tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post7603556367672023723..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #27Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19446344153628080882008-03-04T13:59:00.000-05:002008-03-04T13:59:00.000-05:00What a unique entry! I want to know more about he...What a unique entry! I want to know more about her conscious (awake) life.<BR/><BR/>And you've made me curious about precession... I'm off to learn more about it...Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86009181454705909312008-03-04T09:27:00.000-05:002008-03-04T09:27:00.000-05:00Her unconscious struggle is made to be his conscio...Her unconscious struggle is made to be his conscious one. He is the more cursed, I think. Mesmerizing use of metaphor. High marks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46573395419219588682008-03-03T08:47:00.000-05:002008-03-03T08:47:00.000-05:00Dear Dottie,I read this piece the other day, and I...Dear Dottie,<BR/><BR/>I read this piece the other day, and I found it to be beautiful, but thought I'd sound like a simpleton to just say that...then I woke up in the middle of the night last night and thought of your story - wondering if I were to sleep walk, what would I say to the tree and who would witness it? And yet I knew from your story that the point is one wouldn't know the answers to those questions.<BR/><BR/>Anyway, I may still sound like a simpleton, but I love this story and it has stayed with me. Thanks for writing it!mendyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18441022036761587358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51906630562202268172008-03-02T12:33:00.000-05:002008-03-02T12:33:00.000-05:00So smooth and easy to read. A pleasurable experien...So smooth and easy to read. A pleasurable experience!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4203191603322730782008-03-01T10:00:00.000-05:002008-03-01T10:00:00.000-05:00You are right, Raine, there is uncertainity in the...You are right, Raine, there is uncertainity in the last line, and, Steve, a lot of love, too. Thank you for all of the supportive feedback. Nej emailed me about the period of precession. It's an allusion to the precession of the equinoxes and the sacred tree myth of the Maya. <BR/>I've loved reading everyone's work. Great contest, Jason.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8303622103441451382008-03-01T03:48:00.000-05:002008-03-01T03:48:00.000-05:00A curiously dreamlike story with a very realistic ...A curiously dreamlike story with a very realistic touch. No wasted words. I love the 'certainty' of your writing style--and what I think is a touch of uncertainty in your character's last proclamation:<BR/><BR/><I>Soon spring will arrive, and we will be fine.</I>rainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04258822737734173873noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51999642272633849652008-02-28T19:37:00.000-05:002008-02-28T19:37:00.000-05:00oh i just love where the tree took you... what an ...oh i just love where the tree took you... what an absolutely fresh viewpoint... loved it.paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22988694217718632632008-02-28T12:55:00.000-05:002008-02-28T12:55:00.000-05:00I like the almost mystical take on sleepwalking in...I like the almost mystical take on sleepwalking in such realistic, normal prose. It's one of those finding-a-gem in the banal kinds of pieces. So nice!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72991225862005006892008-02-27T22:23:00.000-05:002008-02-27T22:23:00.000-05:00Dottie,I've made my first entry in Jason's contest...Dottie,<BR/><BR/>I've made my first entry in Jason's contest (#68) and I'm impressed at the quality of the other entries. Yours is especially evocative--I love the reference to Rilke. And I can feel the love in the last paragraph.steve on the slow trainhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18257811143869341854noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52304765343696711502008-02-27T16:39:00.000-05:002008-02-27T16:39:00.000-05:00My partner used to sleepwalk, and reading this rem...My partner used to sleepwalk, and reading this reminded me of that… sleep walking is both creepy and scary for the non sleepwalking person …MickyMchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15144123568538569438noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35540205683867483382008-02-26T17:14:00.000-05:002008-02-26T17:14:00.000-05:00I always look for your entries, Dottie. You have ...I always look for your entries, Dottie. You have a conviction of writing, a style that speaks to me.<BR/><BR/>This is mesmerizing. I really enjoyed it.Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23030155288963843282008-02-26T14:17:00.000-05:002008-02-26T14:17:00.000-05:00This is really nice Dottie - full of mystery and i...This is really nice Dottie - full of mystery and intrigue. I was positively tickled pink by "<I>She may notice her dirty feet or she may not.