oh, nice!<BR/>As if she were a Persephone, a witch of seasons.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41442625197450133722008-02-21T10:32:00.000-05:002008-02-21T10:32:00.000-05:00I agree with the others: the seasonal symbolism is...I agree with the others: the seasonal symbolism is nicely utilized. I hope it works out for them this time.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69027709558789944282008-02-21T08:12:00.000-05:002008-02-21T08:12:00.000-05:00Love how you took us through all the seasons, then...Love how you took us through all the seasons, then back to spring and maybe a new beginning. Nice!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7655531936054668472008-02-21T07:54:00.000-05:002008-02-21T07:54:00.000-05:00You pack a lot of character depth into this small ...You pack a lot of character depth into this small space, which I really like!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20569480886906106192008-02-21T07:08:00.000-05:002008-02-21T07:08:00.000-05:00uh oh... did somebody hit the rewind??????uh oh... did somebody hit the rewind??????paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43298161790796689682008-02-21T06:10:00.000-05:002008-02-21T06:10:00.000-05:00Interesting and VERY descriptive story. I've alway...Interesting and VERY descriptive story. <BR/>I've always wondered how a woman riding on a horse looks like. <BR/>It should be impressive.<BR/>Well done on the story.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28207201507587468862008-02-21T04:14:00.000-05:002008-02-21T04:14:00.000-05:00Jack,Very strong, and evocative of similar times i...Jack,<BR/>Very strong, and evocative of similar times in my life.<BR/>You've put a ton of scene in 250 words!<BR/>relrelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09030572981830789370noreply@blogger.com