tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post7850850376192924186..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #50Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33973138455962622272009-08-01T03:05:11.784-04:002009-08-01T03:05:11.784-04:00Just returned from my hols to find this. Hoorah!Just returned from my hols to find this. Hoorah!Whirlochrehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09846196906206886945noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89294312858857970412009-07-28T10:33:03.439-04:002009-07-28T10:33:03.439-04:00This was a high scorer for me. The voice, the grit...This was a high scorer for me. The voice, the grittiness, the twist--all fantastic. Great job!Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75492999477165795252009-07-26T19:50:36.825-04:002009-07-26T19:50:36.825-04:00Great sense of pace. Action was well balanced wit...Great sense of pace. Action was well balanced with detail. Naughty too.<br /><br />Congratulations on Honorable Mention!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37333462592646878492009-07-24T04:59:04.373-04:002009-07-24T04:59:04.373-04:00Aha! Witty, nifty and whirly.Aha! Witty, nifty and whirly.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2815738455826728352009-07-23T12:40:30.061-04:002009-07-23T12:40:30.061-04:00Well done you, Whirlio!Well done you, Whirlio!JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6404930281660797322009-07-20T17:53:45.686-04:002009-07-20T17:53:45.686-04:00heehee - your heroine is full of power! I love ho...heehee - your heroine is full of power! I love how the broker is under the delusion of being in control... until it's too late.Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56117684368120030242009-07-20T12:16:44.455-04:002009-07-20T12:16:44.455-04:00hehe, maybe next time he'll be more careful.. ...hehe, maybe next time he'll be more careful.. oh wait, next time. Hm. Never mind.Terrihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03158421102740382411noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4210546609952284542009-07-16T16:36:46.888-04:002009-07-16T16:36:46.888-04:00swilling her first sip round her mouth with a soph...<i>swilling her first sip round her mouth with a sophistication clearly honed from years of swallowing.</i><br /><br />You're a bad, bad man Whirl. I could have died from choking so hard on my tea. Loved this!! I love the morality/sleaze dichotomy, the snappy dialogue and the great ending.<br /><br />Fab!JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13560826406885097642009-07-14T13:19:56.695-04:002009-07-14T13:19:56.695-04:00No repeat customers at that brothel. :)No repeat customers at that brothel. :)BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4089388952002446182009-07-14T12:59:44.927-04:002009-07-14T12:59:44.927-04:00What Merry said.
Not quite as surreal as I expect...What Merry said.<br /><br />Not quite as surreal as I expected from you, but the wordplay foreplay was of course delish. And I guess I'm glad you didn't go with werewolves. No one likes those loose hairs that tend to stick just at the back of the throat.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74314898933624156572009-07-13T06:00:19.486-04:002009-07-13T06:00:19.486-04:00Thanks, all.
I did toy with werewolves but hairs ...Thanks, all.<br /><br />I did toy with werewolves but hairs kept clogging up the glass...Whirlochrehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09846196906206886945noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1507066826936978012009-07-13T00:19:07.667-04:002009-07-13T00:19:07.667-04:00The first part had me saying "That's what...The first part had me saying "That's what she said" to myself... all those great turns of phrase.<br /><br />Then... Eeek!<br /><br />Nice and tight. (That's what she said LOL)Sandra Cormierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00231342310371529022noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37674243676504178032009-07-12T22:07:43.474-04:002009-07-12T22:07:43.474-04:00Wonderfully vivid and, ahem, sharp! :)Wonderfully vivid and, ahem, sharp! :)Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64828917330472127712009-07-12T20:22:51.403-04:002009-07-12T20:22:51.403-04:00Love your writing - as always. You have such a dis...Love your writing - as always. You have such a distinctive voice and it's wonderful.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46369780840469932902009-07-12T09:03:59.289-04:002009-07-12T09:03:59.289-04:00I laughed at the end. Very nice! You really had ...I laughed at the end. Very nice! You really had me going there, and I liked the twist.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65487635230650676612009-07-12T06:02:15.756-04:002009-07-12T06:02:15.756-04:00Ooooh. Loved the twist and the whole piece too.
T...Ooooh. Loved the twist and the whole piece too.<br /><br />The fangs in the end made me realize, haven't seen the Koala and her claws around. Where is she? :)<br /><br />Great write up. :PAniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39987141782985106462009-07-12T05:11:56.613-04:002009-07-12T05:11:56.613-04:00Oh cool, a great take and twist on vampiric moral ...Oh cool, a great take and twist on vampiric moral values!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53489441521566008922009-07-12T02:40:57.614-04:002009-07-12T02:40:57.614-04:00Well enjoyed that read. Really does seem like he&#...Well enjoyed that read. Really does seem like he's been suckered. Couldn't see the vampires coming until they did.<br /><br />Nice one mate!<br /><br />Four DinnersThe Preachermanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10224135811862587701noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15087392183245040672009-07-11T21:20:58.908-04:002009-07-11T21:20:58.908-04:00I agree with everyone's comments. Let me just ...I agree with everyone's comments. Let me just add that I liked your opening as well -- the line with "how old?" and her response.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54500438694047423342009-07-11T18:12:30.447-04:002009-07-11T18:12:30.447-04:00Ooooooooh, very nice Whirl! Very nicely done! The ...Ooooooooh, very nice Whirl! Very nicely done! The dialogue was very realistic... almost too realistic... hmmmmmm ;o)Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75440736521370031862009-07-11T16:59:53.379-04:002009-07-11T16:59:53.379-04:00Provocative! I also loved the dialogue and pacing-...Provocative! I also loved the dialogue and pacing--and the vampire twist was a nice surprise!!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46544021397158647582009-07-11T16:51:18.889-04:002009-07-11T16:51:18.889-04:00Cool! I enjoyed this
alexCool! I enjoyed this<br /><br />alexwrath999https://www.blogger.com/profile/10964105112015979524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68798986236950899292009-07-11T16:13:56.709-04:002009-07-11T16:13:56.709-04:00Really nicely done... I didn't see them being ...Really nicely done... I didn't see them being vampires until the very end... I just figured he was getting rolled.Merry Monteleonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09435956005780500310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-30200981388952806522009-07-11T15:19:08.217-04:002009-07-11T15:19:08.217-04:00in your dreams, Whirl, in your dreams.
Seriously,...in your dreams, Whirl, in your dreams.<br /><br />Seriously, this was as well written as I would expect an entry from you to be - tight, well-paced, enough details to get a little of a backstory but not too many to muck up the flow, strong dialogue - well done.<br /><br />Geoff wrote it, didn't he?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80897209953374805192009-07-11T15:13:09.699-04:002009-07-11T15:13:09.699-04:00Vampires as a morality play. Lovely!Vampires as a morality play. Lovely!Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.com