</I>" This sort of thing happens to me all the time... now you have me wondering! :DAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3700268884978965912008-02-25T20:59:00.000-05:002008-02-25T20:59:00.000-05:00Dottie, I was leaving comments on another story an...Dottie, I was leaving comments on another story and then realized, it was what I enjoy about your writing so I came back here. I like how your stories always feel real. You don't seem to try and dazzle, re-write, create lines like poetry, but you do with these simple stories and without tearing the heck out of it. Hope this makes sense. It's just what I like best about your writing.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29098704881664560432008-02-25T11:26:00.000-05:002008-02-25T11:26:00.000-05:00Thank you for the positive feedback. The moment b...Thank you for the positive feedback. The moment before spring is such a powerful time. In my own life it is usually some combination of muddled despair and absolute unrest. I relate to the sleepwalker and her partner. I often feel like I am both this time of year. It was great to have a photo that captured the tension imbedded in dormancy. The inevitability of waking feels oddly dangerous. <BR/><BR/>Sarah, are you going to submit? I always love your pieces.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84434049424376903802008-02-25T07:58:00.000-05:002008-02-25T07:58:00.000-05:00Really nice writing.Really nice writing.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16435356370732237582008-02-25T07:03:00.000-05:002008-02-25T07:03:00.000-05:00"like the shoulders of a child she needs to make l..."like the shoulders of a child she needs to make listen."<BR/>To me, that line is the key to her dream walking.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44584211482016600622008-02-25T06:25:00.000-05:002008-02-25T06:25:00.000-05:00I was lead into the sotry, I actually felt being t...I was lead into the sotry, I actually felt being there..It's so poetic! I see how this poem inspiredt this piece.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22498570734861610932008-02-25T01:11:00.000-05:002008-02-25T01:11:00.000-05:00ditto bluesugarpoetditto bluesugarpoetPJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22759227758425070782008-02-24T22:43:00.000-05:002008-02-24T22:43:00.000-05:00That was cool! I can see her whispering to the tre...That was cool! I can see her whispering to the tree. I love how she "grips the dormant trunk strongly with both hands, like the shoulders of a child she needs to make listen."Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14439486815605825192008-02-24T20:07:00.000-05:002008-02-24T20:07:00.000-05:00Dottie, I loved your piece. To me, it really broug...Dottie, I loved your piece. To me, it really brought home the idea that each of us desires flight, and that we are all great mysteries, even to ourselves and those who love us. <BR/><BR/>Great inspiration from Rilke. This was a beautiful, evocative story.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39517799882099741692008-02-24T12:11:00.000-05:002008-02-24T12:11:00.000-05:00In case a reader is curious, this story was inspir...In case a reader is curious, this story was inspired by the picture and how it reminded my of a poem by Ranier Maria Rilke. Here is the poem. <BR/>Dottie<BR/><BR/>I love the dark hours of my being.<BR/>My mind deepens into them.<BR/>There I can find, as in old letters,<BR/>the days of my life, already lived,<BR/>and held like a legend, and understood.<BR/> <BR/>Then the knowing comes: I can open<BR/>to another life that's wide and timeless.<BR/> <BR/>So I am sometimes like a tree<BR/>rustling over a gravesite<BR/>and making real the dream<BR/>of the one its living roots<BR/>embrace:<BR/> <BR/>a dream once lost <BR/>among sorrows and songs.<BR/><BR/> ~ Ranier Maria Rilke ~Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11555021701820684422008-02-24T11:05:00.000-05:002008-02-24T11:05:00.000-05:00Good story.Good story.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12912080272060479072008-02-24T10:36:00.000-05:002008-02-24T10:36:00.000-05:00I really enjoyed your story. Having had experience...I really enjoyed your story. Having had experiences with a sleepwalker, it hit close to home. Well done!<BR/><BR/>GeraldineGeraldine https://www.blogger.com/profile/07410019941984295767noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20593199469636201912008-02-24T08:53:00.000-05:002008-02-24T08:53:00.000-05:00What an incredibly evocative piece of writing. Th...What an incredibly evocative piece of writing. The story weaves itself around and between your words. Very lyrical with some very beautiful lines.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19326946164316554872008-02-24T02:53:00.000-05:002008-02-24T02:53:00.000-05:00Nicely constructed and some beautiful lines. I'd ...Nicely constructed and some beautiful lines. I'd love to know what she was dreaming.DBA Lehanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12902739256082564278noreply@blogger.com